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Name: Snowlily (Signed) · Date: 06/12/11 9:01 · For: Chapter 1, The Zimmermaanns.
Very well written, I enjoyed it very much. I just have one question: if she was expelled from Durmstrang under Grindlewald, for being a Muggleborn Jew, why wasn't she killed? It seems too perfect a combination to pass up murdering, if I were thinking of Grindlewald.

Author's Response: Grindelwald doesn't actually wish to kill Jews, per say. He is simply against Muggles and Muggleborns, but exploiting prejudices and the Muggle war. As Hitler banned Jews from non-Jewish schools, Grindelwald extended this to Durmstrang, as the only Jews there were Muggleborns (conventional magical talent is rare in the Jewish community; thus the perfect place for Grindelwald to start). Sofia doesn't know this, and all will be revealed in a later chapter, but essentially Grindelwald doesn't particularly want to be seen as spilling magical blood as it's all part of a scheme for 'the greater good'. Witches and Wizards across Europe don't know/realise the extent of Grindelwald's influence, it's guess work for the vast majority - including, crucially, Sofia herself. Thank you very much for your review, I'm happy to answer any further questions :)

Name: Kaiserin (Signed) · Date: 05/23/11 19:05 · For: Chapter Three, The Acceptance
Poor girl! Poor poor girl... making such a decission... Being forced to leave her family and fend for herself...
PS: DIppet is an arse! Colossal one. Glad you portrayed him so well. Great story! Keep them coming!

Author's Response: Thank you! Chapter four is nearly finished. From here on it won't be so dark, although certainly still a sad fic. I'm glad you like it :D

Name: LukiLaeta (Signed) · Date: 05/23/11 18:48 · For: Chapter 1, The Zimmermaanns.
I L-O-V-E it so far, it's very well written! It's realistic, and INTERESING, something that I sometimes fail to find in stories. Nicely done on your part. I hope you write more!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I was getting rather low about the lack of reviews and reads. I'm glad you find it realistic :)

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 04/16/11 1:27 · For: Chapter 1, The Zimmermaanns.
This is a wonderful idea for a story. You're dealing with harsh issues here - the harshest, infact - and intertwing them pretty darn well with the Potterverse.

Your style and use of language is very good and the scene setting at the beginning is so intense. I was immediately brought right into the story and the atmosphere.

there were one or two places where I thought the phrasing a bit clumsy.

But she was a Jew, and Jews were not welcomed there any longer, by the influence of Grindelwald. I think this should either be 'by the order of Grindelwald, if he's in charge. Or 'under Greindelwalds influence. I'm also not sure about the comma before 'by' but I'm not going to argue with the redoubtable Kara!

She knew the war had Grindelwald’s influence, but she had not considered the extent to which magic may be involved. This didn't make sense to me. 'had been influenced by Grindelwald, perhaps? I'm understand what you're saying, but I think there's a missing word somewhere. (Just not sure what.)

I am very intrigued by the wizard turning up at the end and have no idea who it is (unless it's Tom Riddle). I look forward to reading more. This really is a good story. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you so much :D You're so very helpful and lovely :D

Name: Kaiserin (Signed) · Date: 04/12/11 14:44 · For: Chapter 1, The Zimmermaanns.
So far, so good. I don't see no reason or way to sugar-coat a story dealing with issues or set in an time and place such as the ones you've chosen. I, for one feel it would be unsuitable. Also, there are plenty of dark stories around in the site, as longs as you keep the warnings accordingly, there is no reason not to be realistic.

Anyhow, I'd like to see how this story goes on. Seems very promising so far. Also, how old is Sofia? Obviously over 11, I think I may have missed her actual age...

Author's Response: Ah very sorry, she's 16, I'll make sure to make that clear next chapter :) Thank you for your comments xx

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