This chapter was really great! I loved the interactions between Draco and the adults. I am really excited to see when Hermione is recuperated what's going to happen. Please don't take very long in updating!! =)
Author's Response: GAH! I certainly didn't give you what you asked for, as far as waiting too long for the next chapter! But I have been trying to get the queue to accept Chapter 17 for nearly 2 months! I've rewritten, and rewritten, and I hope to heck that it's going to go through this time. I have no earthly idea why it keeps getting kicked out. Keep your fingers crossed!! Thank you so much for your lovely words- I always take my reviews to heart! Please let me know what you think of Chapter 17 when it posts! Luv, Stef :)
I hate everytime a chpter ends. I haven't read such a well written story in a long time. You give me hope for the world of fanfiction. Keep up the good work :)
Author's Response: Awww, that is so sweet!! It means so much that you would take the time to say such wonderful things, and I am humbled and elated by what you've said. Thank you, thank you, thank you!!! Luv, Stef :)
Beautiful! This chapter was just beautiful. Love it!
Author's Response: Sorry it's taken me so long to respond! I really appreciate your comments, as always. You always give me encouragement!! I'm so glad you loved this chapter. I've been trying for two months to get the queue to accept Chapter 17- I don't know what's going on. Hopefully it will be up soon! Looking forward to your thoughts on it when it posts! Luv, Stef :)
I was so giddy to see an update YEAH! But now I'm sad to hear that there are only a few chapters left : ( I enjoyed your quote about the Dark Lord baking biscuits LOL classic. My favorite part was when Hermione screamed for Draco and Hermione's parents thanked Draco. Can't wait for the next chapter...I hope Hermione and Draco get time alone to talk out what has happened. Great job!
Author's Response: Eee! I'm glad you loved it, and that you told me your favorite parts! Draco and Hermione don't get a lot of time to sort out their feelings (though they will in Book II), because now Draco has to deal with his peers- especially Harry and Ron. You can only imagine how well that's going to go! Please let me know what you think of the next chapter, which should finally be up SOON!! Thanks, hunny! Luv, Stef :)
Loved this chapter! Glad that others were able to see that Draco isn't the cookie-cutter type marked by dark wizarding families.
Author's Response: Hey girl! Nice to hear from you, as always! I really worked to make this chapter believable, because each character views Draco in a slightly different light. It would have been too fake to have everyone just forgive him immediately and envelop him in hugs. Many of them need time to adjust to this new Draco. I'm glad that you liked how I handled it. I look forward to hearing what you think of the next chapter. Thanks, hunny! Luv, Stef :)
Applause, applause!!!! This was very much worth waiting for...full of tension, revelation, and intrigue. The heightened emotions are captured well and expressed crisply. The myriad of responses are spot-on per character. I especially appreciate Draco's brokenness, humility, and repentant confession, aided by Dumbledore. You correctly place our Headmaster in the position of counselor/guide and you do not disappoint in the interchange between him and Draco. Draco's self-doubt is so very real...not foreign at all to the reader who is truthful with himself.
Thank you for focusing on the Order's concerns and interactions with Draco. You have nicely set up the next big hurdle (his peers) with Ron's outrage, hurt, and anger. I kept waiting for him to show up from his run...but the fact that he is away from Grimmauld Place and no one has noticed is quite intriquing.
Great chapter...I await the next one with great anticipation!
Author's Response: I wait on pins and needles for your review after each chapter! I am so humbled and grateful for your words of encouragement. This was one of my favorite chapters to write- I love getting into the characters' heads!
As an amateur writer, I take your critiques to heart every time (though now I'm putting pressure on myself for the coming chapters to live up to the former ones!!!! ). The next chapter should be up within the week, and we will indeed see a showdown between Ron and Draco. Can't wait to hear what you think! Thank you for everything!! Luv, Stef :)
Fantastic once again! So glad I decided to log on before bed :)
Author's Response: So glad you liked it! The next chapter should be up within the week. Thanks so much!!! Luv, Stef :)
I have to say, this is by far the best fanfic I have ever read. I beg you WRITE MORE SOON!!!! I want to find out what happens soooo badly! Your story caught my eye, and I'm so happy I decided to read it; I went through it all in one sitting it was so amazing. You have a very unique way of portraying the characters, and yet they are still their recognizable selves from J.K.'s original series. I really can't wait for your next update, and want you to know that you now have a very avid fan in me. :) your story is incredible, and I can't wait to read more. Thank you so much for getting your ideas out there, you're so talented and I feel very honored to be able to read your works. You're amazing!!!!!!!!! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!!!
