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Name: harry4lif (Signed) · Date: 07/26/12 18:51 · For: Prologue: The Shrieking Shack
Marauders must be my overall favorite genre. Anything concerning them at all I love to read. So reading this has been a pleasure.

I think that you have the characters spot on in their early years. Honestly they’re like I pictured them. I see why Moony might be hesitant to show the shrieking shack to his friends, since he knows that he has destroyed it somewhat. After all, he’s the reason that everyone thinks it’s haunted now, so I’d hope he realizes that he tends to destroy things every month.

I love the description at the beginning of the story. I always think that it can be really important to the overall story. So, the one thing I will say in critique is I think that towards the end could have done with some more of it. I mean, the beginning is basically pure description of the house and how people in the town feel about it, and then once we’re with the Marauders in the house, it’s basically just dialogue. Dialogue is good, but description really would have made the inside of the house come to life for me.

Good job overall!

~Alyssa


Name: StarsApartlover (Signed) · Date: 08/29/11 7:28 · For: Prologue: The Shrieking Shack
Good chapter. Keep up with the good work. Hope to see the next chapter soon.


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