OMG COME ON :D write sOme more chapters man :) I love the way you have portrayed dracos tender love fOr hermione PLEASE WRITE SOME MORE!!!!!!!
Author's Response: I am, I am!!! The next chapter's in the queue!! :D You are so sweet- I really hope you enjoy the next chaptewr as much as you've enjoyed the others; please be sure to let me know! Thank you so much!! Luv, Stef :)
Great chapter! I love how Hermoine's dad is giving Draco a chance.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! He's definitely trying- after all, if Draco really did save his little girl's life, he owes him everything. If Draco is lying, well...you know how protective good fathers are of their daughters! Keep reading and reviewing- I really appreciate your comments!! Luv, Stef :)
Again, no disappointment here! I'm loving every second of this; poor Draco! I hope Harry and Ron don't give him too much trouble- the poor guy has already been through Hell. Anywho, I'm rambling. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Awww, thank you- glad you liked it! Hate to tell you, but it's not gonna be pretty between Draco, Ron and Harry. Be prepared in the next chapter. :O Can't wait to hear your thoughts on it. Thanks again, sweetie! Luv, Stef :)
MOAR! please :)
You're doing a great job. Keep it up. It's a compliment when i say that i dread the moment when I can no longer scroll down.
Author's Response: You are so sweet! I know that feeling, when you hate that the end of the story is coming soon. That you feel that way about my story is a huge compliment, and I am very very grateful for it. I'm so glad you're with me!! Luv, Stef :)
Just discovered this story... Incredible!! Probably one of the best-written and most believable fics I've read. Keep it up; I can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: Thank you thank you thank you so much!!! "Believable" is the most important goal I've had for this story. When you're shipping a very unbelievable pairing in the first place, you've got your work cut out for you from word one. I really appreciate your comments- they are so encouraging. Please let me know what you think of the chapters to come! Luv, Stef :)
Just finished my second read of the first fourteen chapters to refresh my memory. Yes, the issue of the Fidaelius Charm did occur to me. However, Hermione did not have to give him the original address, did she? Could she not have said "near #11 or #13 Grimmauld Place?" Just wondering. Also...we won't see Snape at #12 any time soon, will we? Complications with Draco in the house. Be careful with Draco's physicality with Hermione. Some of the caresses and kisses were too contrived, as much as I do believe where you are headed with his newfound understanding of his humanity and feelings for Hermione. The consistant kindness in his voice, yes. The lip and cheek kisses...not so much. Good job.
Author's Response: Thanks for investing a second read-through of my fic! I really appreciate it.
I really needed to spend more time researching the boundaries of the Fidaelius Charm; I kind of rushed through it to finish the chapter. Oh, and Snape? He MIGHT be showing up sooner or later...;)
I appreciate your guidance on Draco's physicality. I admit it's been difficult for me to pinpoint what his interactions should entail. But you're right- it's too soon. He wouldn't be that comfortable yet. Thanks a lot, as usual! Luv, Stef :)
Yeah! I am always happy to see an update from this story. This chapter wasn't very long but it was still interesting to see the reaction on the Order and Harry and Ron. I hope that Draco stays by Hermione's side while she heals and that they become even closer. Can't wait for more : ) Good luck getting your 100 reviews...only 19 to go!
Author's Response: Hooray! Thank you for helping me toward my goal! I just looked at my read count, and it's over 10,000! One goal accomplished. :D
I know that the chapter was short, but it's only because I couldn't find a better place to split it with what's coming up. It would have been massive if I'd have left it all together. And the next chapter sees some interaction between Draco, Ron, and Harry, too- dun dun duuuuuuunnnnnn! :O
So glad you're staying with me through the journey, and I look forward to your thoughts on the next chapter! Luv, Stef :)
This is a tremendously powerful chapter; well-written with the right amount of intensity. You unfold Hermione's injuries in such a way as to allow the reader to feel as much reaction as the people present in the room. I did expect some sort of charm or spell cast upon the doorway when Dumbledore left the kitchen to hinder any attempts to follow him from the kitchen!
As for Draco's tentative transformation...he is becoming a more credible example of change, though his interactions/confrontations with his age peers will demonstrate this more thoroughly, yes? The kitchen conversation between the Weasley sibs, Harry, and AD exceled in dialogue, but lacked in descriptives re: physical activity. I could easily imagine Ginny leaning forward or gripping the table edge in frustration, but I wanted to read the action cooresponding with her speech. LOVED the confrontation between Tom and Draco...there is nothing quite like a father's stand in defense of his daughter and you captured the right tone in the hallway encounter. Keep up the good work. I look forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: I look forward to your comments and critiques for all of my remaining chapters! Thank you so much for your encouraging and honest words. You are obviously a writer, or professor, or someone with a thorough background in writing.
