Wow that was bleak, but I was warned! I loved the hope at the end; the whole concept made me think of the legend of pandora's box. The ending was lovely, but if they returned to the world of the living then surely they would die? Or maybe the Great Plague and the Great Persecution are over and they can live happily (or not so happily if that is preferable) ever after?
Author's Response: I am trying to remember where this came from when I wrote it, but I can't. I think it was just the idea of the last witch staring at the Veil that started it. And since she met the last wizard there, no, I do not think they will die. They will restart wizarding society. Hence the bit of hope at the end. Yes, it was bleak - I don't really plan on ever writing more! - but I'm glad you read it and enjoyed it. Thank you so much for the review!! ~Gina :)
I loved it; it was powerful and gripping, right from the beginning. It was very well written; I look forward to reading more by you.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, I'm glad you enjoyed this strange little story. I hope you enjoy some of my other stories as well! Thanks again! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Wow, thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. I really appreciate the review! ~Gina :)
I knew when I saw the description that if I read this story, then it would make me cry. I was right. It was really good, but hearing this point of view makes me really sad, especially Harry and his kids dying.
Author's Response: It is sad, but I hope you felt the hope at the end. It's a bit of a strange story to me, to be honest. I can't imagine writing anymore, because it would be desperately sad. Thank you so much for reading this, I really appreciate the lovely review! ~Gina :)
This was really intense. Nicely written. I liked it alot
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked it, as dark as it is. I really appreciate you reading and reviewing this story! ~Gina :)
This is STUNNING. It's beautiful and terrible and wonderfully written. It hurts me to think that something like this could happen and that wizards, especially Harry, had to suffer at the hands of Muggles. I hope this wouldn't happen- I hope the world doesn't become like this. Lovely, lovely, job. Keep writing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked it, since it's a bit dark until the very end. I agree - I hope something like this wouldn't happen either. I don't think it really would, and sometimes it's hard for me to write things that I don't actually think would happen, so this was a good thing for me, to write it and make it believable. Thanks so much for the wonderful review, it's so encouraging. I really appreciate it and have no plans to stop writing! ~Gina :)
Definitely intriguing, and I most definitely liked the ending. Very nice job. :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I'm glad it was interesting for you, and that the end worked. The end was part of the original idea, it was always going to finish that way so I'm glad you liked it. Thanks so much for reading this, I really appreciate the review! ~Gina :)
Hmmm, Very interesting idea/oneshot... :-)
Author's Response: Thanks for reading! I appreciate the review! ~Gina :)
Very bleak, but you at least left us with the hope that they can repopulate the world we love.
Great writing, as always, Gina. I'm not sure I needed all the chapter end notes because you weaved the story well enough that I'd picked up most of the back story.
Who was the Squib - evil, evil blighter! Was he a Malfoy or .... a Lestrange?
I want to say enjoyable read, but it wasn't enjoyable exactly. It was, however, enthralling and gripped me. Great job. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Carole - that was exactly the point at the end, that they could repopulate the world. Yay! The Squib is actually a Greengrass - Daphne's granddaughter, if I recall correctly from my scribbled notes in a notebook somewhere upstairs. So, you were close. I'm thinking the Malfoys in particular treated him poorly. Thanks for reading this. I know it's not enjoyable, exactly, like you said, but I'm glad it worked and the things I wanted to come through did. Maybe I'll edit the end notes since no one has questioned the thing yet. Thanks again! ~Gina :)
Wow. Really, really, fantastic, Gina. This was so original and different and yet you stuck to canon and the characters were believable as humans. Sadly the Muggles' actions were also believable.
I loved the opening. You established character and setting so quickly, and you gave such a great sense of the bleakness of this world - even though the Muggle world is intact, there was definitely a sort of post-apocalyptic feel to this which really added to it.
To be honest, I don't think this story seems like it's missing something - you explain enough background in the story for it to make sense.
The idea that a Squib from a Pureblood family genetically created a plague which would wipe out wizards was very believable and creative. Although this line He had been born to magical parents, but without magical ability. seems a little redundant... I think all your readers would know what a Squib is. Just a small thing. It is interesting how humans always persecute those they fear - the round-up of wizards made me think of WWII (in fact I recently saw a French film called "La Rafle" which was about this very thing), and the way the Nazis persecuted Jews because essentially they feared them, or they didn't like the fact that Jews often occupy high-paying jobs etc. Anyway. That whole idea came through very well.
I loved the new beginning/death imagery at the end, and how you called that room the "Chamber of Death". It functioned so well to show the turning point for both these characters. I think it's interesting that they both introduce themselves with their middle names - it's like they're trying to grasp on to the world that they belonged in, but no longer exists.
Just a comment - My cousins died one by one, even Victoire and Dominique and Louis - if Margaret is Harry's granddaughter, Victoire, Dominique and Louis would be her aunts and uncle, not cousins.
Also, I loved the setting being at the Veil, particularly as it's inside the Ministry. They're at the heart of a lost society, it almost feels like they're visiting ruins - except the buildings aren't ruined. Anyway. Lovely choice there.
When Margaret lost her magic - was that because she had had the fever but hadn't actually died?
Anyway, this was beautifully written and unique.
Author's Response: Katrina, thank you so much for the lovely review! I'm especially thrilled because I know this story is a bit bleak and unusual. I'm really glad the things I explained in the end notes came through in the story. Maybe I"ll edit that a bit, but I wasn't sure someone would wonder what in the world was going on. I've already edited the bit with Victorie, etc. - great catch, lol! I appreciate you pointing that out. Let's see - yes, fear is so often a motivator. It was for Voldemort. Yet his response wasn't to go out and destroy everything - he wanted to conquer it. I could see Muggles being so scared as to destroy wizards, but I really, really would like to think we're better than that now. Let's see - oooh, their middle names. It wasn't so much to ground them in their world, but to hint at the world to come. Look again and maybe you'll see. :) And yes, I think that Maggie lost her magic to the fever, but still survived. Not being a genetic scientist, I have no idea if that's really possible, but being a writer, I do. :) Thanks again for the review, I really appreciate it! ~Gina :)