Wow!!! Wow! And a third wow! *speechless*
You managed to make this a story and poem at the same time, a feat that I find rather difficult. It flowed so well, and I could feel the guilt pouring from Hermione. Goodness, Jess, you are an amazing poet! Where do you get it? :P
P.S. Have a happy Halloween, and don't try to leave anyone alone... *spooky music*
Helloooo, my prolific poem reviewer!
Hermione's plight in the tent is one of the most tender and potent genres of character study in the Potterverse, yet so little is made of that time. Julia explores it well in The Lost Weeks, and this humble contribution to the pool pales in comparison, but I'm happy you enjoyed it.
Thank you for visiting, and I shall make sure neither Harry nor Hermione are left alone. Muahahahahaha!
Great poem!! :) makes me really wish i could write them! and hoping the epilogue to The Darkness and the Light comes soon!!
Thank you, I'm glad you like it.
Poems can be a tricky art, but they are so rewarding if you've written one and think...yeah, I like that. :D
Thanks for the review!
ok love the poem, however, i would also like to request that you wright another chapter on Hells Bells! im addicted and this is just cruel!
I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. :)
Hells Bells is waaaaaaaaay backburnered at the moment, though. I hate writing that story, and it hates me right back. For some reason, it takes me weeks just to write one chapter! I do promise that it will get finished, as there is only one, possibly two, chapters left.
Thank for checking in!
thats is exactly what I thought while reading (mostly) except my words were not close to a good. :D
I so agree. It's one of those things that we as Potter fans tend to think, and it's that Hermione is a rock in terms of doing the 'right thing'. We can only imagine what it costs her to do what is right ALL the time in lieu of what feels good or what is easy. We saw how much Harry struggled with it, and he was far less scrupulous than Hermione. Oh, how badly she would've judged herself for even harbouring the thought of leaving Harry.
Thanks for reading and commiserating with me over a missing moment. :D
As you know, I'm not a huge poetry fan, but this looked interesting and I knew it would be good as it was written by you, so I clicked. (I also wrote a story just a few weeks ago with the same title... but getting off track here.)
You captured Hermione so wonderfully here. Of course she would have thought about leaving or wanted to leave at certain times, and yet the last line is so perfect, too, because for that reason she never would have. (If that makes sense.)
You created the setting of the tent and both Hermione and Harry's moods in so few words and so well.
You know, I don't know if I ever could've written an entire fic about Hermione angsting over whether to leave Harry like Ron had, but poetry was the perfect medium for it. As you noticed, it's a very emotional decision, and emotions lend themselves so well to poetry that I couldn't have picked anything else more perfect to display her internal struggle.
I know you don't consider yourself a poetry aficionado (truth be told, I'm the furthest thing from that myself), but you do well in the way you pick up themes and feelings. Hopefully the poets of MNFF can increase your enjoyment of this particular genre. :)
Thanks for reading and reviewing as always!
Ah, poor Hermione and her dilemma. Obviously she couldn't do a Ron and leave, but there must have been times when she wished she could do a runner. You have portrayed her loneliness during those times quite brilliantly. Harry, the brooder, barely speaking. Hermione ever-hopeful that he'll gain some respite, and perhaps that Ron will return (at least the relieve the tension by letting her have a good old rant - HA!.
There are places here where I thought it a bit syllable heavy. Generally, where I think the lines work best is where you have an 11 or 12 syllable pattern, so it might be worth trimming some of the words from certain lines
Even when the dangers and prejudice of the world outside I'd cut 'prejudice' from this line. I don't think it's absolutely necessary to the feel of the poem and it makes the line a bit stumbling to read.
I love the images here - the 'serpentine dreams', 'Horcrux-poisoned thoughts,' and the first stanza immediately painted a picture of them in that awful tent.
Enjoyed the poem, Jess, I'd have just tweaked it a little bit. ~Carole~
I so get how that bit is stumbly. I looked over it, trying to cull it down, but I couldn't put it together.Yay for that!
I'm glad you like the content and the feeling of it. I was hoping that Hermione contemplating skipping out wasn't too strange or inconceivable to portray in a hair over 100 words, lol.
Thanks for stopping in. :D