Reviews For Mr Ted's Picnic
Reviewer: Snowlily
Date: 08/17/11 12:32
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh, that was impossibly sweet and cute and it made me want more. =) Please do write more.

Author's Response: I have many, many short stories at another site, but it will take me some time to post them here. A lot of them aren't appropriate for this site (no, not like that; no, not like that either). Most of what I write is dark and angsty, so this was a lot of fun to write. Glad you enjoyed it.

Reviewer: locanena
Date: 08/13/11 14:01
Chapter: Chapter 1


Author's Response: thanks.

Reviewer: mzap
Date: 08/13/11 12:17
Chapter: Chapter 1

Aww, that was very cute! I always like seeing the characters as little kids and this idea was so creative! You did a wonderful job with the characters and I definitely liked the ending with Rose performing magic. Great job!

Author's Response: Glad you enjoyed it. I had a lot of fun writing it. You're right that you don't often see the characters as very little children. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: WeasleyMom
Date: 08/13/11 6:27
Chapter: Chapter 1

Ooh... what a wonderful expression of Rose's first use of magic! I enjoyed reading this very much. It's well-written and your characterization of Hermione (and Ron, what little there was) was good.

I can relate a little bit. I, too, have a daughter who cannot sleep without her bear, but we are less formal around here... we just call him Teddy. ;)

Nice little one-shot!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review and the validation that Hermione and Rose were in character. It's important to me to keep the characters in character and canon in their reactions, even when I write an AU story. I'm so glad you liked this.

Reviewer: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor
Date: 08/13/11 2:10
Chapter: Chapter 1

This was a really sweet story. Hermione was really well-characterised in this, as well. It is quite her to treat her daughter's concerns with respect and not to just roll over and tell her to go back to bed.

The actual events in the story were lovely. It had a Toy Story feel to it, and I like that each of the dolls had a distinct mannerism. Mr Ted was a bit gluttonous, while Maggie was a giver and the Harpy doll a problem solver.

I really like the overall concept, and your writing really lent it a bedtime story. It's nice to find little bits like this, tucked into the Potterverse, giving us a picture of how magical little girls go about a late night snack. Very charming. :)


Author's Response: Thank you so much for the very kind words; I appreciate them. I'm glad you enjoyed the sweet nature of this and I'm especially glad that you thought that Hermione was IC. I picture my own Teddy for Mr Ted, a long, tall white bear with the oreo cookie eyes that I described in the story. Glad you enjoyed this and thank you so much for the review.

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