Reviewer: The Dark Lords Right Hand
Date: 11/03/11 23:11
Chapter: Chapter 25 - Nineteen Years Later

Thank you so much for providing a month or so of frequent updates to a very good story! You're writing is in a very similar style to the actual books, which made it an extremely good read. I may have had a few problems with the coying out of chapters, but the final lot of copying worked much better wih Neville's additions (especially as it seemed to be an extension of the original due to your similar styles). Neville was great, and the epilogue was a brilliant idea. I assumed you would put one in, but feared it might be on the platform for some reason... This worked really well, and it was completely natural.

Reviewer: peacefinderangel23
Date: 11/02/11 18:53
Chapter: Chapter 1 - New Times

it was a good story.. although i wished you had gone more into detail.. cuz you really had a handle on the characters.. oh except two things.. 1) hannah abbot was not at hogwarts.. she was wrkg at the leaky cauldron.. and 2) zacharias smith was NOT a loyal DA member.. he was a bloody coward and escaped b4 the battle even began... other thn tht.. it was over all pretty good... i hope you get more experience and write more stories.. wish you the best :)

Reviewer: The Dark Lords Right Hand
Date: 10/29/11 22:31
Chapter: Chapter 22 - Harry's Last Request

It was nice that you gave Lupin and Tonks proper death scenes, but the tension never really built to the level one would expect for the final battle for the wizarding world. However, what you do have is very realistic and continues to fit perfectly in parallel with the story from Harry's POV.

Reviewer: lunar-eclipse
Date: 10/29/11 3:11
Chapter: Chapter 22 - Harry's Last Request

So good...

Reviewer: Accio_Chocolate
Date: 10/20/11 22:01
Chapter: Chapter 20 - Backup

I always love reading a new chapter when you update! Seeing things from Neville's POV gives a new twist on the horror at Hogwarts, just want to point out that Fleur is a Weasley now that she's married to Bill, unless she didn't change her name.

Reviewer: zorro snape
Date: 10/20/11 13:03
Chapter: Chapter 20 - Backup

graet chapter :)

Reviewer: The Dark Lords Right Hand
Date: 10/16/11 21:17
Chapter: Chapter 19 - Misunderstanding

I don't think is was necessary to copy these two chapters into the story, since we all know them well enough. A short paragraph sumarising is as the narrator would probably have worked fine.

Reviewer: zorro snape
Date: 10/12/11 12:31
Chapter: Chapter 18 - Catch Up

great story i wish to read about Snape and Harry :)

Reviewer: Mom2Rose
Date: 10/03/11 21:07
Chapter: Chapter 15 - Tunnel of Hunger

Great title.
"Tomatoes for eyes..."Go Gran!

Reviewer: Mom2Rose
Date: 10/03/11 20:49
Chapter: Chapter 13 - Desire

Figured his parents would be there, but didn't think about the sword.
Always wandered how people left the chamber :p Although, wouldn't it have been a short cut if Voldy/Quirrell tried it?

Reviewer: Mom2Rose
Date: 10/03/11 20:41
Chapter: Chapter 12 - Christmas News

I thought it odd Neville would have stayed for the holiday, but I'm glad he did. Can't wait to see what you think he'd see inthe mirror. Curious to know, though, why some of the items were left and others not (no potion bottles or chess pieces, but Quirrel's turban remained).
Intereting way for Neville to find out about Luna, too.

Reviewer: Mom2Rose
Date: 10/03/11 10:04
Chapter: Chapter 4 - Muggle Studies

I liked that Neville didn't just tear up the poster of Harry. Great Muggles Studies class...if youre anti-Muggles.

Reviewer: Mom2Rose
Date: 10/03/11 9:41
Chapter: Chapter 2 - The Silent Song

Poor first years. Would the hat have espoused more on unity, or even let students know they were still safe with Snape?

Reviewer: Mom2Rose
Date: 10/03/11 8:54
Chapter: Chapter 1 - New Times

That was a good and informative start. I look forward to reading the story through Neville's POV.

Reviewer: hpfan25
Date: 09/17/11 19:25
Chapter: Chapter 12 - Christmas News

Ah! Neville has found the Mirror of Erised! That's so exciting! And such a good idea, too! This story is fantastic, please no that while I can't always leave a review, that I read this story the day that it updates, so please don't ever give up on me, I've always wanted to read a story about the times at Hogwarts during the year of the Carrows. Thank you for writing this!

Reviewer: The Dark Lords Right Hand
Date: 09/17/11 14:24
Chapter: Chapter 12 - Christmas News

The story is amazing, and you've completely captured the characters. The situation you've created is ridiculously realistic, but its a shame you havn't further developed it. You've set up a situation perfectly, but move through it far too quickly. Put more events and details into it, as a story this good easily merits chapters much longer and further developed than this.

Reviewer: Arial Felchem
Date: 09/16/11 18:13
Chapter: Chapter 12 - Christmas News

oooo good chapter! I love the idea of Neville stumbling into the chambers from Sorcerer's Stone. Can't wait to learn what he'll see in the Mirror of Erised! The part where they learn about Luna was really well done, too, Neville's reaction seemed very true to his character.

Reviewer: MalchomMcGonagall
Date: 09/15/11 23:48
Chapter: Chapter 11 - Escaping the Dungeon

Excellent story! please keep updating it, I'll be looking for new chapters.

Reviewer: Evanna13
Date: 09/12/11 12:15
Chapter: Chapter 9 - Reflection

you should upload one every day. ive been going crazy since you last uploaded. please upload soon :)

Author's Response: Chapter 10's been on hold for a while now, I hope it comes up soon! :)

Reviewer: The Dark Lords Right Hand
Date: 09/07/11 14:38
Chapter: Chapter 9 - Reflection

I love the storyline you've created, and how convincing the characters are. It's very believable and entertaining, although if anything, the chapters are a little short and could have more detail/events in them.

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