I may have said this before and I deem the comment worth repeating: this is a lovely story that blends the wizard and Muggle worlds beautifully. You've put a great amount of thought into the juxtapositions and double-entendres throughout. Keep up the good work.
Thank you. The balance between what Jaqcui sees and understands and what is actually happening is always a delicate one. Things begin to change in the next chapter, as Jacqui again visits Drakeshaugh.-N-
Sweden, in an hour? I wonder what Jacqui will think/say about this. I love the other accounts of the party from the other mums. What a pot stirrer Mary is! Naughty Naughty! Thank you Neil, another great chapter!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review.
You'll find out hat Jacqui will think in the next chapter. Mary has, it seems, made up her mind. Will she regret that decision?-N-
Oh dear, I think Ginny just slipped there. Sweden, one hour? I don't know how long the flight takes but Jacqui will have an idea, and she will know about waiting for luggages and immigration queues...
Glad you updated.
Author's Response: From where they are (The Drake Stone is real, although Drakeshaugh is not) it would take almost an hour to reach the nearest Airport (Newcastle). More soon, but you’ll see more H&P first (plus some other stuff0. -N-
Love it!! Can't wait to see how it all turns out. You really do this whole wizards-interacting-with-muggles stuff awfully well!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Next, Jacqui visits Drakeshaugh again, and after that there will be an interlude in the Auror Office with Harry. -N-
I would have liked a little more descriptive firework display, but other then that, it was good. I was anxious for another chapter, thanks.
Author's Response: Thanks, I did wonder about the fireworks. you'll probably hear a little more about them in the next chapter. -N-
Wonderful, as usual! It's so vastly entertaining to read your depictions of Muggles and wizards interacting, and the inevitable chaos that ensues!
Author's Response: Thank you. This particular interaction took a lot of getting right, hence the delay in updating. There is more chaos to come. -N-
Author's Response: Thanks, and thank you also for making this my most reviewed story! :-D -N-
I've waited to share my observations, so here goes: You are crafting a lovely story, intertwining the Wizard and Muggle worlds almost seamlessly. The action does not lag, nor do the character interactions. A Potterphile can easily follow your thoughts when Muggle parallels are necessary; thank you for not "talking down" to your readership by using parenthetic asides to explain the situation. Cryptic, yet forthright, text is working for you! I don't know how long you plan to continue this work; however, I do hope you resolve the mystery of the killings AND Jacqui's blood-status. Could we possibly see Henry at Hogwarts in the future????
Fantastic job!!! Keep it up.
Thank you.This story is a balancing act. As I’ve said before, if Jacqui discovers too much, she gets Obliviated, and I lose my narrator. She has to be able to report, but not fully understand. I wondered about the job descriptions I used during the party, but everyone seems to understand the Muggle translations. All readers are intelligent, and if they cant figure stuff out, that's my fault, not theirs.
I estimate that I’m about halfway through this story. It will end on Bonfire Night (November 5th - which is also Henry's birthday). Harry has to get past two full moons first. The killings will be resolved, but Jacqui’s blood status may not be (at least, not completely).Several people would like to see Henry at Hogwarts. I’m not one of them, I think it would make life too easy for the Potters (and me).
This was fantastic as usual, I'm just sorry it wasn't longer. :P I really enjoyed all those little slips, and Victoire's accidental magic. Did I sense some memories being modified? Or was that just me being paranoid?
This was definately enjoyable, and I can't wait to see what happens next! :D :D :D
Thank you. This was a “throw out the first and second drafts and start again” chapter. It was a nightmare to write, because of the way I tried to write it. What you sensed was the possibility of some memories being modified.
Next, another week of the boring old school run. Nothing exciting happens. ;-D
A wonderful addition to this story! I absolutely loved all the interactions; you wove all the complications of hiding the wizarding secret while interacting with Muggles quite flawlessly.
Looking forward to more of any story! :)
Author's Response: Katie, thanks for the review.
Not completely flawlessly, there were a few trifling issues. :-)Next will almost certainly be a chapter of Hunters and Prey.
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Author's Response: Thank you. -N-
Finally! I had to go and read the last chapter to remember what was going on- but well done! I love how you depict the "muggles mingling with wizards getting subtle hints" without overdoing it. Er, update soon?
Author's Response: Thanks. Yes this one took some time. I had a lot of problems with this chapter, all of my own making. I’m simply glad it’s finally done. I’m hoping to get another chapter completed before the end of the year. -N-
Yyyaaayyyy!!:) an update!!:) I'm so happy! I loved it! Keep writing!!
Author's Response: Thanks, glad you liked it. Next you'll see Hunters and Prey, probably. -N-
Great to have the next installment of the story. Poor George, nice that he has Angelina to cheer him up.
Loved the way they managed to keep the Muggles guessing.
Author's Response: Thank you.
George is coping, most of the time. And the Muggles are a little confused, but that's all.I'm going to try to get another chapter done before the year ends. We'll see.
Ok three things to say:
1- I love this story
2- when's the next chapter comin up?
3- you should make Annie magical an she accsiddently does magic, you know like Harry did before he got his hogwarts letter, infront of the potters and they help rise her and teach them how to handle her.
Author's Response: 1- Thank you.
2- The next chapter should be with my betas in a couple of days.I considered it, but it’s a lot more fun if the Charltons remain as Muggles.
More please!! I really love this series!!
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm working on the next chapter now. -N-
o my gosh i LUV this sory
Author's Response: Thanks -N-
An excellently done story. I absolutely love the diction and the characters that you've created. Please continue!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, I'm currently working on both this, and Hunters and Prey, so expect more soon. -N-