Hey, I think this story was interesting but it was kinda a stretch for me to imagine Wormtail having the guts to go tell James what was up. Also, I think James would have told Lily. But nevertheless I think you did a good job of capturing what may have been running through Wormtail's and James' minds in this situation.
Yeah really cool story, fits perfectly into the canon. I read this post Part 2 and lily's theme from the album was good to listen to as I read this.
"I like to look at the other side of a character that no one really likes, and try and figure out what made the character the person that they are."
Thank goodness! I love when people acknowledge the gray area! Peter, I believe, is a character that really deserves a look from another perspective.
You wrote about him always being overshadowed by the other three Marauders, and perhaps...(well, I don't know if this is what you're going for, but I suppose this is what I was able to surmise) that maybe people didn't really take the time to understand how different he actually was from his friends, and that all of this confusion surrounding his general...coping ability, sort of pushed him too far.
I mean, one can't entirely write him off as just a plain old villainous coward (again, going back to the grey area thing) when the hat sorted him into Gryffindor...
Wow. This review has tapered off into a jargon-filled in-depth analysis of Peter Pettigrew's psyche....
Well, as you can probably tell, I found this all quite interesting.
Your writing is good. Keep posting stuff!
This is so sad! I'd never really thought of it like that- that James knew, that Wormtail would've come to tell him. And I think his last thoughts were of Lily and Harry.....Alas, just my own ponderings and opinion, but, all in all, lovely story!
Author's Response: It was really just a spur-of-the-moment thought for me, and then I couldn't stop wondering what would have happened if James saw Peter before he died. I'd also like to think that James would be thinking of his family before he died, but I thought that this fit more, based one what had just happened. James has seen the two extremes: Peter eventually siding with Voldemort, and himself (James) vehemently defying Voldemort. Now that he's about to die, he can't help rethinking his choices. Thank you for the review! ~Artsy_Werewolf
Your story has definitely made me think. I think Peter is a very interesting character, and obviously being apart of the Marauders and yet always feeling not good enough would be part of his betrayal. I've always seen it as a mixture between a desire to outshine his friends and be different and fear of Voldemort, so I think your take on it is very interesting. Peter is certainly more of a man in your fic than I've ever seen him as - I never would have imagined him having the guts to tell James that he'd effectively murdered him. But I think it's a very interesting interpretation. Peter was in Gryffindor, after all. And Voldemort is terrifying.
I really liked James' thoughts at the end about Peter's betrayal, it really ended off the fic nicely and gave me some empathy for Peter, which is a hard thing to do.
I think your portrayal of Peter is interesting, too, because in canon (as in particularly in PoA but also later) he just seems so pathetic, but I suppose that comes from living in fear as a rat for 12 years and from the guilt eating away at him.
I think it's very in character for James not to want to tell Lily, and yet it seems tragic, as perhaps that could have saved their lives. I was wondering - how did James think Lily would be able to escape whilst he was distracting Voldemort? Wouldn't she have to leave through the front door to be able to Apparate? Just a small thing... anyway, I think James was well-written throughout, actually. His conversation with Peter was just perfect.
I do apologise for this review which is rather all over the place... I usually have some kind of structure in reviews... but the main point is that your story is well-written, well-characterised and poignant and truly amazing for a first fic. Can't wait for more :). (I hope you do more Peter fics, perhaps one about him after killing all those Muggles and Sirius going to Azkaban - I'm sure you would write it very intriguingly.) Anyway, loved this fic!!
Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for the review! I've always been interested in looking at the antagonist's point of view, and especially with Peter, I really wanted to look at how he could possibly justify his actions. I mean, I think that James, more than any of the other Marauders, was the almost-super-hero that Peter looked up to. I'd like to think that there's always been a part of Peter that remains loyal to his friends, because no matter what happened with Voldemort or anything else, he'll always remember the friendship that the four of them had. That's the main point that I was trying to get across through this fic. To answer your question about Lily leaving, I think that's one area where a bit of the Gryffindor recklessness/rushing-into-things comes into play. James is mostly thinking about how he can protect Lily at /that/ moment, instead of necessarily wondering how she can escape. Maybe he thought that if distracted Voldemort for long enough, she could get a safe distance away and Apparate with Harry? I honestly don't think that he was looking too far ahead when he made the decision to not tell her. I haven't given too much thought to other Peter stories, although you've definitely given me a good idea for another one :). Thank you again for the review!! ~Artsy_Werewolf
Great portrayal of Wormtail and his relationship with James, as well as James/Lily! Awesome oneshot.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! :)