I loved this chapter :) There's a sort of melancholy feel throughout it which seems to fit in with all of the characters. And the way you portray the friendship between the marauders is just perfect!
I am especially intrigued by Sirius and this mysterious... Slytherin?
Can't wait for the next one :D
oh it was realy gr8.and sad.it's sooo very sad when you read it. but not a bad sad you know.i realy understand james' loneliness that's why.please update soon. :D
Ohhh... everything was heartbreaking but very very romantic at the same time in this chapter..
I loved the prank - and Dumbledore's addition of the pumpkin seeds. I quite feel sorry for James. He's lonely and overstressed by school, Head Boy responsibilites and Quidditch. Lily can't have it both ways - she can't be mad at James. He is doing exactly as she asked. This chapter started out cheerful and finished up rather sad (again). I am glad that James and Cynthia recognized that they were just friends. James and Lily's road to happiness is certainly rocky in this tale! Thank you for the update!.
*Her green eyes bright in anger*
I can imagine why she was angry but I do not want to. xD
It was a very nice chapter, please keep on as nice as you have gone so far.
this story isovely.lily has no right to b angry at james.update soon please.you're a great author :D
No no no! Why is she angry with him now? Come on, Lily, stop being horrible and wake up to the fact that Prongs is lovely.
*sigh* This is a glorious fic. I love every second of it, but was especially impressed with Dumbledore and Remus. Yes, I just adore your Remus - he just feels so right.
The moment when James thought about his mum was so touching. I admit to my heart melting just a bit at his obvious sorrow.
You do realise that if you don;t complete this story, I will have to Crucio you.
Just sayin' ~Carole~
PS: What's wrong with you? James didn't get beaten up? Are you developing a conscience?
Lily and James seem further apart than ever at the end of this chapter - rather sad! " And you've ended it." That phrase struck a particularly melancholy note in me. Even the passage with Severus was sad - a lost friendship. Thanks for the update - they can't all be sunshine and light. I look forward to the next one as always.
Author's Response: Oooh, you've picked up on a key line - the "And you've ended it." I'm so glad that resonated with you, I found it very poignant as well. You are right, they can't all be sunshine and light - this one was a bit more shadowed, wasn't it? The next one shouldn't be too long...and will just continue to complicate things. Thanks again for the review! ~Gina :)
oh my god!it was sooooooo wonderful.the whole chapter.and i cant put my finger on a special part.please update soon.
This was so wonderful! Please upload when you can!
awww, this is a lovely chapter, but also pretty sad.
"You started it!" she called back, knowing it was immature. He turned back to her, his head cocked sideways as he looked up at her. "And you've ended it. 'Night, Lily." He walked away, leaving her confused once more. She thought his shoulders seemed a bit more slumped, but perhaps she was only imagining it. She decided to give it one last try. That conversation there is really poignant and I'm really sad for James. Hmm, speaking of James - you've hurt him again! really, Gina, I thought you had a crush on the guy and yet he's suffering again *sigh*. Natalie will not be happy.
The conversation with Snape was great. I find it unlikely they never spoke again as they'd bump into each other and it must be hard giving up that habit after everything they shared, even after the Mudblood incident.
Lily really is getting het up by Anastasia - ha ha ha - get over it love!
Right, get on with the next chapter. I need my Marauder J/L fix.
Author's Response: Hm, yes, there are some sad things, left unsaid, I suppose. I'm glad you picked that out of their conversations. And I'm glad you didn't find Snape too random. I agree, they must have had some contact, and I'm sure it was hard for them. Thank you so much for the lovely review. I've just sent Lea the next chapter but I'm worried it won't live up to expectations after the amazing reviews from you and Lori! I hope you continue to enjoy where this tale goes - thanks again! ~Gina :)
Duuuuuuuddddeee. This is my favorite chapter so far, easily. Just, wow. Way to get into her head, Gina. I've read a lot of J/L, all from writers who do it very well (yourself included, obviously), but I'm not sure I've ever felt so connected to Lily. Seems somehow that I always relate more to James, as she usually comes off a little aloof and hard for me to relate to. But this was really brilliant. First, I loved the scene with Snape--you got him perfectly, and that is really hard to do. I felt like I was watching the scene unfold, so few words being actually spoken between them, and yet LOADS of important emotion and history swirling under the surface, particularly for Lily. I like how he asked her about her year and she answered predictibly, but you show us how fake it all is. And i suspect they both knew it. So that was a great bit, but then... oh, JAMES, how I love him when you are the writer. :D Your banter is glorious here because it's not really banter, is it? It's everything real that is going on between them, cloaked in witty banter while both of them acknowledge what is really going on. That probably didn't make any sense, but you know what I mean. There was a weight to their toying with each other, and I was truly holding my breath when he backed her up physically, challenging her. I wanted him to kiss her so bad! But you are a much better writer than that, so I guess I'll have to wait. *sigh* Then end was perfect as well, really weighty and heartbreaking. Your James is drool-worthy as always, but your Lily is just a revelation to me... really enjoying being in her head this time around. I hope the next update is just as quick as this one was. I'm beyond hooked. Well done!
