Reviewer: Emilia
Date: 08/08/11 4:52
Chapter: The Flowers

Beautiful story, each word crafted to perfection

Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione
Date: 07/07/11 0:39
Chapter: The Flowers

Your writing is wonderful and the whole idea of this story is just breathtaking. I can't think of a story that embodies what Dumbledore (at least I think it's him) says in one of the books... something along the lines of 'those who we love never leave us'. Well that's probably quoted wrong, but anyway, this story had a really strong sense of that.

I loved how it drifted from her memories of when she was alive into her death seemlessly, because this story is really about a mother and her son. Some of the ideas in this story almost seemed a bit cliched, for example the line You will go to the ends of the earth and defy all that you can to keep your child safe from harm. But it didn't feel at all cliched or sentimental - it almost made me want to cry and it felt like you were tapping into a really deep emotion. (If that makes any sense.)

Your writing and imagery and just the way you express yourself is really beautiful - there's almost something poetic about it and I had such a vivid image of everything you described in this story. The idea of the flower collector was beautiful, and the last line of the story really tied in that and just summarised the tone and feel of the whole story.

I just noticed - in the third last paragraph you've written "his once bulky frame barley makes..." instead of "barely".

I think you really grasped Tonks in this story - particularly in these two lines.
We would sit on his bed at night talking until his grandmother would call out to be quiet. We would giggle together knowing that she wasn’t really mad. and
I would reassure him that it was okay to be different, that the world would be boring if everyone were the same.
I think those line really show her character from canon - slightly mischievous and always determined to be different.

~Katrina

Author's Response:

Thank you Katrina (I went and fixed that typo ;~) .....This was orginally written about 4 years ago and was up as part of a competition but I can't even remember what it was.  My son is 12 now :~0...but the story still fits.  When I write something that I have knowledge of it makes it flow much better.  I have another one written in a similar style but it didn't get very forable reviews because it shows Hermione at a low point in her life and thats all the readers looked at.  Im slowly adding all my stories back to the site after taken them down for a while.  I look forward to sitting down and reading your stories too.

~Kristy

Reviewer: Snowlily
Date: 07/04/11 13:06
Chapter: The Flowers

That was very sweet, but very strange. =) I enjoyed it very much.

Author's Response:

Thank you for reading it.  Most of my stories are a little different than what you usually see here, written more from a parents point of view.  I have one up you might like like if you enjoy strange, The Pied Piper of the Black Florest.

~Kristy

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