I read this as soon as it came out but I decided to wait to give my review.
It is awesome. Really emotional, bringing all those scenes back.... the Manor, the first time they met (nice touch, by the way), the dance at the wedding etc. But all of that was a bit confusing. Too many thoughts, too much emotions in such a short chapter (although it is the longest so far).
Maybe you could have just developed Hermione's with this one, described more their feelings with in the memories and after it was over.
Just a thought. It was great, though.
Can't wait for the next one!!!
Author's Response: thanks for the suggestions, i could defintely add more of hermione's thoughts to it, and i'll be sure to keep that in mind when i go through it again. yeah, at first when i was looking this chapter over before i submitted it, i was wondering if there was too much stuff in it, but then i realized (just in my opinion of course) that it was supposed to be all crazy and confusing, because at the moment (in the manor that is,) everything is just happening at once, and there's all of these emotions then all of these memories come flooding forth.... and its just chaos in general. :) but then again, thats just me, and i know that there's always room for improvement, and reviews are meant to present suggestions to the author in order to make the writing better, so thanks again for the great review!
I thoroughly enjoy this story. It is engaging and gives an amazing perspective on things after the war. The characters are portrayed very well and I can feel everything you are describing. I cant wait to read more! - Kate
Author's Response: thanks so much for the compliments and praisem its great to hear that kind of thing. i really enjoyed writing this chapter (even though it was the hardest one to write, like i said before.) awesomeness! :D
wow.. that was really amazing. .Hermione's part was so good specially.. good going.. keep it up
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it. At first i had no idea how i was going to approach doing this particular chapter, but the whole legilimency concept just sort of fell into my head. it was a really cool moment for me though, i love it when that happens when you're writing :D thanks for the review.
Wow, this is very strong work. It's very deep and emotionally powerful. It really touches me. You excellently captured the essences of the character. Congratulations on your first 3 chapters, and I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: once again, thank you for the praise. im just happy to be here, writing about what i love to write about. (hp of course.) im glad that it touched you, though. in terms of the characters, i just wrote them how i think they should be, (entirely grounded in canon of course.) but ill be sure to send out some more chapters as soon as i find the time to do that. :)
Again, enjoying this fic very much, but still confused. I feel as though we are thrown through the journey with Ron and Hermione with no explanation of the relationship or what is really going on. Hoping for more clarification in the future, looking forward to additional chapters. Thank you for sharing!
Author's Response: I'm glad that you're looking forward to the next chapters, and I think that they will definitely deliver (and hopefully will clear some things up for you as well.) thanks for the review! :D
Very intense! Love it!
Author's Response: Awesome sauce! It's truly a privledge (i dont think thats how you spell that) to be writing for you guys, I'm so glad that you enjoy it though. We'll see how the next few chapters go, and hopefully you'll like those just as much. thanks for reviewing! :D
That was really good!!! I really like your story and hope you continue!!
Author's Response: thanks! what can i say, they're my favorite ship, im writing from the heart. :D i certainly will continue, dont you worry about that. it looks like i found my niche though, i've never wrote a fanfic before. i cant stop now, its just way too much fun :)
Finally a new Ron and Hermione fic! I'm a litte confused, but enjoying it anyway! Would like to know why they werent together for the past year before this reunion at Shell Cottage. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: well, i dont know if ive explained this before or not, but to ron and hermione, its pretty obvious that they were and are "together", but to everyone else, it just looks like a normal ron/hermione relationship, complete with angst and bickering. :) so i guess they've been together for a while, but they havent really made it public yet. does that make sense? trust me, theres definitely more to come. :D
honestly.. is it a sequel to "swimming lessons" ??
