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Reviews For Inner Demons

Name: LunaLee22 (Signed) · Date: 09/01/15 23:39 · For: Free
Beautiful story and felt true to the characters. Definitely one of my favorites.

Author's Response: Wow - thank you so much! This means a lot! xx Ariana

Name: roni2012 (Signed) · Date: 04/11/15 2:08 · For: Free
love it!! i feel for katie and draco's demons! they both overcame so much before and during the war!! an interresting pairing!!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much! One of my favorite themes to explore was how everyone coped after the war - and how both sides probably dealt with some very similar things. Thank you for leaving a review! xx Ariana

Name: Angelicmichelle (Signed) · Date: 03/13/14 22:05 · For: Release
So so so so so good! like you have no idea i just totally became a fan im like crying! this is so beautifully written!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Reviews like these keep me smiling for days on end :). I am so happy you enjoyed the story. Thank you again, xx Ariana

Name: Daenerys_bella_girl (Signed) · Date: 08/29/13 1:12 · For: Free
Wow. I love it!

Author's Response: I am so happy to hear that! Thank you for the review. xx Ariana

Name: WeasleyMom (Signed) · Date: 10/02/12 20:17 · For: Release
Ariana! Good grief, girl, FOUR??? ;) Hehe, I jest, of course. And I am completely thrilled for you, as you are easily one of the best (and my favorite) writers on this site. Without revealing my categories, I must confess to having read several of your stories over the last weeks, and having enjoyed every moment of it immensely. I think I must miss a lot on the most recents page, or perhaps I don't have time just at the moment, and then I forget. Either way, I missed a lot.

I will review each of your winning fics over the next few days, but I thought I would start with this one. The bar is high for Draco/Katie, as I've only seen it done well once (Julia's Burning for Revenge). Until now. This was just so, so good! They are really an intriguing pair because of the necklace between them, and the whole of sixth year really. I imagine Draco feels guilty, and Katie must have a lot of feeling on it as well. So there was a lot there to build upon emotionally, and yet, you gave us so much more than that by adding important (not implausible) details to their backstory. I won't specify as I'm sure some folks read the reviews first, and I don't want to spoil them, but the reason Katie is grieving so hard in this fic, and the specifics of Draco's guilt... brilliant choices, for both of them! I think these things sealed their connection and made this fic as powerful as it could possibly be.

I also didnt' expect a story in this category to end on a hopeful note, but I thought it was the perfect end, just what I was hoping for.

Julia made me consider this pairing ages ago, and now you've made me wish it was canon. Well done. And congratulations!!!


Author's Response: Thank you Lori! This means so much coming from you -- your writing is just so classically beautiful.

I didn't think this story would do well in the QSQs, because it sort of floated off the radar after it was posted. I think the nicest compliment is comparing this to anything Julia's written (even though I haven't read her Draco/Katie yet…I'll put that on my ever-growing list) -- thank you so much. I am so happy you liked it; it wasn't a pairing I had ever considered until I got Jess's prompts for the SPEW Summer Swap. My main hope for this was to give Draco a slight redemption, because I couldn't stand him in the books, so his guilt over you-know-what was meant too create more empathy towards him (reverse-psychology style :D).

Thank you again for this review, and the congratulations! xx Ariana

Name: harry4lif (Signed) · Date: 07/26/12 18:43 · For: Release
I think it should be a crime that this story doesn’t have more reviews. Someone recommended I read this, and I am so glad I did. I don’t usually read anything with Draco, because of how he’s portrayed in the book, but I find myself actually sympathizing for him. And I definitely don’t read this ship usually, which I’m starting to change my mind about.

I love that you took two people who really shouldn’t work, and put them together in such a way that it’s believable and I find myself wondering if this really happened. I never gave much thought to what might have happened to Draco after all was said and done, except for that snippet we saw of him in the epilogue. I never really thought that he might be regretting what he had done, and wishing things were different. After all, the stories just kind of made Draco seem like a real tool and I never liked him since he was always so mean to my favorite characters. But, you opened my eyes and showed me that he really is a character who has emotions and feelings and that maybe he really didn’t want to do things that Voldemort forced him to do.

I was also warned that this was a bit of a dark story. I can definitely see where that came from with all of the thoughts of the war and such, but I think that the darkness really gave a helping hand to making this story even more amazing. I’ve always associated Draco with darkness, though not Katie really. The final battle I do associate with some darkness though, so I guess that would make me think differently with Katie. I don’t know if that makes any sense at all there. I guess I’m just trying to say that the darkness really makes this believable. I don’t know if I would have ever in a million years believed that the two of them would get together if the story was a light and happy one. I mean, I don’t see what she could possibly see in him. But the dark tone in this story really makes the couple seem believable to me. I mean, anything can happen when you’re mourning something that happened, and you’re just trying to feel something, anything, to escape the pain.

The emotion just bleeds into this story though. It’s so spot on and accurate and I can feel what they’re both feeling. I can feel the loss of Fred for Katie, and I can feel the guilt that Draco has been carrying around with him since his sixth year. Reading the story it’s almost like I was drowning in pain and guilt also. You really brought that emotion to life which as a reader I absolutely adore.

I wonder how this story might have panned out if it was longer. I don’t know if the two of them would ever stand the test of time, but I find myself hoping that they would. They complement each other perfectly, and they are what each other needs, especially at the present moment, which leads me to believe that maybe they wouldn’t have stood the test of time. I mean, in the story they’re both in pain and both have things that they want to forget. Being together makes the pain fade for a while, and clears their mind enough to get through the day. But what happens when they aren’t in pain anymore? Will they stay together? Or was it only something that they both needed to heal? I find myself asking all of these questions and more as your story came to an end.

