WOW! This is the BEST poem that I've read on here. Most of them get so vague and abstract and boring, I always end up disappointed. This was great!! It paints the perfect picture and the words flow so smoothly and easily. I love the last line. Great work!! :)
There are two of your poems that touch on the heroism of the characters that I have yet to review. This is one of them.
Heroism in writing is something that appeals to me very deeply. This is even more true if the character has revealed a deep-seated flaw or mistake in judgement somewhere in his or her past. It's a theme I love - a flawed human being rises above his failings and saves the day - even if he must sacrifice himself to do it.
You've captured this perfectly. All of Dumbledore's maneuvering, treating those around him like chess pieces, are done so that evil can be thrown down and all those chess pieces can be saved. In the end, it was about the greater good, and Dumbledore faces his own fate unflinchingly to bring that greater good about. You capture the heroism, the doubt (his own and the doubt of those around him) and ultimately you foreshadow the final victory over the Dark Lord.
What a powerful piece of work.
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you were touched by it. I tried to capture the same flavor of the moment, and of his life, that JK inspired in the books. I feel the actors, both Gambon and Rickman, did a wonderful job onscreen of projecting so much of the "behind the scenes" emotions, with only thier eyes.
What a wonderful poem! You provided such a good voice to dumbledore...it fully represented his character and personality. I loved it!
Author's Response: I am so thrilled you liked it. Yes, this poem came out very nicely and felt very in character when I was writing it. Poetry comes very easily for me, which I am very thankful for. I sort of get into character, I guess the same way an actor does, and the poem seems to write itself for the most part. Sometimes, I have to struggle with the rhyming, but sometimes, as in this case, the poem simply flows like it is something I'm remembering instead of creating. Those always come out the best.
I usually don't read the poetry on MNFF, but your summary caught my eye. Lovely job. I think you cauptured the sorrow and the resolve and the hope all so well. My particular favorite:
It shaped my life, my one mistake. One tragic day left such lasting ache. But it was long ago, an aging loss. I'll see her when the veil I cross.
Hope you continue to post more!
Author's Response: Thank you for your wonderful review. Yes, I was going exactly for all of that... Dumbledore's pain, and his resolve in his plan, and most of all his undieing hope. The end especially I wanted to feel like Fawke's song inspired, both melancholy and hopeful.
I'm glad you liked that verse. I wanted the poem, like the book did, to show Dumbledore as flawed and human, and to mention his pain regarding Ariana. It would be interesting to see him meet her again in the "beyond place".
I will definitely post more. More are in fact already in queue, so be sure to look for them :)
WOW. That was really good. There's sooo many missing moments in the books. You picked a good one to explore. Nice job.
Author's Response: Thank you. I agree, there are so many unfinished moments to explore. The books are almost entirely in Harry's POV so the other characters have so many wonderful possibilities. I am so glad you liked it :)
oh my.. I'm completely lost for words.. *sniff*
You have written it so well. I do not read poetry but its summary made me do so.. this was really touching,. explaining Dumbledore's feelings in the form of a poem. I'm adding it to my favorities :)
Author's Response: I am so pleased to hear your review. Always glad to see someone gain an appreciation for the finer art of poetry. :)