Reviews For Enslaved
Reviewer: DobbyDeath
Date: 01/23/11 8:13
Chapter: Enslaved

I liked this. It nice to see someone write about how Draco felt. (:

Author's Response: Thank you. I seem to ne writing a lot of Draco at the moment - no idea why. ~Carole~

Reviewer: Virgil
Date: 01/22/11 19:12
Chapter: Enslaved

I *love* this poem. Love love love. You incorporate the Dumbledore quote so well, and the repetition of the line, "but my soul the Dark Lord did enslave" really strikes a chord. Also, I like the way you end many of the lines with a period. Usually, in poetry, I like to neglect the use of the period because commas flow better - but here, you use the punctuation perfectly. Every line that ends with a period is like an ultimatum. Draco did not have a choice, period.

I suppose I should try to write my own villanelle for the PA? challenge. Thus far, I've been too intimidated by the complexity of the form, but maybe I'll give it a go.

~Virgil

Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you thought the poem flowed well because I did find it very hard to write (certainly harder than those flaming haikus and the tritina) You really should have a go because your poetry is amazing. Glad the punctuation worked as well. I thought about it (which makes a change - ha ha) Thank you for the lovely review ~Carole~

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 01/22/11 16:38
Chapter: Enslaved

This is very cool! I had not idea what a villanelle was but it's fascinating. Your two repeating lines are very powerful, most especially in the final stanza. You sure are crushing on Draco. ;) What was neat about this was how his relationship with Dumbledore was contrasted with his relationship to Voldemort. Almost makes me feel bad for him. ;) Lovely job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you, Gina. I have to admit that I found this very hard and this was about the sixth attempt. I do seem to be crushing on Mr Malfoy at the moment, but originally I started writing about Ron and being attacked by the brains. Draco just lends himself to dark poetry. Thanks again ~Carole~

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 01/22/11 5:10
Chapter: Enslaved

This is brilliant! I'm a big fan of poems like this--someone else's that I reviewed (I think it was one of Gmariam's) was with this rhyme scheme too. The flow and word choice are great and I really enjoyed reading this. I think it's true, that Voldemort did enslave Draco's soul. Well done on a fab, fab poem!

~Soraya~

Author's Response: Thank you very much. It was hard to write but very satisfying when I'd completed it. ~Carole~

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