Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 01/08/11 18:46
Chapter: How He Became Their Hero

I like this! I like the structure and repetition you've used, and it builds to a nice ending. I do, however, wonder if using Voldemort's name at the end might take away from the poem centering on Harry as the hero, since that's the last thing the reader is left with. Just something to think about. :) Nice job!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! You made a really good point about the use of Voldemort's name. I wanted a powerful ending, but while Voldemort plays a vital role in the poem, it is supposed to be mainly about Harry. Hmmm...I will have to think about that, and maybe mess around with the poem a bit. Thanks much for reading and reviewing. I appreciate your feedback:)

Reviewer: hebridean black
Date: 01/06/11 9:57
Chapter: How He Became Their Hero

ooh! very nice. I liked the repetition, and the green vs red. I also like the way you said "one" like that, because until the moment it happens, no one truly knows what will happen.

Author's Response: Many thanks for the review! In case you were wondering, or didn't figure it out already, the first "green vs. red" is supposed to represent Harry's green eyes and Voldemort's red eyes. The second is supposed to represent the green Avada Kedavra spell and the red Expelliarmus spell coming together.

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