Reviewer: Siriuslyloveblack17
Date: 11/05/11 5:41
Chapter: Chapter 1: Up To No Good

Finally a great start to a new generation of characters! I LOVE that Albus gets sorted into Slytherin and that Rose is a Ravenclaw.I also like how you add your own unique twist of how everyone always expects James to be the prankster, but here you have Albus sneaking into Gryffindor Tower. Very clever! Keep up the great work!!

Reviewer: Evora
Date: 08/31/11 21:00
Chapter: Chapter 4: A Long First Day

Hello! This is a very interesting read. You manage to keep the characters age appropriate, which is a feat many authors miss while writing eleven year old boys. While they were on the platform, despite having most of the chapter already from the Epilogue, you managed to add your own twist to it, which was namely Albus's personality. His interaction with James was a great quality in the first two chapters. You captured what Jo wrote in the Epilogue and made it seem like if there was more to it, their taunts would be in the Epilogue. I almost couldn't get enough of it! It was very entertaining to read.

I do disagree with when Albus finds out about how Harry defeated Voldemort. It was bound to come up while they were younger. But I do believe that Harry and Ginny would have opted to stay away from wizard masses when the could, like choosing a Muggle resterant over a wizarding one, as people could say something to the family. What if one of the children asked what happened to Uncle Fred? Would they have lied? But I do understand Albus's confusion as to why everyone was staring at them; it must have been odd for an eleven year old. But I am curious. Why did you decide to leave them in the dark for eleven years?

A part in chapter five had me smiling. When Albus asked why he got the Cloak, Harry's answer just seemed like a perfect response. From what we see in the Epilogue and your writing, we can tell that James need invisibility to have fun or mess with people. It made my mind wrap around the family aspect of James and Albus, and James, Albus and Harry.

Please continue to write more of their relationship together, because you write it wonderfully and it makes your story sweeter, in a sense. It's my favorite part, and also the most enjoyable to read. I'm looking forward to seeing how you make the characters progress as the plot gets deeper, but I'm sure you'll write it just as well. you have Albus down well, from his confusion to his confrontation with someone bigger. So very nice job with that, as well as the rest of the story!

Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you so much for this amazingly detailed review! I'm glad you think I was successful in adding my own spin to the Epilogue. I probably enjoyed writing the interaction between Albus and James as much as you enjoyed reading it. It is a refreshing dynamic that we don't really get to see in the series. Harry and Hermione have no siblings and Ron has a ton of them, but here we get to see what happens with just one older sibling, which is something a lot of readers can probably relate to. Writing these scenes came naturally to me, because I can identify with both James and Albus -- I'm an older sibling, but I find I'm more similar to Albus. I agree that it is quite unlikely Harry's children would know nothing about his past. It was my interpretation when I read the Epilogue that the reason the children didn't know why everyone was staring was that they had no knowledge about the Second Wizarding War. While I found that doubtful, I thought that was JKR's intention, so of course I had to stick with it in my story. I even did my best to make it as plausible as possible. You might have noticed me mention that Albus isn't allowed to have Chocolate Frogs at home. While Albus (and probably a lot of readers) think Ginny is just concerned about his nutrition, she actually wants to make sure he doesn't get a Wizard card with his father on it. However, I really like your interpretation of the situation. It never occurred to me that the children might know about their parents' pasts, but just not fully comprehend how important they really were. This seems like a much more believable scenario and still fits with what we see in the Epilogue. Moving on, that's great that you thought Harry's answer to Albus about the Cloak was "a perfect response." I had actually thought of that exchange quite early in the writing of this story and tucked it away until I got to this chapter. Ok, now you're making me feel guilty. You're giving me such nice compliments about my writing, and now I have to tell you that my next chapter is the last one...and I don't believe James is in it. There will be some interaction between Albus and Harry, but sadly no James. In fact, I'm a little disappointed myself in the abruptness of my story. I wrote this for a college class and therefore had a deadline I had to meet, forcing me to make the story come to an end before my time was up. I've considered making an expanded version of this story (and I probably should), but I don't know when, or if, I'll get around to it. (Although reviews like yours make it more likely that I will take on such an endeavor.) Again, thank you for this spectacular review!

Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you so much for this amazingly detailed review! I'm glad you think I was successful in adding my own spin to the Epilogue. I probably enjoyed writing the interaction between Albus and James as much as you enjoyed reading it. It is a refreshing dynamic that we don't really get to see in the series. Harry and Hermione have no siblings and Ron has a ton of them, but here we get to see what happens with just one older sibling, which is something a lot of readers can probably relate to. Writing these scenes came naturally to me, because I can identify with both James and Albus -- I'm an older sibling, but I find I'm more similar to Albus.

I agree that it is quite unlikely Harry's children would know nothing about his past. It was my interpretation when I read the Epilogue that the reason the children didn't know why everyone was staring was that they had no knowledge about the Second Wizarding War. While I found that doubtful, I thought that was JKR's intention, so of course I had to stick with it in my story. I even did my best to make it as plausible as possible. You might have noticed me mention that Albus isn't allowed to have Chocolate Frogs at home. While Albus (and probably a lot of readers) think Ginny is just concerned about his nutrition, she actually wants to make sure he doesn't get a Wizard card with his father on it. However, I really like your interpretation of the situation. It never occurred to me that the children might know about their parents' pasts, but just not fully comprehend how important they really were. This seems like a much more believable scenario and still fits with what we see in the Epilogue.

Moving on, that's great that you thought Harry's answer to Albus about the Cloak was "a perfect response." I had actually thought of that exchange quite early in the writing of this story and tucked it away until I got to this chapter.

Ok, now you're making me feel guilty. You're giving me such nice compliments about my writing, and now I have to tell you that my next chapter is the last one...and I don't believe James is in it. There will be some interaction between Albus and Harry, but sadly no James. In fact, I'm a little disappointed myself in the abruptness of my story. I wrote this for a college class and therefore had a deadline I had to meet, forcing me to make the story come to an end before my time was up. I've considered making an expanded version of this story (and I probably should), but I don't know when, or if, I'll get around to it. (Although reviews like yours make it more likely that I will take on such an endeavor.)

Again, thank you for this spectacular review!

Reviewer: aviva41133
Date: 08/26/11 17:39
Chapter: Chapter 5: A Very Weasley Christmas

brilliant but it was short when will the next chapter come out??

Author's Response: Unfortunately the queue has been closed until September 4th, so I won't be able to upload the next chapter until then and then it will still have to be validated.

Reviewer: Liet Dumbledore
Date: 08/26/11 13:19
Chapter: Chapter 5: A Very Weasley Christmas

Please continue, your writing is good!

Author's Response: Thank you for the compliment! The next chapter will be the last one...unless I decide to write a sequel.

Reviewer: bekki-unknown
Date: 08/23/11 7:51
Chapter: Chapter 4: A Long First Day

I am impressed with Albus' duelling skills. Will they be put to good use in a more dangerous situation?

Albus doesn't seem as miserable as the previous chapter about being in Slytherin, while he still doesn't like the choice, to me it looks like he is on the way to accepting it.

Author's Response: You've made some good observations. Albus still isn't happy about being in Slytherin, but he is smart enough to realize there is nothing he can do about the situation, so he might as well put up with it for now. As for his dueling skills...you'll just have to keep reading and find out ;)

Reviewer: Messer_Moony
Date: 08/22/11 16:50
Chapter: Chapter 4: A Long First Day

Cool book! ;) I am a big fan of Next Gen stuff. Also, if I may ask, is Albus going to write to Harry, cause no offense but I want to see Harry's reaction :) Thanks For Writing Story! M. Moony out!