A fantastic story. I think you might have changed my mind about this ship, and I might just go and see if there are anymore that I want to read.


Author's Response: Wow. Thank you so, so much for this beautiful, thorough review! I didn't think this story would be getting many more (if any) reviews, so it was a lovely surprise to see you left one. I am so glad this story changed your mind about Draco - in the books, I can't stand how he acts, but I feel like there is an opening for redemption in fan fiction because it's difficult to believe a person can be *all* bad. I agree that it is definitely a dark story, but I am happy to hear that it didn't mar the pairing for you. I might write more Draco/Katie in the (much later) future; it was definitely an interesting pairing to think about. Thank you again for leaving this incredibly well-written review, it's made my day :). xx Ariana

Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 2:28 · For: Free
You know what? Forget what I said in the previous review. I no longer care how they met when you write their present so, so … ‘Deliciously’ is the wrong choice of word, but I seriously can’t come up with the appropriate adjective. All I know is that this is one of the best things I have ever read. It leaves me cold and numb in a warm, very warm October afternoon.

It’s the way you put things:

The apology felt fleshy and raw in his mouth.
The need was a thousand times greater than any want.
His chest felt odd; he still had the pain but it was a buzzing sort of pain that drifted around and he couldn’t feel it in the same place twice.
The forgiveness bled through his skin and he felt free.

Utterly beautiful and heartbreaking. I can empathize with him, his situation, his helplessness so well.

The worst thing is, no matter how badly I want them to work out, I can see it not happening. No, this hasn’t much to do with canon. I can see that in spite of the way they complement each other here, this would never be wholesome enough to stand the test of time. :/ That leaves me feeling hollow.

This has certainly left me in a strange mood, but I assure you that is a compliment. I love fics which can affect me emotionally, and yours definitely did. Great work, and I really hope it gets the appreciation it so deserves.


Author's Response: Natalieeeeeeee! You are such the best. Your reviews more than make up for the little 0 I've been staring at for a month :). It makes me so, so glad to know that you actually enjoyed this story, and that the descriptions weren't confusing or overdone.

Like you, I don't see this lasting, either. I think it's more of a comfort thing; they helped each other survive the aftermath of the Battle and now they're scared to be with anyone else. And I can't believe I forgot to write their beginningI think there is a brief mention of them meeting drunk at the Leaky in the first chapter but I cba to check ;). I am sorry it left you feeling cold and empty, but I am happy you liked it anyway! xx Ariana

Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 10/02/11 2:09 · For: Release
I’ll tell you what is wrong with the world: this story not having any reviews. What in the name of Merlin’s most baggy Y-fronts is going on? I personally haven’t checked the Most Recent for ages and I keep missing flist stories, and neither do I subscribe to fav authors (for embarrassing reasons I don’t want to mention here hahaha), so I missed this. >.< >.< I’d have never read this if Jess hadn’t mentioned it on the LS. This is so bloody unfair.

Anyway, I’m here to correct this stupidity. I shall start with a confession: I don’t read Draco/Katie. :O I know it’s a rather popular ship, but just like Dramione and Harmony, I was never quite sold on the idea. I’ve come to realise that the right kind of story can convince me, and this definitely changed my mind about the ship.

You wrote their pain so well here. Their connection exists for a reason: it’s the nightmare, the horror of having participated in something that has changed their life forever. And they aren’t in love, no, but they are trying their best to fill that emptiness somehow, and in their mutual hurt and loss and even guilt, they are somehow – somehow – managing to do it.

Draco’s confession surprised me at first. I was under the impression that Colin died in the grounds, as Oliver and Neville are carrying his body back inside the castle in the book. Reading back, I found you didn’t actually say he died in the castle, so it’s a moot point. However, I think you’ve used this very effectively. Draco is directly responsible for somebody’s death. It was the same with Dumbledore, except that they’d be under the impression that Snape took care of that. With Colin, it’s different. He does it without planning, he does it unknowingly. He doesn’t even want Colin to die. The sense of guilt, therefore, is much heavier. It’s no wonder he’s shaken to the core.

Katie’s grief, on the other hand. Gods. I can’t imagine the horror of losing anyone in a battle/any situation. Of course, it would deaden her. Of course, she’d seek to fulfill that loss somehow. Your writing bled with her sorrow, it really did. There is one line in particular that I can’t get rid of: She wished she could have lost her body instead of herself. That is so sad I don’t even know how to express it.

One thing I’d have liked to see was how these two actually met, but I see there’s one more chapter to go. I shall carry on reading! Brilliant writing, though, Ariana.

Author's Response: Yay! That was very sweet of Jess to put this on LS and of you to review it . Thank you for this gorgeously long and detailed and lovely review! I shall attempt to give it an adequate response.

I didn't write Katie/Draco before this, I really only decided on this ship because I've written too many Susan/Theos for Jess and I wanted to try something different. I'm glad you liked it! I must admit I am s*** at remembering canon facts sothe Colin thing might be an actual error o.O. Maybe I'll add something in about it being outdoors. I do feel bad for Draco at that part, actually, even though Colin is one of my favorite characters and Draco is such a coward it's not even funny. Like you said though, he didn't mean it, and it's only afterwards that he realizes the price of keeping himself safe.

I forget if I say how they met in the next chapteruh oh :) . Ha ha I'll go read your next review and see! Thank you so, so much again Natalie! xx Ariana

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