Author's Response: Ok, I'm ready to tear up; actually, my eyes are watering. Your comments...wow, just wow. *blushes profusely*. You've nearly rendered me speechless, and that is a very difficult thing to accomplish!! Thank you, thank you from the bottom of my heart for your words of praise and encouragement. I will never forget them. This story had been swirling around in my brain for some time, because I adore Draco and like digging around in his head. I was so nervous to submit this story- this is the first story I have ever written. Ever. I like to write, but I'd never attempted anything like this before. So imagine little old me with my first fic getting a review like yours. My heart is about to burst *holds chest, trying to keep heart intact*. The next chapter is in the queue- please comment again because your words are powerfully uplifting and humbling all at the same time. You have a fan in me!! :D Luv, Stef :)
First, thank you. Great story love the concept and I am very glad you decided to put it paper. There is sooo much; want to know what happen to Bella, Cissa, Lucius, Snape but not as much as watching what’s happening at Grimmauld. Then there the questions of will they or won’t be caught will the scars really go away (Harry’s lightning bolt didn’t) what’s going to next?! GIVE US MORE PLEASE!
Author's Response: First, you're welcome! :D I'm so grateful that you like my story this much!!! Let me thank you right back, for reading it in the first place and then being wonderful enough to leave me such a lovely comment. Unknowingly, you have just played a critical role in my story. I had not written anything more about those still at Malfoy Manor (I was saving it for Book II, which is currently in the works), but after reading your comment I believe that I do need to put some closure on Bella/Narcissa/Lucius/Snape. I'm going back into my story and writing a new section. All thanks to YOU!! *does victory dance for you*. Always believe writers when we say we really DO take your comments to heart. Thank you, and I'll be sure to put a note in my Chapter Notes about you in the respective chapter! Luv, Stef :)
I absolutely love your writing. It's so eloquent, and it makes me believe your words. I look forward to you updating all the time, and check frequently to see if you have or not. Keep writing! :)
Author's Response: Thank you so very much for your kind words; they mean so much and are a huge encouragement for me. I appreciate that you took the time to tell me! I have another chapter in the queue right now. I'm so grateful that you commented! *hugs you* Luv, Stef :)
OMG COME ON :D write sOme more chapters man :) I love the way you have portrayed dracos tender love fOr hermione PLEASE WRITE SOME MORE!!!!!!!
Author's Response: I am, I am!!! The next chapter's in the queue!! :D You are so sweet- I really hope you enjoy the next chaptewr as much as you've enjoyed the others; please be sure to let me know! Thank you so much!! Luv, Stef :)
Great chapter! I love how Hermoine's dad is giving Draco a chance.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! He's definitely trying- after all, if Draco really did save his little girl's life, he owes him everything. If Draco is lying, well...you know how protective good fathers are of their daughters! Keep reading and reviewing- I really appreciate your comments!! Luv, Stef :)
Again, no disappointment here! I'm loving every second of this; poor Draco! I hope Harry and Ron don't give him too much trouble- the poor guy has already been through Hell. Anywho, I'm rambling. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Awww, thank you- glad you liked it! Hate to tell you, but it's not gonna be pretty between Draco, Ron and Harry. Be prepared in the next chapter. :O Can't wait to hear your thoughts on it. Thanks again, sweetie! Luv, Stef :)
MOAR! please :)
You're doing a great job. Keep it up. It's a compliment when i say that i dread the moment when I can no longer scroll down.
Author's Response: You are so sweet! I know that feeling, when you hate that the end of the story is coming soon. That you feel that way about my story is a huge compliment, and I am very very grateful for it. I'm so glad you're with me!! Luv, Stef :)
Just discovered this story... Incredible!! Probably one of the best-written and most believable fics I've read. Keep it up; I can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: Thank you thank you thank you so much!!! "Believable" is the most important goal I've had for this story. When you're shipping a very unbelievable pairing in the first place, you've got your work cut out for you from word one. I really appreciate your comments- they are so encouraging. Please let me know what you think of the chapters to come! Luv, Stef :)
Just finished my second read of the first fourteen chapters to refresh my memory. Yes, the issue of the Fidaelius Charm did occur to me. However, Hermione did not have to give him the original address, did she? Could she not have said "near #11 or #13 Grimmauld Place?" Just wondering. Also...we won't see Snape at #12 any time soon, will we? Complications with Draco in the house. Be careful with Draco's physicality with Hermione. Some of the caresses and kisses were too contrived, as much as I do believe where you are headed with his newfound understanding of his humanity and feelings for Hermione. The consistant kindness in his voice, yes. The lip and cheek kisses...not so much. Good job.
