I've been really enjoying this story- I appreciate the more realistic portrayals of Albus, Aberforth, and Tom. I like how you make Albus more human than JKR does without completely villainizing him. I also like how you make Tom sympathetic without lionizing him. This is a nice, well-balanced story. Thanks for a great read!
I love your story! I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you! I hope you enjoy the rest :)
ooooh this explains every question i had in the previous chapter! again, i think you understand dumbledore's character very well. of course castle albus would take time to research the oddities before acting. excellent characterization again! i am very amused, by the way, by the deference albus gives to castle albus.
p/s- thanks for the clarification about aloysius v alastor~! having abraxas malfoy as a kid in this chapter also helped with putting the timeline you are working with in context. =)
Author's Response: We shall have to see how quickly the deference becomes exasperation and indignation. Albus might be older, but he is still very prone to sulking when things don't go his way...discreetly, of course! It's great to hear that you liked the chapter. I hope you continue to enjoy the rest of it too. re: p/s - my fault! I had sent poor Albus tumbling into a strange timeline and didn't have the good sense to put a short note about the relative age of characters. Sorry if that muddled things.
Another great chapter! The plot is thickening and things are definitely getting very interesting... Moody and Bode's responses were so hostile! Granted, Tom almost killed Ollivander and speaks Parseltongue, but they had immediate hatred rather than surprise. I don't like Bode already. And while I usually hate/fear snakes, I feel bad for Hero T.T
Thick emotions: very fitting.
Castle Albus seems too aloof and too unconcerned for Aberforth. Did you write him to be still too young and much less wise about the world? How can the great proponent of "love" be so unloving towards his brother? =(( Still, the "lemon drops?" suggestion at the end was 100% in character and super awesome.
Great chapter again =) Little nitpick: unless that Moody is not Mad-Eye Moody, his first name is actually Alastor.
Author's Response: Hey, hello! I'm glad that you liked the chapter :) I'm glad that the lemon-drops suggestion at the end of the chapter works! I've been trying to delineate the characters of Castle Albus and old Albus in the coming chapters and I hope that works... I am not too fond of snakes myself. Ranks right next to frogs in my book. Aloysius is Alastor's Dad :) I was thinking that Alastor (Mad-Eye) might be at school around the same time as Tom Riddle. I'm too sure about Alastor's canon age, though.
this story is getting more and more delightful. i wish that albus had stepped in and stopped matthew before tom went overboard, because then at least amy would still like tom. argh. but you hit the nail right on the head with aberforth's analysis of albus: "This moment, you want nothing more than to prove that he is a murderer in making." i like how you make albus begin to see his prejudices and favoritism. i guess even the best of wizards have flaws. great chapter as usual, and i look forward to reading more =)
Author's Response: Hi again! It's great to hear that you're liking the characterisation of Albus. I hope he stays true to form in the coming chapters and doesn't end up sappy! I hope to update soon! Thank you for telling me what you thought of the chapter :)
albus seems a little different, but it's really nice to see him more human. i like your characterization of the young tom riddle a lot. he seems pretty adult every now and then, but i really like it anyway. please continue writing! i look forward to updates! =)
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and talking, Littlewolf! I hope that the characterisations hold true to the plot in the coming chapters and that you will enjoy them too! Updated now :)