well written but more information needed
I just want to say that I used to be a huge Scorpius/Rose shipper until I read this. Thank you for such a lovely, convincing and sexy pairing.
Also, apologies for my other review (the April 1st one). They had to end somewhere!
Author's Response: I admit I was a bit WTF at first, but no offence taken. How can I be angry with another Scugo shipper? Hehe. Thanks for reviewing!
Wow. I think this is one of the first I've read by you, and definitely the first SSP by you.
It's short and simple, to the point. Which is nice, and I think adds to the pleasure of reading it.
I love how much personality you put into Scorpius and Hugo. There's one line, which goes "Of course, he did it, too, but it was worse when he was at the receiving end of such a treatment."
I think that says so much about Scorpius. We don't know what house he's in, and it doesnt matter, but in that line, you can see he is still related to his father, he's not a complete wild card, which is how some people write him. It's a lovely line and it's very revealing.
Likewise, when Scorpius describes Hugo, "He was blunt and stubborn, but quick at setting things right." Again, you take traits from Ron, and put them in his son. But at the same time Hugo is his own person, and not a complete echo of his father, which has become cliche in next-gen fics.
This is really one of those fics where it's short, but absolutely every word contributes. Definite High Quality. I enjoyed it a lot. Thank you.
Author's Response: Oh wow! This is a glorious review. It's a very nice feeling when a reader picks up the details I worked on and compliments me on it. Your analysis is spot-on and it was exactly what I was trying to do without making it too obvious. Thank you so much for leaving behind such lovely words. I really appreciate it. :) ~Natalie
THE EQUALLY WEIRD BROTHERS?? GENIUS!!
I loved it, your fic was sweet and slightly edgy.
Author's Response: Hahaha! Thanks! It was a real treat writing it and coming up with that band. ;)
Whya haven't I seen this before? What's wrong with me? Okay, I admit I'm on a mission, now, but this is exquisite. I just love your take on this relationship. It's normal and not angsty SSP. They're a couple who argue and wow, they're also bloody hot!
I love your extra touches here. The Equally Weird Brothers - ha ha - just love.
I'm struggling to pick out great lines, but knew I was onto a winner when I came to this line The journey over the space between their bodies seemed to take long; his skin recoiled against the ridges of crumpled sheets, fearful of being rejected. - there speaks the experience of someone who's gone to bed on a row - LOL.
OOOH, he shaved his beard off. true love, or lust.
Can you stop ruining Scily for me now? ~Carole~
Author's Response: I'll never stop ruining Scily for you. NEVER. That said, thanks for the review! Yeah, I wanted to write about a normal fight between two lovers, not something that grapples with the issue of homosexuality. And hahaha! That line. OMP. Do I know it or what? Also, true lust. ;) <3333
Natalie, thank you so much for this! You have converted me to your ship.
You really did such a great job making this a real situation. Everyone has had ridiculous arguments with their significant others, and there will always be something that drives you crazy about them. You capture that feeling so well. I will be squeeing every time I read this! Thank you, thank you, thank you!
Author's Response: Uhm. HOW COME I NEVER RESPONDED TO THIS? What is wrong with me?Thank you so much, Lea, and I apologise for this late response. I am thrilled you liked it!~Natalie
I think you really must have converted me, Natalie, because here I am reading another Scorpius/Hugo story... anyway. I have to admit that I rather enjoyed this. As Jess said in her review, it just shows the normalcy of life so well... when I saw this, I expected it to be about them as teenagers, because that seems to be the most common thing for people to write. But this was just a lovely insight into two peoples' adult lives, not at all dramatic, just normal.
Oh yeah, I loved the "Equally Weird Brothers". That definitely made me smile.
And of course, as usual, your writing was perfect for this story, it flowed well and was just generally amazing.
That didn’t, however, mean that it was a nice thing to live with a moody lover for hours at end. - I always thought the expression was "hours on end", but that could just be me lol. It just sounded a bit odd to me so I thought I'd mention it.
Anyway. Great story again :),
Author's Response: Katrina! You're right about the 'at end/on end' part. Lol. I seriously need a tutorial on prepositions. I am so HAPPY to know I converted someone. :D When I started writing them, I had no investments in the pairing at all, but now, they are a couple in my next-gen universe. I think it's partly because I have maintained their characterisation and given them a story built over numerous one-shots. I really like writing them now, though. The "Equally Weird Brothers" is something I had used in an early fanfic (which I never finished). It's nice to know it's making people smile. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Katrina! ~Natalie
There are just so many wonderful things about this story that make it beautiful. I think what struck me was the normalcy of it. No one writes about domestic pettiness that often, but the way you've painted it is so realistic and well done. Relationships aren't about great love and all that junk; they're about overcoming stupid obstacles that no one ever thinks about but tend to topple the best of lovers. My brother's marriage actually ended over him not taking out the trash. Sure, that wasn't the whole story, but it was the tipping point.
My breath caught in my throat when Hugo rolled over clean-shaven. He is the ultimate piss-taker, and that he didn't let Scorpius have his way right away was giggly and perfect. It means that he knows and understands Scorpius's bitchy stread but loves him anyway and is prepared to deal with it.
You write these two so well, and I'm glad you cranked out this little tidbit of snazziness in the middle of the night. :D
Author's Response: Jezza! Yeah. Relationships are not about 'twoo wob' and all that jazz. It's sticking it out through the little things. (Hahaha at my sentences mirroring yours.) Hugo really is the generous one in this relationship; it's been like that since I started writing the pairing, so when I saw that you'd picked this up here, I felt a little bubble of pride popping up inside of me. Thankkkks for reading and reviewing! It made my night. ~Nazza