This was really cool! It had a great steady beat, and it was about one of my favorite characters!!!!!! The last stanza is truly inspiring: with my potions I will change the world, with my potions I will change. Sigh!!!!!!! What a great perspective to have. :)
Author's Response: He did change the world, even if it wasn't the way he'd dreamed. Thank you!
As always, I wasn't going to read poetry but loyalty overcame my general dislike of poetry. Despite my efforts to be different, my nephew says I'm too predictable. One aspect I liked was how the words appeared on the page. For me, that's important in poetry. I reread and now things are falling into place. The first time through, I thought Severus had given Harry detention and I was wondering when Harry hexed Severus. Then, I read "Potter" as "James" and it made more sense. I alway like to hear how different people interpret poetry or song lyrics as those seem to have a number of meanings and as many interpretations. And now, I'm going to kick back and watch the news and maybe nap. It's a rainy and dreary Sunday morning--a perfect time to nap with the boys. I enjoyed reading this very much.
Huzzah for friends who read poems when they're not into poetry! I was so into thinking of Severus as a type of Dr. Horrible pining for the girl who ends up with his nemesis that I didn't think of anyone interpreting Potter as Harry instead of James. Have you ever seen Dr. Horrible on youtube? Google Laundry Day Dr. Horrible and watch just that two minute song I think you'd love it. The oblivious object of his affection even has red hair. I love the lyrics, too.
That's the plan.
Rule the world.
You and me.
Aww this was kind of sad. But mostly I loved it! I love the idea that tiny things are wonderful and life-changing.The idea that just one potion--a tiny, fame-bottling, death-halting elixer (which Lily could totally have used!)--can change somebody's life is magical, and I love it. Granted, it's usually sappy and stupid, but somehow you chose the one character who proved that silly saying correct! I love Sev! And you.
Thank you! There are parallels between Severus and Dr. Horrible: they both are the friend secretly (and obsessively) in love with a girl who ends up with their nemesis and dies as an unintended consequence of their actions. It’s sad for Severus and tragicomic for Billy, Dr. Horrible, although I could definitely imagine Severus singing these lines (with potions replacing Freeze Ray):
With my (potions) I will find the time to find the words to
Tell you how
How you make
Make me feel
What's the phrase?
Like a fool
With my (potions) I will stop - the pain
OH MY GOSH! I'm so glad you're back! :D
This was really good. I don't write free verse, but I do write (and admire) poetry!
Author's Response: Thank you for liking the poem! I'm sure many students have called Snape Professor Horrible, heh, and Alan Rickman's been known to sing, :D, so it seemed an inspired combination. Percocet inspired, maybe, :P, but inspired all the same.