really great poem!!! i could totally feel what neville was feeling! (who would have thought this was that fogetful little boy that could hardly stand a couldron the right way up? :)
Well, it's hard to imagine cauldron-exploding Neville ever leading a resistance movement, but he had to get there somehow. I just wanted to paint a pivotal part of that process.
Thank you for reading and reviewing, and I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. I hope your Victory Day celebration went well!
Ooh, that's so cool! There are some great turns of phrase for Neville here - "shadow of a hero" and "soldier for the weak" and then finally 'beacon of courage." So perfect! I like the form, too. I have no idea what it is because I know so little about poetry, but I love that it's structured and formal because that's what I like. Great poem, twin. I can't wait to see Neville live this out this summer! ;)
Hehe, the form is freeform, though it's structured. As far as I know, it has no actual term. It does help to drive the meaning forward a bit. And one thing I needed to get across was to show that Neville deferred to Harry wholly at first as the true Chosen One and the one who would lead the world out of darkness. But Harry wasn't there and no one else was taking the reigns, so he stood to be counted.
And Neville so deserves sweet turns of phrase, for he is Teh BAMF!
Heart heart heart, Twin!
Very clever. It's such a great moment, this. Neville staring up at the walls of Hogwarts and accepting his destiny, even though he has no real idea what he's letting himself in for.
He's not a stand in - he's Teh BAMF! (would be more literary, but it's late ...) Good luck with teh challenge, ~Carole~
What I wanted was a personal revelation for Neville that, while the situation was bigger than any one of them, he could be bigger than anyone really gave him credit for. Not only that, he had to be. I don't know if I did any of that (maybe half, at least, lol), but I dids mah best, mate.
Hmm, I wonder if a certain, er, member will have started harrassing Jules for the results yet, lol.
WOW! what else can i say. At first when i read the summary, i didn't know how you were going to make it work, but believe me, you did. I love poetry, and am a huge critic for it. While i read your poem, i could really feel the words, and it definatly sounded like Neville! Great job, i hope to see more from you: )
I'm glad you appreciate the process that Neville's thoughts take in this poem. It wasn't a simple task, but Neville didn't go from his meeker self to the BAMF that chopped Nagini's head off. It makes sense that he might not feel like he's up to it, only to realise that what he thought didn't matter. He had to do it anyway.
Thank you for reading and your positive review. I do have a couple more battle-geared poems, titled The March and Creed of Rebellion . You may enjoy those, though they're early poems of mine and might not be of the *best* quality. Not sure, really, since I'm extraordinarily judgmental about my poetry, lol. :)