I don't usually read much HP poetry, but your stuff I really like, this one in particular, I think it really sums up Hermione and Harry's relationship in a nice way.
Author's Response: Thank you! Both for reading my things and for your kind reviews!
Aww, Lisa, this is lovely. I really do like how you've managed to convey the whole Harry/Hermione dynamic in very few words. Her loyalty and stoicism shine through here, so well done. It's just struck me how much she put up with when Ron wasn't around. Harry was so internalised, and she must have been so lonely.
Your rhyming scheme works and I'm impressed that none of the rhymes seem at all forced.
Lovely poem (and sorry for the lateness of your birthday present) ~Carole~
Author's Response: Hey, thanks Carole! Hermione really is so loyal. Even when Harry's being a pain. I don't know if I could put up with it. Thanks for reading this poem! Your birthday present is quite acceptable. ;D
This was absolutely beautiful. Just like their friendship. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Aw, that was great. Heartbreaking, sweet, descriptive, fabulously written--it's definitely a favourite for me. What I like the most about this poem is how you can put so much into it with so little words. When I write poetry I tend to be so verbose that sometimes I end up spoiling the rhythm of the whole thing, but you've captured it perfectly. Well done!
~Soraya~
Author's Response: Thanks, Soraya! I'm glad you liked it.
Oooh, I like this! What a lovely look at Harry/Hermione's relationship. I love poems that use repetition like this, and the 'in silence' was a great phrase to use. And the way it changed at the end was a subtle, nice touch.
The rhyme and rhythm was well done. My only issue was with the second to last stanza, where bond/strong/Ron don't exactly rhyme, and the rhythm is off a bit as well as I read it. Really, you probably could leave it out and not even mention Ron's name, since we know that's what's going on and sometimes leaving it unsaid makes it more powerful. But, I like how the stanza talks about their bond and what they do for each other. Any awkwardness of that one part doesn't take away from the overall feel and flow of the poem. I thought it really captured Harry and Hermione's relationship in a wonderful way. Really nice job!
~Gina :)
Author's Response: I didn't like the bond/strong/Ron thing as much as the other lines either, but... I didn't know what else to do with it. =/Thanks for the great review, Gina!
