That was SO cute! Loved it
This was brilliant!! Love it!! Great job!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
Wow! That had a really nice ending. I was smiling through the last 2/3 of the story, so good job! :)
Author's Response: Thank you! I am glad you enjoyed it!
This was a very sweet story and I think you did a great job with Arthur. I think you're right, people do sometimes view him as a bit slow, but I think he's just different to Molly, and I think he intuitively understands his children - particularly his sons - in a way she doesn't always. And that really came through here, but there was enough of the sweet, Muggle-loving man as well.
I liked how you wandered back and forth in time through this story - as in, occasionally you'd return to the present, and then go back again - it worked really well for a reflective story like this.
I think Ginny is very much Daddy's little princess, and I think she knows it, and that really came across in this, particularly in how Arthur didn't want to tell Molly or anyone about the storybook. He couldn’t help but feel slightly left out as he considered that it was not his secret to share. I think this line really highlighted what it's like for Arthur to lose his little girl to someone else.
I also loved that Arthur changed the hair colour of the princess' hair to be red.
It seems, however, that Ginny had made sure that there was no question that the forgotten princess’s hair was still a shade of fiery red. That was a beautiful finish, although I would delete the "forgotten", because it seems quite clear that neither the story nor the special relationship they shared have been forgotten.
This was sweet and well-written, enjoyable story. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you! Looking back, I think the 'forgotten' was referring more to the story of Rapunzel than the relationship, but since the meaning doesn't come across clearly in that context, I'll edit that part to make it fit. Thanks for pointing it out! :]
I love this story! I think your portrayal of Arthur is perfect and true to the character and I love how the storybook was changed to suit Ginny. Good job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I was very picky with how I portrayed Arthur - it is good to hear that he is, in fact, believable in this light :]