Author's Response: Oh Lori, wowowowow. Thank you so much for the amazing review! You are going to give me a big head, lol! I'm so glad that these two are coming off well. And that you liked Snape - I was worried that might be out of the blue, but he showed up and wouldn't leave, lol. And then James - I can just picture that bit with him backing her up, can't you? Hee hee. I'm glad you enjoyed the end, that's another bit I can see very clearly. Shoot, now I hope the other chapters live up to this review, lol! Thanks again, Lori! ~Gina :)
I love the story and love this chapter! Your a very gifted writer!
Wow that chapter was amazing! to echo the reviews of others, I love the dynamics between Lily and James; thier joint ignorance of their attraction to each other is frustrating but makes for addicitive reading- and I just want to shake the two of them out of their oblivious state!
I'm also enjoying how you're devoting time to devloping the OCs in this fic, the over eager and forceful Anastasia is great! Basically, I know this is cheesy, but it is definitely the highltigh of my day when I log on and you've treated us to another chapter! My only undue criticism is that the chapters are too short!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review! I'm so glad you enjoyed this chapter and that the OCs aren't driving you mad, lol. I appreciate the review and hope you enjoy the rest! ~Gina :)
Awww, noooo, Madam Pomfrey spoils the moment. Gina, that was an amazing chapter. The flashback to Hogsmeade lived far beyond the high expectations that I had for it. I'm so entranced with this story. It is superb. I think I particulalrly like Remus in this. Too often it's Sirius and James together, but here Remus has a much more prominent role.
I like your OC's - Anastasia is making me laugh because I think I've known a few girls like her. Mark is lovely, but I feel a bit sorry for him. he's been dealt a marked hand given what we know of James and Lily.
Keep writing!!!!! hee hee ~Carole~
Author's Response: Oooh, yes - I feel bad for Mark too. Not Anastasia. Glad you like Remus, not sure how he took the lead other than he probably spent a bit more time with James seventh year since he was a prefect and James was Head Boy. And Sirius is off with someone else who may or may not appear (and no, it's not you, lol) I'm so very glad the Hogsmeade bit lived up to your expectations. I'm still not entirely sure if this was the place for it, but this is where it put itself. It will be fun to write someday. :) Thanks so much for continuing to read this - and of course I'm going to keep writing! I couldn't stop even if I wanted to! ~Gina :)
Oh my goodness. I hate Miss Harrison and Mark. I know Mark is nice and all, but he's just not James! SO I hate him. I'm really glad you put what happened in Hogsmeade, I was dying to know everything! Post soon!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I couldn't help but smile over your vehement dislike of my two OCs. I understand, but have to admit it's fun writing them! I'm so glad you enjoyed the Hogsmead bit. Thanks for reading, I appreciate the review! ~GIna :)
Yay! We finally get to know what happened at Hogsmeade. It was worth the wait though.
I loved the Prefect meeting, the dynamic between James and Lily was perfect again.
Can't wait for the next chapter :)
Author's Response: I'm glad it was worth the wait and happy to hear you enjoyed this chapter! Thanks so much for the review, the next chapter won't be long! ~Gina :)
:) really liked what happened between them. . . Bring it back soon in this story!!
Author's Response: Hm, might be a while, to be honest. :D Thanks for the review, I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter! ~Gina :)
I love this story. Love, love, LOVE. And that is all I have to say about that, for today anyway. Keep it coming, Gina. :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much, Lori. I really appreciate you reading this and I'm glad you enjoyed the new chapters! I hope you enjoy the rest, I've got some fun stuff planned. ;) ~Gina :)
What an intense flashback! It is well written. My daughter asked recently if you had injured James in this story and I told her not yet. Here it is, I guess, in the past! Mark seems nice - a younger version of James (only maybe not so cocky!). Anastasia is a hussy - but give her credit for knowing what she wants and gong for it! Thank you for a new chapter!
Author's Response: Hello there! Your review brought such a smile to my face - actually, I laughed to think that your daughter knows my writing so well as to ask if I've hurt James yet, lol. My circle of writer friends here on MNFF tease me about the same thing. I apparently have very mixed up ideas of romance, or at least of James! I like your comment about a younger version of James - hm, maybe that's why Lily likes him? ;) And I'm so glad you enjoyed the flashback. Thank you so much for the lovely review, i hope you enjoy the rest! ~Gina :)