It's very romantic, which makes it completely true. Any story with a Ron acting like DonJuan ( not the multiple girlfriends, but the always knows the right way to charm a girl) for me just isn't compatible with canon. Anyway this story is in a way much more romantic than other versions of this same scene simply because I can picture my husband acting in the same way. (We were sitting on a sofa right before he proposed, so he didn't fall)
Author's Response: Thanks. Ron is not great at romance, but that doesn’t mean that he can’t be romantic in his own way. On and Hermione (in my opinion) both suffer from low self-esteem and doubts, but both can see the other’s strengths. This catalogue of Ron’s anxieties was remarkably easy to write. -N-
I love Ron reading Hermione's thoughts.
Author's Response: Thanks, Ron isn't a complete idiot (honest). :-) -N-
Proposal Ron style very good
Author's Response: Thanks -N-
I loved it, I did. I was anxious throughout, wondering how he'd manage THE question. I laughed when Ron describes, appropriately, the reactions on Hermione's face. I think it was great. Loved the mush at the end too.
Author's Response: Thanks. Ron's anxious self-doubt made this a lot of fun to write. I'm glad Imade you laugh. -N-
So sweet! I loved Ron's agonizing thoughts as he was on his way. Very realistic.
cj
Author's Response: Thanks cj
Ron’s self-doubt certainly kicked in big-time.-N-
This was soo typically Ron....I love your representation of him....!!!!
After all that panic....the last line was awesome....!!!!
I really can't find anything to costructively critisize.......except that THE FANFIC ROXX(AGAIN)!!!!
:D
Author's Response: Thanks. I think I must be closer to Ron than Harry, this was so much easier to write. The last line was (I hope) typical Ron - It won't work - it won't work - it woked, I always knew it would. -N-
Read this again after reading The Question (Again) and it is even better than I remember. So sweet!
Author's Response: Thanks -N-
I love it!!!!
Author's Response: Thanks -N-
That was perfect. It captured Ron's personality to a tee. Loved the line about the moisture leaving his mouth and coming out of his palms. Very well done (as usual).
Author's Response: Thanks. I sympathise with Ron, and I find his anxieties easy to relate to. Harry's question is now being beta read. -N-
I like it! t-shirt, t-hee.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. -N-
really funny and very heartwarming i laughed aloud at the end
Author's Response: Thanks, once again Ron manages to extemporise to good effect. -N-
Neil,
Characters were spot on. Great work. I enjoyed it. I liked the idea that Ron and Harry would ask the question at the same time.
Thanks,
nat
Author's Response: Thanks
I enjoyed this short trip inside Ron's head. I will write the Harry proposal one day.-N-
Completely charming.
Author's Response: Thank you :-D -N-
aaawwww! i loved it! so sweet!
Author's Response: Thank you -N-
Absolutely adorable! I love how Ron allows the situation to inspire him in the spir of the moment, how romantic! R/H cuest couple ever! Thanks for sharing!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I was aiming for something romantic, in a very Ron way. :-D -N-
Awww that was so sweet. Ron can be romantic.
Author's Response: He can, and clumsy and quick thinking too. -N-
Wow, it's been a while since I've reviewed! I guess life just got in the way. Anyway, I love this story! I think it was a great idea to put it in Ron's point-of-view because I really get a feel of how nervous he is. I love all the imagery of him walking to Hermione's house and even thinking about how he's walking. It was just perfect for the tone of the story! The ending was absolutely precious too, and so true to Ron's character! Of course he would get tongue-tied and stumble on the steps! :) Another wonderful story, Neil! :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I’ve been experimenting with first person point-of-view again (as should be obvious from Strangers at Drakeshaugh too). I was trying to show, rather than tell, Ron’s nerves. I hope that I’ve succeeded. -N-
That was rock and roll all over, right from the start. The very idea that Harry and Ron propose en sync. It's a highly provable idea! And Ron's uneasiness was quite adorable, very in character too. I was particularly fond of his lengs-brain relationship. "Legs, keep walking, ignore that stupid brain."
Impeccably written and in a very suitable way for Ron to propose; coming fully determined, nearly blowing it but making a sound, sensible safe in the last minute. Liked it very, very, very much!!!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.
As I’ve said in other review repliess, the idea for this, and the fact that it had to be Ron’s inner monologue arrived pretty much fully formed. Ron’s panic was (I hope) only natural. He really should have fastened that shoelace!-N-
This made me laugh. It was just so... well... Ron. You really did his characterisation fantastically - particularly the part when he doubted himself. I think it's really interesting that you chose to focus on his thoughts leading up to proposing, rather than actually proposing itself, it really gave insight into Ron. I loved the last line, too. It finished this off nicely.
Like some other reviewers, I am hoping you'll write the story of Harry's proposal to Ginny, I'm sure it could be equally as interesting.
Anyway, thanks for a great read.
~Katrina
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.
I think Ron gained a lot of maturity and confidence in DH. But regardless of that, this is a situation where confidence fails unless you have an ego the size of a planet.
Harry? Possibly, but not soon, unless inspiration strikes.-N