really im loving it.. but you know what.. like i said earlier, you're taking Ron and Hermione a lot OOC.. specially Hermione seems to be very rude with Ron.. but i guess in the current situation it is supposed to be like this.. eagerly waiting for next update.. and im sure you're not gonna kill any main character cause i won't be able to bear that.. :)
Author's Response: well, i know that some of weasely mom's work has inspired me, (such as swimming lessons.) but i want to put my own spin on things, i suppose. i think the reason that hermione is so short with ron is because she's extremely defensive about the scars at that time (it only has been a year really.) i think it's mostly because hermione loves being in control of things, and those scars are living proof of the moment when she had lost that control over her life, and she's scared that ron saw that side of her, that he saw that sometimes, she really doesnt have all of the answers. dont worry about the "character death" thing. it technincally has happened already....thanks, i hope you like the next part, coming asap... :D
ohhh that was really good!!!! im glad you updated fast, i can't wait for the next chapter!!!!!!
Author's Response: thanks, i'll try to keep 'em coming. :D
Yay! We didn't have to wait too long!
How did Ron know Legilimency? Is it in the books? I don't remember...
Nice cliffhanger :) Hope the next chapter comes as fast as this one did.
Author's Response: it's a bit out of canon, but i imagined that at this point, ron and harry are training to become aurors, and i would guess that as part of this training, they would be trained in legilimency, but also harry would have a hand in helping ron with this as well. if theres one person who would know about doing that, it would be harry, right? thanks, i hope it ends up coming out that soon too, mugglenet ok'd my chapter much faster this time around, which is good. :D
ooo nice chapter! Cliffhangers are brutal :o readers love to hate them but they make for a great story! keep the chapters coming :)
Author's Response: thanks! :D i do enjoy a good cliffhanger, but it is a love-hate kind of relationship isnt it? i'll try my best though. :)
oh haha sorry we dont use that word in the uk :D
Author's Response: oh, ok. it's all good. :D
i do like it but whats a duffle ?
Author's Response: ha ha thanks for catching that, i meant a duffel bag, my bad. :D
That was really good!! update soon!!
Author's Response: thanks, will do asap! :D
as you're new so i guess this is a petty good start.. but you must realize that you've made Ron and Hermione a bit OOC... secondly, im confused about whether they're together or not.. i hope you'll be clearing these things in next chapter..
Author's Response: yes, this is true, im still learning the ropes of this fanfic stuff. :D but yes, it's my sincere hope that everything will become much more clear in the coming chapters. thank you for the review. :)
The emotion you put into Ron in this fic was fantastic. I don't know if you are planning on writing more but if you do I can't wait to read it. Thank You for a pleasant read.
Author's Response: thanks so much! yes, i definitely am. ive got a couple more chapters that are all done, i just have to get them accepted by the fanfiction forum. thanks again for your heart-warming review. :)
nice writing! this seems to be the beginning of a great fanfic and i look forward to reading more :)
Author's Response: thanks, im so glad that you like it so far. there is definitely more to this story though, believe me. :)
Hmmmmm.... something tells me that this one is going to be one of my favorite fics. And that you will be my new fav writer (alongside WeasleyMom and MagEd).
One thing I loved the most is the fact that we aren't sure if Ron and Hermione are actually a couple.
I'm really curious about what's to come. Hope you write soon.
Author's Response: oh, thanks so much! its truly encouraging to get reviews like this, it just makes my day. :) im so glad that you like it, though. to me it's an honor to even be in the same sentence alongside other fantastic fanfic writers like WeaselyMom (who is my inspiration to write fanfic in the first place.) i do have more coming, dont worry. :D thanks again for your comments.
Great story so far! But are Ron and Hermione actually an item yet or just friends? They are are definitely my favorite pair in all of HP. Update soon! :)
Author's Response: yes, they definitely are an item at this point, but heres how i see it: between them, its very obvious that they are "together" together, but to everyone else around them it doesnt seem that obvious. does that make sense? they're relationship was always...hmmm....let's say "unique." so their version of a couple might be a bit different than other peoples' version of a couple. but keep in mind that this is only my personal version of things, i am no jk rowling. i know right? they always have been my fav pair too. (sighs happily.) i can't help it. :D anyway, thanks for the review, i really appreciate it. :)