Reviews For The House Cup
Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 10/02/12 21:08
Chapter: The House Cup

My goodness! I had so much fun reading this!!!! :)

I can't fault your good humor, but I do want to point out the third stanza- I think that "we all can just share" should be in quotation marks, because otherwise, it seems strange that the line right below has them and it's nowhere else when people are talking. Also, for that same portion, I think the rhythm would work better if it read as "we can all just share" instead of the "all can," which was a little hard to enunciate, because of how people would normally speak those words.

Overall, I had a great time reading this! What a great idea! Sometimes, the best writing comes from silly things. :)

~Nagini Riddle

Author's Response: Thank you :) I agree with your edit, thanks for the suggestion. I loved writing this silly bit of fluff :)

Reviewer: Accio Goblet
Date: 08/05/11 11:34
Chapter: The House Cup

I usually don't appreciate poetry, but I loved this bit.

Author's Response: I am very glad to hear it, and so are the animals :)

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