Reviewer: baby54boomer
Date: 04/03/12 15:01
Chapter: Chapter 31: Navigating Being Alone

Thank you for the glimpse of woeful Draco...I trust the next chapter gives us a better idea of his machinations? Oh wait...the weekend in Germany. Somehow I see a convergence of plotlines here...Draco's, Goyle's, and Hermione's. And personally??? I don't think Tabor's all that innocent. He is too good to be true and his interest in Hermione is quite focused...maybe to nefarious ends? Aceline is another (canon) Pansy Parkinson, isn't she??? Lots of evil under that skin. Enjoyed the openness between Ginny and Hermione...just what Hermione needed. Gasp! Discussions between Draco and Ginny back at Hogwarts? Interesting. Who else did Draco talk to?
I do so like this story. Good job!

Author's Response: Have you read the story that comes before this? That's where Ginny and Draco talked. It's interesting to hear your thoughts on the story. It gives me good insight into whether I am writing the characters in a way that is consistent with what I think their motives are and whether I am foreshadowing events in a reasonable way. I hope you like the next few chapters! Thank you for your review, Jenny

Reviewer: aarati
Date: 04/03/12 9:59
Chapter: Chapter 1: Summer Day at the Burrow

That was just amazing though feeling sad for Hermione
Pls update next chapter soon

Author's Response: Thank you. The next chapter is in the queue! --Jenny

Reviewer: phoenix81
Date: 04/03/12 5:23
Chapter: Chapter 31: Navigating Being Alone

thanks for installing the chapter so quickly! Can't wait for the next!!

Author's Response: You are welcome. The next chapter is in the queue! --Jenny

Reviewer: CandyCaneXOXO567
Date: 04/02/12 1:30
Chapter: Chapter 30: Going Separate Ways

oh my gosh, you have to hurry and put up more chapters. :)

Author's Response: It's been in the queue, waiting for approval for a while now! Cross your fingers that it's next in line for approval. --Jenny

Reviewer: CandyCaneXOXO567
Date: 04/02/12 1:30
Chapter: Chapter 30: Going Separate Ways

oh my gosh, you have to hurry and put up more chapters. :)

Reviewer: ooCathrynoo
Date: 03/29/12 0:28
Chapter: Chapter 30: Going Separate Ways

Oh my gosh. :( This was seriously such a sad chapter. I can't believe (well I can, but you know what I mean) Draco is acting so freaking hurtful towards her. I understand she hurt him, but my goodness.

Author's Response: Sorry about that. My sense is that throughout my stories, I've made Draco into too much of a nice guy. So this break-up allows me to keep him consistent with who he was in the books. Spoiler alert -- there's a happy ending on the horizon. Thanks for your review, Jenny

Reviewer: googirl97
Date: 03/27/12 6:22
Chapter: Chapter 30: Going Separate Ways

I don't like the evil Draco.... it seems so unlike him to do this to Hermione. Otherwise, as usual, I love the story!

Author's Response: But I feel like I've made Draco too nice in my stories, so I have to let him act out a bit. Revert to his evil ways. I think JKR would hate my Draco (and hate that I have him paired up with Hermione). So, bear with me, please. Thank you for your review, Jenny

Reviewer: baby54boomer
Date: 03/26/12 16:26
Chapter: Chapter 30: Going Separate Ways

I liked this chapter for its realism: you have given us a familiar glimpse into the sadder side of interpersonal relationships gone awry. I cannot help but entertain the idea that Draco's rebound behavior is covering up feelings he wishes to keep private. Using Aceline is cruel; however, if she is the blood-purist I assume her to be, she is oblivious to Draco's true feelings for Hermione. She is only about herself. Draco has changed and I also believe he is protecting Hermione by using the breach in their relationship to get on with Goyle's situation. Ideally, in the end I would like to see Draco revealed as an undercover informant for the British Aurors (unbeknownst to Ron and Harry, on assignment from the Minister himself). Sounds far-fetched, but makes sense to me. I imagine Draco using Ron and Harry's snitch-request as the means to keep Hermione out of immediate danger. Somehow, I imagine Tabor to be eyeball deep in evil as well!! Just a few ramblings on my part.
Good interlude and story-building with this chapter! Love the teaser of a last paragraph.

Author's Response: Wow! You have a lot of interesting story ideas. Unfortunately, I've already written the rest of my story, so I can't incorporate your musings. You should write your own fan-fiction! I'm glad you like the realism of Draco's behavior. I struggle with the idea of changing Draco too much from what he was like in the books, so I thought I'd throw some regression into the mix. Thank you for your thoughtful review! --Jenny

Reviewer: aarati
Date: 03/26/12 14:29
Chapter: Chapter 30: Going Separate Ways

Wow can't believe got to read two chapters back to back & that to such an amazing chapters want some more though wanna know what's gonna happen between draco n hermione

Author's Response: I think I've piqued my beta's interest with the break-up -- we're moving faster now! I'm glad you are enjoying the story. The next chapter is already in the queue! Thank you, Jenny

Reviewer: snapesaloser
Date: 03/26/12 5:21
Chapter: Chapter 30: Going Separate Ways

I WANT MORE!! I love everything about this story. I'm actually glad you threw in the break up. Gives the story a little twist! Love it!! Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: I'm so happy that you are enjoying the story! The next chapter is already in the queue, so you should get to read more soon. Thank you for your review, Jenny

Reviewer: BookWorm530
Date: 03/26/12 4:01
Chapter: Chapter 30: Going Separate Ways

Wow another chapter so soon...I'm impressed! Well at least we know that Draco is jealous when seeing Hermione with other guys. I think it is a shame that he messed with their essay just to hurt her but I hope that they work things out soon. Can't wait for more : )

Author's Response: Hang with me for a few more chapters. The next one is already in the queue. I'm glad you are engaged by the story! Thank you, Jenny

Reviewer: ooCathrynoo
Date: 03/24/12 23:14
Chapter: Chapter 29: From Bad to Worse

:( I understand where both Draco and Hermoine are coming from. It's unfortunate that Hermoine never had a chance to talk to Draco before Ron showed up.

