Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 09/17/11 18:07
Chapter: Chapter 1

What a brilliant idea! I love thinking that Arthur made her the clock! Great job!!

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 09/17/11 18:07
Chapter: Chapter 1

What a brilliant idea! I love thinking that Arthur made her the clock! Great job!!

Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione
Date: 09/17/11 0:22
Chapter: Chapter 1

I adore Molly and Arthur as characters and I think it's rather sad that there's so few stories about them... so firstly I loved this story simply because you wrote about them. I also think you really got their characters, particularly when it came to Arthur's shed.

I think you did a great job of balancing the domesticity of this story with the war going on at the time, because of course the war would affect them, but I thought it was good that it didn't take up too much of this story, because the war wouldn't have taken away the difficulty of raising 5 boisterous boys (sorry about the alliteration) and being pregnant at the same time.

I also smiled at everything Fred and George were getting upto, although it might have been nice if the other boys made more of an appearance. Then again, they weren't really central to the plot.

As he gripped her hands he gave them a slight squeeze. They made their way up to their room still holding hands. Just another day in the Weasley household, Molly thought before closing the door behind them. - I thought that was a really sweet ending and rounded the story off well.

I also thought this idea was quite creative - as in how Molly got the clock in the first place. Also I liked your use of "Mollywobbles".

I just had a few nitpicks:

Molly had had her trepidations at letting the boys out of her sight. The war against You-Know-Who had reached a peak and there seemed to be no end in sight. - Perhaps you could change one of the 'sight's, because the repetition doesn't sound great.

She had though his Muggle obsession would have abated after they married. - You missed the 't' on "thought", and I think it would sound better if you wrote "She had thought his Muggle obsession would abate after they married."

“Well I guess that kneazles out of the bag. - you need an apostrophe to make it "kneazle's" (because it's a contraction of "kneazle is") - I liked the originality of the expression though!

The hands were inscribed with his, hers and Bills’ names - it should be Bill's.

Anyway, sorry that my nitpicks took up so much of this review... they're really just tiny things which could be easily fixed and would make the story flow better. But all the big things, like character and plot, were really great.

~Katrina

Reviewer: mgle_teacher
Date: 09/16/11 16:49
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hi. I validated your story just a couple of minutes ago. I wanted to tell you that I greatly enjoyed this, and I was pleasantly surprised by how well-written this was and how thoughtful it was as well. I don't particularly enjoy Arthur/Molly or Molly's character, but you've managed to make her 'like-able.' Thanks! I've recc'ed your story over at my LJ to my friends. Hopefully you get more reviews for this lovely piece.

Author's Response: Thanks for the praise! I generally write Ron/Hermione but I wanted to challenge myself a little bit this time. Molly as a character is definitely a hard one to get right and I'm glad I was able to do that. Thanks again.

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