Reviewer: iwishicouldwrite
Date: 05/02/11 15:04
Chapter: School Gates

lovelovelovelovelove this story :D "a nora" - so cute, I just about died laughing! I love Jacqui and her husband, they are such a normal family, really relateable. Loved Ginny's face-off w/ Mary, you wrote that really well. I love what you're doing with Harry as well! Can't wait for more, these updates make my day :)

Author's Response: Thank you.
Jacqui certainly needs to be relatable, as she’s my narrator. Mike will be in trouble soon (you may even be able to guess why). Mary has met her match.

Reviewer: Luah
Date: 04/22/11 13:40
Chapter: Tea and Biscuits

I love this fic too much! I live in north east England too and have know of and may have visited some of the places mentioned . I adore all your fics and literally check to see if you've updated daily (I'm more than slightly obsessed with HP :P). Thank you sooo much for giving me hours of amusment :D

Author's Response: I regularly visit the Cheviots, and I try to achieve a sense of place. I’ve no idea whether I succeed. I’m obsessed with HP too, obviously. I try to submit at least one story/chapter per week. Thanks for the kind words. -N-

Reviewer: minervassister
Date: 04/17/11 12:17
Chapter: Tea and Biscuits

Drakeshaugh sounds like a wonderful house. I'd like to move in tomorrow.
Mary doesn't know what's going to hit her!
Looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.
I like Drakeshaugh too, although the lack of electricity would be a problem.
Poor Mary. :-D

Reviewer: edyeb
Date: 04/13/11 19:36
Chapter: The Drop Off


Must have had a nearly senior moments as we say in the states.

And here I was happy that I had figured out Harry's t-shirt a few chapters back.

Oh, well. I guess I will just have to console myself with DH pt1 blu ray pack I got in the mail today.

Author's Response: No worries :-D -N-

Reviewer: edyeb
Date: 04/13/11 9:20
Chapter: The Drop Off

Sooo, since the Weasley's and you have a thing for Ginger cookies, when do we get the receipe????

Was Al going for The Three Bears as daddy favoritiest???

Looking forward to more. ;)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I don’t know the recipe! It’s my friend’s mum’s secret. The Tale of the Three Brother’s, is Daddy’s favouritest (of course). -N-

Reviewer: iwishicouldwrite
Date: 04/13/11 8:11
Chapter: Tea and Biscuits

yay an update!!! I adore this story more and more. I loved your descriptions of the Potters' house, it makes me want to visit it! it's a great combination of medieval and modern :) can't wait till the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. The setting is real, the house, unfortunately, isn’t. Like me you’ll simply have to visit it in your imagination. I’ve mapped it, so at least I know where all of the rooms are. :-) -N-

Reviewer: One Lily
Date: 04/13/11 3:23
Chapter: Tea and Biscuits

Good point.

Author's Response: :-D

Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione
Date: 04/13/11 2:01
Chapter: Tea and Biscuits

Hi Neil,

I'm really enjoying this story (as usual). Jacqui works well as a neighbour, as she is nosey but also kind and caring. It's interesting to present Harry and Ginny (and their family) from an "unknowing" perspective (meaning that the narrator doesn't know that they're wizards). It's a difficult topic to write, because there are just so many small things that we as readers are used to from canon, which to Jacqui seem strange, and I think you're handling it very well.

I'm very curious to see what happens next... I suspect Mary won't know what's hit her.

My favourite line in this chapter was Ginny's quick correction of "Flooed" to "Flew". It made me smile.

Sorry this isn't as long/detailed as my reviews usually are... I have to go now, but I'm sure I'll be back reviewing this rather soon.


Author's Response:

Thanks for the review.

It’s confession time. When I planned this story, the “main” plot was going to be the werewolf murders, and Jacqui was going to be comic relief. I wrote the first two chapters from Jacqui’s (first person) perspective simply to give an outsiders view of the Potters. Then the kids (particularly James and Henry—who, together, are trouble) got more involved, and I was enjoying myself, so I then wrote the third and…

Now I’ve got myself into the position where my narrator has no idea what’s really going on and I’m juggling the story to keep her perspective, while moving the werewolf plot forwards.

It’s fun throwing in the little oddities Jacqui notices, like the lack of electricity (and flooed), and Ginny almost saying Knutless instead of penniless. Next, Jacqui finds out what Harry’s job really is!

Nevertheless, in the interests of the plot (unless I have a brainwave) there will have to be one or two third person chapters where Jacqui is absent.

Reviewer: AngelEJC
Date: 04/12/11 23:22
Chapter: Tea and Biscuits

Mary is not going to know what hit her ;-) I can't wait 'til you post the next chapter! I have been waiting on tender hooks for you to post something, anything, all week! Thank you! As soon as I'm done with this review, I'm going to go check out M.I.T.

I don't know if you really care, but I read a Harry/Ginny fic the other day and thought that you might enjoy it. It's called "This Means War!" by Jeconais, it's on Honestly, I thought that I was going to break a rib laughing! It's got some fluff, action, and humor all mixed in it at the most opportune moments. I understand if you really don't care, but let me know if you decide to read it!

