Somehow, your story has managed to pass me by until today. I really like it. Little tidbits from non-canon POV are so refreshing. I like how poor Jacqui was gotten herself into an awkward muddle; it's quite realistic. I also like the portrait you've painted of the young Potters. Please keep writing!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I intend to write most (though probably not all) of this story from Jacqui’s perspective. The Muggle outsider is a great viewpoint, as readers know a lot more than she does. -N-
Damn! I love this story!
Author's Response: Thanks :-) -N-
Very interesting story so far--I like the fresh pov.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. The pov is interesting. The readers can make better guesses about what is going on than the narrator (I hope). -N-
Great story line!
Author's Response: Thanks you -N-
good chapter, like how real you've made them.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. -N-
"strangling the English language" - that was my favorite line! Although the whole thing was quite brilliant. Wow. This is such a great story because of its originality, but it can be completely true to canon. GENIUS!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Henry is certainly capable of violent abuse of the language. Jacqui sees and reports everything, even though she doesn’t always understand what she sees. -N-
awwww cutest chapter ever!!! Harry is such a great dad (and i could totally picture his entrance with bad-ass music in the background lol) I love this story a lot, the kids are absolutely adorable, and your plot with the "werewolf" murders is really interesting! I can't wait to read more, update soon!
Author's Response: Thanks. This is an everyday story of parenthood, family life, moving house, a new school, a big black motorbike—and werewolf murders. It could only be life with the Potters. :-) -N-
you are a beautiful writer . in the past month your stories have consumed me (: this story is like nothing else ive ever read on this site and it is very refreshing . but i cant wait for more chapters in your other stories (cough , aurors and schoolgirls , cough ) (;
Author's Response: Kelsey. Thanks for the review. I’ve definitely never read anything like this story either. I hit a snag with Aurors and Schoolgirls, :-( but I think I’ve fixed it. :-) I will be back on it when I finish “Tales of the Battle” (only two chapters left). -N-
That was another great chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you. -N-
All I have to say is awwwww :) Well, other than that, I do think you're right, Harry and the rest of the Potter clan are VERY interesting and fun from a muggle point of view. I'll have to remember that...
I actually have something that I wanted to ask you: have you ever read a story on this site and then go back and it's gone? I was really enjoying this story "The Greatest Power" by MuggleMomma, I wrote reviews, added it to my favorites section, etc. I went back yesterday to see if chapter four had been posted, and the story had vanished. I used the site searcher and couldn't find it, it was GONE from my favorites section as were my reviews, and evey trace of it is gone! POOF! I e-mailed the site administrator, but haven't heard back yet. I really liked the story...
As always, keep up the good work, thank you for answering my reviews, and HAVE FUN writing!
Thanks for the review. This is a lot of fun to write (though also hard work). I love throwing in stuff which (I hope) readers will spot, but Jacqui doesn’t. Harry’s bike, is of course, Sirius’ and the t-shirt he’s wearing (--RPI--) is, of course...
I’ll be honest, I read very little fanfic. I’m sure that the mods will help. I know (from experience) that when you’re banned from HPFF all your stories are deleted and you become an unperson. I’m certain that this site is much more mature. But any author could pull their stories. I could delete all of mine.
I like this story. i like all your stories actually. Especially sleepless night. Big fan of canon-compliant post battle stuff. I woul love to see how this story plays out. Keep it coming
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, and the kind words. Chapter 2 (The Pick Up) is in the queue and has been for ten days. -N-
I really enjoyed this story, I always thought Harry and Ginny would send there kids to muggle school. Anyway, really looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I agree, and I'm sure that Hermione wouldn't want her kids to lose touch with the world of her parents (and her own childhood) either. -N-
Wonderful. Keep it coming. Can't wait to see how this ends.
Author's Response: Thanks. I will I’m currently working on chapter 7 (among other things) -N-
Great start to a new and unusual story.
Why are the Potters living in Coquetdale?
(It's a lovely place, I've been there on holiday.)
Looking forward to seeing how the story unfolds.
Like the Charlton joke!
Thanks for the review.
Coquetdale because I wanted to use a remote area of England, and this one is handy (for me). It is a lovely place. Next: more Jacqui, no Ginny, but lots of Harry.
I called my narrator Jacqui then looked for a Reiver surname. I wrote this chapter (and most of the next) before I realised that she was Jacqui Charlton. I considered changing it (to Chisholm) but the name was already in my head, so I gave her the joke line instead. Her maiden name was Wake (is that important?).-N-
Great first chapter ! Will there be ginny's and harry's point of view too ?
Author's Response: Thanks. The next chapter (and several more) will be from Jacqui’s perspective. I’d like to write the entire thing from her pov, but I suspect that won’t be possible. -N-
As a faithful reader, I am quite pleased with your work. Thank you for updating regularly and keeping your stories as "real" and in character as possible.
Keep 'em coming!
Thanks for the review.
The Potters as they appear from a Muggle perspective = fun!
Author's Response: Thanks -N-
I absolutely love this! Your original characters are written so well and they seem very real to me! That doesn't usually happen much, and I'm often put off by OC's, but yours are great. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I hope that you do like Jacqui, as you’ll be seeing everything from her perspective for quite some time. -N-
hmmm...i'm interest to know where you're taking this, but other than that, i liked it, it was...normal. Ginny seemed a little OOC, but she was obviously nervous and I'm wondering what's up with their living situation, have they moved or do they not live in Gimmauld Place? But it was very enjoyable, thanks! (oh, FYI i've been slowly reading all of your stories and loving them, especially Grave Days and Aurors and Schoolgirls! thanks!)
Thanks for the review.
I know where I’m going (I hope). Ginny, as you realised, was nervous. You will find out more about the Potter’s sudden appearance at Drakeshaugh as the story progresses. I don't want to tell you everything immediately. Hopefully, if you have questions you'll keep reading to find the answers. Next: When Jacqui met Harry. (Actually, the chapter will be called The Pick Up.)
cool start to a story, interesting new poeple. I hope you keep up with this story it could be a really good one.
Author's Response: Thanks. I am (slowly) continuing all of my stories. Tales of the Battle is almost done (three chapters to go) and when that’s finished I will have more time. -N-