Author's Response: Thanks! Next Gen is the best. I don't have Albus writing to Harry, but that is a pretty good idea. This was an assignment for a class, so I had to skip a lot of things in Albus' first year to get it done by the deadline. (As it was, I ended up writing 20% of it the day it was due.) I've considered writing an expanded version, so if I ever do, I might include your idea.

Reviewer: bekki-unknown
Date: 08/20/11 4:51
Chapter: Chapter 3: A Bad Hattitude

Whoa - Albus was sorted into Slytherin! Though, I should have realised this was coming, looking at the title and summary of your story!

I think what I found most interesting was the Sorting Hat's attitude. I never really considered it to have been affected by Lord Voldemort and what happened during the Battle of Hogwarts. Rather than just being an enchanted object, it seems to have feelings like a person! Very interesting, would it have changed its mind for Albus like Harry otherwise?

Thanks for updating so quick, can't wait for moe!

Author's Response: I'm glad you like my take on the Sorting Hat. I think he's actually one of my favorite characters haha. You'll find out more about his personality change later in the story.

Reviewer: Amelia_Bones
Date: 08/17/11 21:49
Chapter: Chapter 3: A Bad Hattitude

Little Al is a Slytherin. Hmmm...I'll Have to stay tuned. Like how you made Rose a Ravenclaw. Hermy should have been, but you know, things wouldn't have turned out the same if she had been. Nice start.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing!

Reviewer: snidget76
Date: 08/17/11 19:22
Chapter: Chapter 3: A Bad Hattitude

I am enjoying this story. In response to your end notes challenge "Atherton, Aaron" is from the "Atherton" book series and Algernon Bunbury is from the book "Flowers for Algernon". It was creative to use those names. Interesting.

Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying my story, so I hate to tell you that your guesses about the names are wrong. I go to Penn State and actually wrote this story for a class there. George Atherton was an important president of the university, so that's where that name comes from. (Aaron is just because I like alliteration.) I hadn't actually heard of the Atherton book series, but I looked it up and they look pretty interesting. Your guess for Algernon Bunbury is closer (and I've actually read Flowers for Algernon), but he is from The Importance of Being Earnest. The character of Algernon Moncrieff has a fake friend named Bunbury. There are still plenty more names if you want to try again!

Reviewer: Revy-Rider
Date: 08/16/11 9:13
Chapter: Chapter 2: Platform 9 3/4

I think chapter 2 has a good title. I like the story premise its cool!

Author's Response: I'm glad you like the story...and the title haha.

Reviewer: Ariandara
Date: 08/13/11 17:23
Chapter: Chapter 2: Platform 9 3/4

I love this! Very entertaining, please continue! I look forward to it.

Author's Response: Thank you! The next chapter should be approved any day now.

Reviewer: bekki-unknown
Date: 08/06/11 13:26
Chapter: Chapter 2: Platform 9 3/4

You don't like the chapter title? I actually quite like it! Though, honestly I thought this chapter was a bit boring. It was almost exactly the same as the epilogue of the DH! Keep up though, I want to know what house you're going to put Albus (and Rose) in!

Author's Response: I suppose the chapter title is alright, there's just nothing clever about it. I actually agree that this chapter is a bit boring; I think it's my least favorite chapter. I tried to stick in as much original stuff as I could, but I had to work around the canon. Thanks for the encouragement! You've just inspired me to upload the next chapter!

Reviewer: roseilinda_granger
Date: 08/01/11 17:15
Chapter: Chapter 1: Up To No Good

I LOVE IT really great cant wait for more!

Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for reading! More is on the way.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 07/12/11 17:45
Chapter: Chapter 1: Up To No Good

I saw this story a while ago and wrote down the title and author name. I thought I'd check it out tonight. I absolutely love next generation stories, expecially ones involving the Potter kids. This was a great first chapter. I hope you continue writing. I'll be looking for a second chapter.

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing! I'm glad you liked it! I'm uploading the next chapter right now, so hopefully it gets validated soon.

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