Rebekah (AngelEJC)

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.

I’m getting some interesting theories about what will happen next, though (unsurprisingly) no one expects Mary to do well. M.I.T. is nowhere near as fluffy as this. I’ve tried submitting to Phoenixsong but, unless it’s changed, they don’t accept new authors (and heven't for years), so I rarely visit.


ps It’s tenterhooks, not tender hooks. Don’t worry, it’s a mistake I’ve seen a lot of people make (I still get confused about discrete/discreet).

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 04/12/11 20:51
Chapter: Tea and Biscuits

Baha! Love it! Fiesty Ginny is always fun!

Author's Response: Thanks, wait until you see nice, polite, and pleasant Ginny. -N-

Reviewer: One Lily
Date: 04/12/11 18:59
Chapter: Tea and Biscuits

i liked this chapter. cant wait to see what mary does!

Author's Response: Thanks. What would you do when faced with Ginny? -N-

Reviewer: hpgploversforever
Date: 04/12/11 17:59
Chapter: Tea and Biscuits

Wow I hope Ginny knows what she is doing. When you were talking about the prison were you talking about azkaban or Hogwarts. Because it said Scotland?

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Ginny always thinks she knows what she’s doing. :-) I meant Azkaban, but I was imprecise, sorry. Azkaban is “in the middle of The North Sea” so could be anywhere between the English Channel and the Norwegian Sea. I’ve always taken “the middle” literally, which puts it somewhere between Dundee and the Skagerrak, Scottish waters. -N-

Reviewer: Tomasz
Date: 04/11/11 21:11
Chapter: Sunny Afternoon

Great story! It’s really interesting to read a story from a muggles POV. I loved the part where Henry is telling Jacqui about James poking another kid and saying “Stupidfly” I thought that was cute and made me laugh. This has been a really entertaining and enjoyable story so far and I can’t wait to see what happens next!(:

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.

Jacqui is an observant narrator and the Muggle POV is great to write. It’s very hard for a four-year-old to keep secrets, but (fortunately) it’s also very hard for Jacqui to pick up on what James was really saying, especially when it’s filtered through a second four-year-old.


Reviewer: 14thfreak
Date: 04/08/11 19:26
Chapter: Sunny Afternoon

Great chapter. Is Mark an auror now? Please please update this or spontaniety or aurors & schoolgirls. I am tired of seeing 'Tales of the Battle' at the top every time check to see whether you have updated and I check everyday (pathetic I know). So please update it.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Mark? Interesting idea, but I don't think he's Auror material. I had (still have, probably) too many chaptered stories started. You've seen Tales so much because I decided to finish it. It's done! There are only two more chapters of Spontaneity (Ron and Harry) so that will go next. then there will be a (hopefully managable) two stories. (Although I have a one-shot in the queue and another being betaed.) -N-

Reviewer: One Lily
Date: 04/05/11 19:40
Chapter: Sunny Afternoon

it so good! can t wait to see what happens!

Author's Response: Next, Tea and Biscuits. -N-

Reviewer: One Lily
Date: 04/03/11 8:24
Chapter: The Drop Off

thats my favorite part. we get to see her struggle with lack of knowledge, while we can almost laugh at her, because we know exactly whats going on!

Author's Response: True, thanks -N-

Reviewer: One Lily
Date: 04/02/11 22:08
Chapter: Misty Morning

i cant wait for the next chapter! i loved how you mentioned harry as a "skinny little thirteen year old"! so sentimental!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I love writing this because you, the reader, knows so much more than poor confused Jacqui. :-) -N-

Reviewer: AReader
Date: 03/31/11 19:28
Chapter: Sunny Afternoon

I just reread this whole chapter and everything seems so much clearer now. I was just wondering, how far will this story go? Up until James starts Hogwarts or until the end of the year, or just until the Potters move away or something? What's Jacqui going to meet up with in the next chapter?

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.

This story will go on until “The Werewolf” is captured, which will be months, not years. My original intention was that I would not write any “future” stories. As James would be 6½ in April 2011 then that was my self-imposed deadline. However, I’ve already broken that self-imposed rule.

Jacqui will meet only two new people, they arrived with Molly.

Reviewer: SimpleMinds
Date: 03/31/11 11:32
Chapter: Sunny Afternoon

Have to say i'm overly impressed with the north-east stuff! Fellow geordie here y'see.

I am getting quite annoyed with this woman though, she has a go at 'Scary Mary', think she's a bit of a nosy one herself! Although i guess you'd be a bit bored out in the hills maybe?

Good going though. :)

Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.

I have plans for Harry to visit “the Toon” (or at least Heaton, and Stowell Street)

Jacqui is nosey, true. But she’s not as judgemental as Mary. If she wasn’t at least a little bit nosey I’d lose my narrator!

Reviewer: Hormiga
Date: 03/31/11 0:25
Chapter: Sunny Afternoon

I liked it! I specially liked the subplots being added lit by lit

Author's Response: Thanks, I'm not sure which are the subplots and which is the main plot. It this a story about the Potter family, or "the Werewolf Murders"? -N-

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