Author's Response: Thanks for investing a second read-through of my fic! I really appreciate it.
I really needed to spend more time researching the boundaries of the Fidaelius Charm; I kind of rushed through it to finish the chapter. Oh, and Snape? He MIGHT be showing up sooner or later...;)
I appreciate your guidance on Draco's physicality. I admit it's been difficult for me to pinpoint what his interactions should entail. But you're right- it's too soon. He wouldn't be that comfortable yet. Thanks a lot, as usual! Luv, Stef :)
Yeah! I am always happy to see an update from this story. This chapter wasn't very long but it was still interesting to see the reaction on the Order and Harry and Ron. I hope that Draco stays by Hermione's side while she heals and that they become even closer. Can't wait for more : ) Good luck getting your 100 reviews...only 19 to go!
Author's Response: Hooray! Thank you for helping me toward my goal! I just looked at my read count, and it's over 10,000! One goal accomplished. :D
I know that the chapter was short, but it's only because I couldn't find a better place to split it with what's coming up. It would have been massive if I'd have left it all together. And the next chapter sees some interaction between Draco, Ron, and Harry, too- dun dun duuuuuuunnnnnn! :O
So glad you're staying with me through the journey, and I look forward to your thoughts on the next chapter! Luv, Stef :)
This is a tremendously powerful chapter; well-written with the right amount of intensity. You unfold Hermione's injuries in such a way as to allow the reader to feel as much reaction as the people present in the room. I did expect some sort of charm or spell cast upon the doorway when Dumbledore left the kitchen to hinder any attempts to follow him from the kitchen!
As for Draco's tentative transformation...he is becoming a more credible example of change, though his interactions/confrontations with his age peers will demonstrate this more thoroughly, yes? The kitchen conversation between the Weasley sibs, Harry, and AD exceled in dialogue, but lacked in descriptives re: physical activity. I could easily imagine Ginny leaning forward or gripping the table edge in frustration, but I wanted to read the action cooresponding with her speech. LOVED the confrontation between Tom and Draco...there is nothing quite like a father's stand in defense of his daughter and you captured the right tone in the hallway encounter. Keep up the good work. I look forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: I look forward to your comments and critiques for all of my remaining chapters! Thank you so much for your encouraging and honest words. You are obviously a writer, or professor, or someone with a thorough background in writing.
As for a spell from Dumbledore: I suppose I thought him telling them not to leave the room was enough, since who would disobey Dumbledore?! ;) Regarding Draco's transformation- you are correct, interacting with his peers will prove a bit more difficult! I see what you mean by my sparse physical descriptions in the kitchen; more thought to the activity would have resulted in a more well-rounded scene. Point taken! I am so very glad that the Tom/Draco conversation rang as true as I meant it to. :D
Once again, thank you for your critiques, and keep 'em coming! Luv, Stef :)
Absolutely BRILLIANT. This is most definitely one of the best HP fan fictions I have read. By FAR.
Most authors dance around the gruesome details but you however showed no restraint and I loved it. It just made the story that much more powerful. So BRAVO to you. I am EAGERLY awaiting the next chapter, please don't keep me waiting for long. Good 'dramione' stories such as this one don't come along often.
PLEASE BRING OUT THE NEXT CHAPTER!!!
Author's Response: I am humbled and extremely grateful for your high praise- thank you SO much!! It means the absolute world!! Above all, I wanted my fic to be BELIEVABLE and REALISTIC. Dramione's are difficult because the pairing itself is challenging, but I believe in it so much. I want my readers to believe in the psychological and emotional journey Draco takes and in the fact that he and Hermione come to trust in each other and care for each other. This fic is shortly coming to a close, and the sequal (in the works) will develop Draco and Hermione's romantic relationship through the coming of the war with Voldemort as Lucius and the Death Eaters hunt for them with a vengeance. Much action to come in Book 2! Thank you again for your tremendous encouragement; the next chapter's being beta'd now and then I'll post it to the queue. Be sure to let me know what you think of it! Luv, Stef :)
I'm glad that Hermoine realizes his changed mind and genuine concern. Great update! Also, the part about the car was very creative.
Author's Response: Thanks so much, hunny! Hermione has definitely realized that Draco is not who he used to be, but the question is: will the Orders members even give him a chance to prove it? Eeep-I'm so glad you liked the car stuff. I kind of parallelled Lucius and Arthur in their interest in how Muggle things work, but for polar opposite reasons. And Draco sneaking out to learn something he wasn't supposed to learn is so, well...Draco! Looking forward to what you think of the next chapter. Thanks again! Luv, Stef :)