As for a spell from Dumbledore: I suppose I thought him telling them not to leave the room was enough, since who would disobey Dumbledore?! ;) Regarding Draco's transformation- you are correct, interacting with his peers will prove a bit more difficult! I see what you mean by my sparse physical descriptions in the kitchen; more thought to the activity would have resulted in a more well-rounded scene. Point taken! I am so very glad that the Tom/Draco conversation rang as true as I meant it to. :D
Once again, thank you for your critiques, and keep 'em coming! Luv, Stef :)
Absolutely BRILLIANT. This is most definitely one of the best HP fan fictions I have read. By FAR.
Most authors dance around the gruesome details but you however showed no restraint and I loved it. It just made the story that much more powerful. So BRAVO to you. I am EAGERLY awaiting the next chapter, please don't keep me waiting for long. Good 'dramione' stories such as this one don't come along often.
PLEASE BRING OUT THE NEXT CHAPTER!!!
Author's Response: I am humbled and extremely grateful for your high praise- thank you SO much!! It means the absolute world!! Above all, I wanted my fic to be BELIEVABLE and REALISTIC. Dramione's are difficult because the pairing itself is challenging, but I believe in it so much. I want my readers to believe in the psychological and emotional journey Draco takes and in the fact that he and Hermione come to trust in each other and care for each other. This fic is shortly coming to a close, and the sequal (in the works) will develop Draco and Hermione's romantic relationship through the coming of the war with Voldemort as Lucius and the Death Eaters hunt for them with a vengeance. Much action to come in Book 2! Thank you again for your tremendous encouragement; the next chapter's being beta'd now and then I'll post it to the queue. Be sure to let me know what you think of it! Luv, Stef :)
I'm glad that Hermoine realizes his changed mind and genuine concern. Great update! Also, the part about the car was very creative.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, hunny! Hermione has definitely realized that Draco is not who he used to be, but the question is: will the Orders members even give him a chance to prove it? Eeep-I'm so glad you liked the car stuff. I kind of parallelled Lucius and Arthur in their interest in how Muggle things work, but for polar opposite reasons. And Draco sneaking out to learn something he wasn't supposed to learn is so, well...Draco! Looking forward to what you think of the next chapter. Thanks again! Luv, Stef :)
Phew! So glad Draco and Hermione are safe...for now at least! And thank goodness for Hermione speaking up at the end or the whole room would have cursed Draco. I hope the Order lets him stay and see's how much he cares for Hermione. I love tis story, can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Hi sweetie! You are so right- they would have cursed Draco into the next life if Hermione hadn't said something in his defense. The next few chapters deal with the Order members' reactions to "new and improved" Draco. You can expect some nasty clashes with Harry, and especially, Ron. I'm looking foward to hearing your review of the next chapter. Thanks so much, hunny! Luv, Stef :)
Great use of dialogue. I think you captured Mad-Eye's character exceptionally well. The repartee between the gawking teens, followed by the hurried interactions with the adults kept the tension high and provided a good balance of anticipation/satisfaction for the reader.
I found Draco's "Broken" reply to Mad-Eye multi-layered: Draco's wizarding tool, his family dynamics, and his self-preservationist will can each be described as such. How you reconstruct Draco's persona in light of his new-found "heart" (and surrounded by a whole house full of distrust) will be challenging. Good luck!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I greatly appreciate your review, especially because of its honest literary critique. As this is my first fanfic ever, I'm always concerned about how my writing comes across to the reader- whether it is believable and being understood as I intended. Your insight into Draco's "Broken" comment was delightful; I agree that it describes his life at many levels. Thank you for sharing it with me! As to the reconstruction of Draco's character: most of it will occur in the sequal to this fic, as Draco learns many life lessons from different members of the Order. There are only a few more chapters left in this story. If you would be so kind, PLEASE review my upcoming chapters. I'm very interested in your thoughts. Thank you,again, for your encouragement! Luv, Stef :)
Ah Stef, I can forgive you the non-canon detail because that was, yet again, another great chapter. I'm so glad that they escaped all right although, I did feel a bit sorry for Draco during his hostile reception! It was believable though, considering his previous behaviour and how worried they must have been about Hermione. I hope that, when she's better, she can persuade everyone that he's reformed! Well done again - keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Alice you darling dear! Thanks for letting me slide. :D The next few chapters (and there are only a few left) focus on the acceptance/non-acceptance of Draco by the different members of the Order. Major clashes with Ron are ahead! Thanks, as always, for letting me know what you thought. You always make my day!! Luv, Stef :)
Ilike you, i always believed Draco was basically good, too good a son,in fact, trying to live up to his parents' ideals. I love the way you portrayed how he made his self-realization so epic and almost like an aha moment. It made his change of colors from bad to good believable, plausible....and yes, it certainly would make readers say "i knew it! He's a good guy!" . Keep up the good work! I've read a lot of stories here so far, and i must say, yours is the best!