Author's Response: They'll talk it all out, eventually. I'm big on talking and clearing things up directly. But bear with me through a few chapters of separation. Thank you for your review, Jenny

Reviewer: BookWorm530
Date: 03/24/12 3:57
Chapter: Chapter 29: From Bad to Worse

Oh no! If you hadn't already promised a happy ending for Draco and Hermione I would be very upset with you! I can understand why Draco felt the way he did. He was hoping that he found someone who loved him for him and forgave him his past and Hermione broke his trust. Interested to see what really is going on with these stolen artifacts and can't wait to see the fate of our fave characters. Update soon!

Author's Response: I'm glad I let that spoiler slip, then! It would be sad to get reviews from upset readers! I'm glad you can see both sides of things. That's what I'm hoping to do. The next chapter is in the queue already. Thanks, Jenny

Reviewer: baby54boomer
Date: 03/23/12 21:47
Chapter: Chapter 29: From Bad to Worse

Whoa...didn't see the confrontationwith Draco and Hermione coming! Great job on that point. I had to read that part twice, as I was completely surprised at his appearance on the window sill. Nicely done. Hermione's subsequent actions at the Eiffel Tower, with her mother, and then with Ginny are quite plausible. The conversation with Mr. Ollivander and that little remark about "moral vision" is genius...I hope you are able to work the second wand into the remainder of the story. Good job overall!

Author's Response: When I add something like a wand, it's usually got a purpose later in the story, so I think you'll be happy there. What I love most about JKR is that story details all tie together, even across books. I'm trying to be true to her attention to detail in my stories too. And I can't take credit for what Ollivander said about the wand -- that's from Harry Potter Wiki. I try to ground my stories in cannon as much as possible (despite the major liberties I take in order to create a love story between Hermione and Draco -- ha!). Thanks for your review, Jenny

Reviewer: JustAHint
Date: 03/23/12 21:35
Chapter: Chapter 29: From Bad to Worse

A well written story, definitely! A little disappointed in Hermione and Draco's breakup, but I felt it was bound to happen ): Very excited to see what happens with their relationship, and how Ron interferes! Love it! :)

Author's Response: I'm happy to see you are bearing with the ups and downs of the story. The next chapter is in the queue. Bear with me for a while. Thanks, Jenny

Reviewer: leaj0rdan
Date: 03/16/12 7:56
Chapter: Chapter 28: Eavesdropping and Compromise

really good :)

Author's Response: Glad you liked it. Thanks for the nice review, Jenny

Reviewer: cotegr
Date: 03/14/12 5:52
Chapter: Chapter 1: Summer Day at the Burrow

i love your story! i read both stories within 12 hours! cant wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Wow! That's got to be a record. :-) I'm so happy to hear you like my stories. My next chapter is with my beta and I'll post it as soon as I get it back. Thank you for your feedback, Jenny

Reviewer: BookWorm530
Date: 03/12/12 2:33
Chapter: Chapter 28: Eavesdropping and Compromise

Last chapter I was frustrated at Draco...now I am frustrated at Hermione. Draco is trying to talk to her about Goyle and making out with her and she says she is too busy...isn't this what she has been pushing for?? I was relieved to see Draco open up about his feelings about being scared of losing her. My favorite part was when Hermione over heard Draco's fight with Goyle. It showed that he really loves her

Author's Response: I'm actually glad you are frustrated with both of them. I'm trying to create a realistic situation where it's not all one person's fault. I hope you continue to enjoy the story. Thank you for your review, Jenny

Reviewer: baby54boomer
Date: 03/12/12 0:50
Chapter: Chapter 28: Eavesdropping and Compromise

I am so pleased you chose to resolve Hermione and Draco's disagreement as quickly as you did. I wasn't suspecting the overheard conversation...good job! You have managed to reinforce Hermione's faith in Draco via his responses to Goyle; however, the cheeky retort at chapter's end did not ring true for me. Perhaps a one-armed hug around Draco's waist would have been more reassuring; I don't see Hermione willingly providing Draco with "comfort alternatives" in the person of Pansy Parkinson! Even in jest. If Draco is serious about "talking tomorrow," please follow through with this storyline. I also hope Draco comes to the conclusion that he cannot take care of Goyle's situation without help in order to keep himself above suspicion!! Who knows....maybe Draco is working undercover to expose another faction trying to reinvigorate the DEs in France!! (Just a thought)

Author's Response: I'm sorry you didn't like Hermione's cheeky response. You may be right. Sometimes I have too much fun with one liners. I'll try to be more sensitive to the mood at the moment going forward. The next five or so chapters are already written, so I do follow through with this story line, but there will be some bumps in the road, I'm afraid. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story. Thank you for your thoughtful review, Jenny

Reviewer: RideTheLightning
Date: 03/11/12 9:59
Chapter: Chapter 28: Eavesdropping and Compromise

another great chapter! love this story so much - its got a good pace so it doesn't feel rushed but still keeps a excellent plot to keep you reading - looking forward to the next chapter :)

Author's Response: Thank you for your nice review. The next chapter is with my beta. I'll post it just as soon as I get it back. Thanks, Jenny

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