I can't imagine a very productive conversation betweet James and Lily in the rain after losing the quidittch match. It is good to see Lily taking some initiative but maybe another time would be better? Thanks for the update!
WHAT IS THIS FUGGERY?
I was feeling the same emotions they were feeling, this is my favourite chapter so far too!! Ohh I'm so happy she has finally realized her real feelings! :)
This is my favorite one so far too. I always love reading that moment when Lily figures out she is in love with James.
Sorry if i havent been reviewing.... i loved it ! You are an amazing writer! I cant wait for the next chapter
Lots of love
Rene Luna Smith
P.s you are really fast with updating
I really enjoy this story! It's very original and I like your characterisations of James and Lily. The only thing I would critique is your portrayal of Remus. He doesn't seem to have much a personality of his own.
I hope that unlike me, you are one of those diligent authors that updates regularly ;) Looking forward to your next chapter!
you're awesome! i can't wait to read more
Cliff hanger!!! When is the next chapter up??
Great chapter as usual. You haven't failed me and I don't think you will. Can't wait for the next chapter.
You did a great job with the game, though! I really hope Avery gets beat to a pulp sometime soon, though. ;) He's an annoying twit! Great job and can't wait for an update!
I love the new chapter, Gina! It may have been a struggle to write the game, but I would never know it by reading. You really did a wonderful job--fast paced and enough going on with the characters I care about to keep it interesting. I don't enjoy reading Quidditch for Quidditch's sake, but I did want Gryffindor to win and I was worried about James and Cynthia in the match. Great, great writing throughout. Love Lily at the end, as well. She's finally coming around. What on earth did Dumbledore say to her? Hehe. I predict some lovely conversation and well-deserved snogging in the next chapter. Can't wait to see if I'm right. This story is LOVE.
I did enjoy the Quidditch actually, kept me at the edge of me seat, I couldn't tell which way you were going to go! It was fast-paced and interesting, not slow and repetitive which can happen. There's nothing quite as disheartening as a Quidditch loss, poor Gryffindors.
I liked your description of Lily waiting for James, she seemed sad and sweet.
Now let's just see what they're going to talk about. . . ;)
Ooooh. This is getting interesting! (Not that it wasn't interesting before; it was, but the set up in this chapter was brilliant in particular.)
"Stick that in your cauldron and boil it" is a brilliant, brilliant line and it definitely made me LOL. And I love James' characterisation here, although Lily seems to have a lot of secrets :S Onto the next chapter!
I loved this! But you already know that, I bet, Gina :)
You have Lily's characterisation to a tee, I swear. And I love James in this. I've prolly said that already, hehe, but he is just so lovable to me that I'm falling for him all over again. You just can't help but sympathise with him.
What happened in June, has it already been mentioned in another story, or are you going to come back to it? I don't mind either way, only I would like to go back and read that story before continuing here.
Oh, and I loved the prank. Amazing, and just so funny! You are a genius, I tell you! Sorry, this is definitely not a SPEW quality review, but I'm not really coherent at the moment :S Onto the next chapter!
Hi Gina! I did say I would get started on this when I had a moment free, so here you are!
I loved this. You probably know about my love for James (hence Soraya Potter on AIM) and I LOVED what you did with him in this chapter. I felt so sorry for him! I honestly just wanted to hug him for what he had had to go through with his mum and everything. Your characterisation in this chapter was perfect, and I particularly liked the dialogue between the Marauders -- so hard to get right, and you do it flawlessly. *jealous*
I have a small Britpick:
He was acutely aware that the majority of the student body would be as surprised as Sirius had been to see the badge on his chest.
If I were you, I'd just say "majority of the students"; no need for the "body".
Truthfully, though, even if your story was packed with gottens and Christmas breaks and Moms, I would still thoroughly enjoy it. :D
Love this story!!! Please write more soon : )
Lily and James are so far apart in this story I don't know how you can get them together! James turned in his badge. I wonder how Lily will feel about that. What did Dumbledore say to her? I understand that James broke dueling etiquette, but was Lily so horrified because she was allergic to cats or was there some other reason? Thank you for another good update.
HER PATRONUS IS A DOE!! Ever read Harry Potter and the Deathly Hallows?
Author's Response: Many, many times. And have you read Harry Potter and The Half Blood Prince? In that story it was revealed that Nymphadora Tonks' Patronus changed shape due to her emotional state, thus revealing her love for Remus Lupin. Just sayin'. Feel free to keep reading, but I'd suggest you think before you type, since I know exactly what I am doing with this story. Especially since I've done it a few times. Thank you. ~Gina ;-)
Mod Edit: Liet Dumbledore, please be respectful when addressing an author with concerns about the story.