i LOVE your ron in this. you nailed him so well!
It's interesting that you'd bring that up, considering I hardly ever write him, and when I do, it's only because I have to. But that he comes across as real and right for the part makes me happy (and my pack of Ron-loving friends, as well, lol).
Thanks for reviewing. :D
sorry, I took that as you meaning Hermione is wrong for choosing stupid/dumb/average/sidekick Ron - my fault!
Well, by definition, 'spectactular' means 'marked by or given to dramatic display; dramatically daring or thrilling'. When comparing the commonly associated attributes of both guys, Viktor does seem the more 'spectacular'. That was all I meant by that. I am sorry there was a misunderstanding.
That being said, I do hope that you would be willing to give the story a chance.
"have her settle for a less spectacular Ron."
you've got to be kiddin' me!
Well, honestly, compared to Viktor, who is famous for not only Quidditch, but his Triwizard Tournament participation, not to mention his loyalty to Hermione as detailed in the story, Ron does seem rather pedestrian. However, Ron is the pedestrian bloke that Hermione wants and always has. I fail to see where you take offence.
PS. I have to agree with Katrina that I felt bad for Viktor when Hermione said no. Poor, poor guy. I wish he could have a happy ending. Write one, sometime??
Author's Response: Hehe, definitely. :D
I quite like this, twin! I mean, I can TOTALLY see Hermione and Krum having a life together, more than Hermione and any other character she's ever paired with, even Harry (sorry, lol.) I think you've nailed Viktor's character here, and really brought out some of JKR's genius with him and even improved and extended it. I just love how honorable and respectful he is. Guh, how could Hermione resist after that kiss? After he offers to leave his life his be with her? And yet, you've shown us exactly why she chooses Ron. The end was adorable. :)
The accents were great, especially Hagrid. That really jumped out at me because that can be hard to pull off. Nice work with that.
Love this one. Great pairing and great job! ~Gina :)
Lol, I headdesked for days over hoping Viktor's accent was realistic. Every single line in there of his, I said aloud to make sure it made sense. In terms of personality, I wanted him to be dedicated to Hermione, but not in that creepy, stalkery way. He gave her space and time in the hopes that it would make her realise that she loved him, too. I think he spent so much time hoping for it that he never stopped to think that, in the years they'd been apart, that she might've moved on to someone else or simply outgrew her feelings from when they were together before. And yeah... I felt bad for doing that to him. :(
And I knew that, at some point, I'd have to give up my non-canon wish for Viktor and Hermione to have a bunch of Quidditch playing genius kids and have her settle for a less spectacular Ron. In reality, at this point, he was more what she needed, though had Viktor asked me to move across teh world, I would have hopped on the back of his broomstick in an instant.
Glad you liked it. I still will write a Krumione that isn't unrequited, but for the moment, this will have to do. It did take some time for me to decide how I wanted it to end; after all was said and done, though, it was the right thing to do.
Lovely review, Twin. :D
This was something really different and original and I really enjoyed it. You completely nailed Hermione's characterisation - I smiled when she was expecting to be remonstrated by Madam Pomfrey for falling asleep, it was so typical of her. I think you show a real strength of character in her, too, because the idea of Viktor - someone who would do anything for her and is so attentive and in many ways "perfect" - would be very tempting, particularly because it would be something to hold onto when she's going through so much. I wasn't sure what you were going to do with that scene, particularly when they were in the forest together and Hermione was still so unsure of what Ron felt for her. I really liked the way you solved it.
I do feel a bit bad for Viktor, though, because he does seem to genuinely care for her. I think it's great that you explored this a bit more, because in canon we're never given a definitive ending to this relationship.
Ron was just so... Ron in that last scene. He doesn't say things in the same gentlemanly chilvalrous way that Viktor does, but that doesn't mean he doesn't care. You got his dialogue just perfect there.
You handled Viktor's accent really well - it didn't break up the flow of the story at all. I liked how each character's dialogue sounded different - you wrote Hagrid's really well, and there were just mannerisms in each person's dialogue that made it clear who was talking.
One thing - near the end you wrote "It's like a plank with a blanked sewn on" - I assume you meant blanket?
Hehe, yeah, it was supposed to be 'blanket'. In my defence, it was 2am, I'd been up for nearly 24 hours, and that deadline (the same one as Petunia's story) was looming big time. I skimmed it, but not well enough, lol. Thank you for pointing that out. :D
What I wanted was for Viktor to have a bit of a disillusioned view of what had been between them. He thought that she wanted what he did and that the only reason it never worked between them was the age gap, which would've been less important, since Hermione was only a few months away from turning 19. He didn't realise that what she'd actually been doing when she was with him during fourth year was jerking Ron around for not asking her to the Yule Ball, which is an appropriately immature action for a fifteen year old. He just never saw her as the hurt little girl that she was at the time. And when she never dissuaded him of that notion by keeping in contact, he kept holding out hope that the next step would come. He was even willing to move across the world for her. I wanted to hug him when she said no.
And as for being in the woods, Viktor was sort of angling for something along those lines. It wasn't that he felt it was his due, but more that she felt the same about him as he did her. He never knew that he just didn't have a chance with her, not when she'd always had a thing for Ron.
I tried to make them true to their canon characters, but still a bit of what I personaly picture. While I'm not sure that Hermione ever thought twice about furthering things with Viktor, I wanted him to make it hard to say no. She'd never truly had her own personal hero before, but he'd have spent every waking moment trying to be that for her. That's why I wanted her to falter, if only for a moment.
Hagrid makes me aggravated when I listen to him talk in the movies. I'm a proponent for clear, concise speech, and he makes my English hurt, hehe. I'm glad I could bring forth his Devon-ish accent without butchering it, lol.
Thanks for the lovely review. You understood where I wanted to go with the story and even made me a bit more confident that I did it well. I heart you for that. :D