Author's Response: Oh!! That's music to my ears!!! :D You and I are on the exact same page regarding Draco. In my story, I really wanted to get inside his head as he sorted through the conflicts that I believe would be very real for him. Growing up in that family, how could he not be negatively affected? I think that, while he's not perfect, he has so much potential for good-given the right set of circumstances. Thank you so much for your wonderful compliment-I take it very much to heart. Be sure to let me know what you think of the chapters to come as well. Thanks!!! Luv, Stef :)
LOVE! Please please please submit more soon! And don't give up on this story. That happens to so many that I love. Stay with me!
Author's Response: Don't you hate when you're invested in a story and then the author just stops writing? GAH! It makes me crazy, too. But, fear not! My story is already written in its entirety!! I'm also starting my basic structure for the sequal *looks around desk littered with hastily scribbled-down plot notes* I'm just in the process of sending each chapter to my lovely Beta so that she can catch any mistakes I made before I post. Chapter 14 is in her talented hands as we speak. As soon as I get it back I'll send it here to the queue. I can't tell you how much it has meant to me that you've shared your thoughts with me so many times. I'm excited to see what you think of the rest. Big squeezy hugs to you! :D Looking forward to hearing from you soon, hunny! Luv, Stef :)
I adore the way you portray Draco. I always knew there was good in him, from the beginning. And the slow passionate way you bring he and Hermione together is genius. This is my favorite Dramione fic. Ever. :]
Author's Response: Really? Your favorite one EVER? That's one of the best compliments I've ever received!!! I am completely grinning from ear to ear right now, and bouncing up and down in my chair. You've so made my day. :D I'm glad you see Draco the way I see him too. I really believe that this is who he is, if he had the right conditions to step up and become a hero. I'm also glad you like the fact that I'm building up their relationship slowly. I don't get stories that have them all over each other by the third chapter. I'm also ALSO glad that you've been so kind to write a review after several chapters- it means the world! Luv, Stef :)
I just want to let you know that I love your writing style. It reminds me of how Rowling might write. There are so many fanfics with bad grammar or plots that don't make sense. Yours is amazing. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: You have no idea how important your compliment is to me!! I am a STICKLER for good grammar- my Mother was an English teacher! I get frustrated by stories with horrible spelling and grammar mistakes because it makes me feel as though the writer doesn't care much about his/her own story. So why should I? I've also very carefully plotted the entirety of my story. It has to make sense, it has to be believable, or what's the point? I'm creating a highly unlikely couple with Draco and Hermione- my challenge, my duty, is to make readers believe that they really could fall in love. I so appreciate your wonderful words- thank you, especially, for the Rowling comment- it was huge!!! Luv, Stef :)
This was a great chapter. Very steamy. I love it. :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! At the time I wrote it, it was the first time I'd ever written any sort of love scene. My face was bright red as I typed! :D Luv, Stef :)
This is absolutely amazing!
Author's Response: Hi! I'm so very glad you think so! This is my first fanfic, and so the lovely words from you and other readers mean the world to me. Thank you for taking the time to review; please continue reading and reviewing! Luv, Stef :)
You're at it again! This story never fails to make me gasp and want more. I simply love how Bellatrix is completely insane, and Snape's hawk made me cheer. Go Athena! Love, love, love it! Keep it up!
Author's Response: Hi, hunny! Always wonderful to hear from you! Glad the story is keeping its hold on you. :D Yeah, Bellatrix is in-freaking-sane in my story, but I like her that way, hee hee. You made my day about Athena the Hawk! I was so nervous about it- I wasn't sure if readers were going to love her or think that she's ridiculous! I love her, and she gets Snape off the hook as well. I'll queue up the next chapter very soon, I promise. Thanks again, so much! Luv, Stef :)