Reviews For Checkmate
Reviewer: leftrightmiddle
Date: 01/06/11 18:14
Chapter: Checkmate

Haha snogging until she fainted.. LOL.

This was really cute, I love next-gen, and I also love how you didn't portray Lucy and Molly as stuck up prisses, as most fanfics do.

For the most part you characterization was great, excpet maybe for Lysander. Aquamarine eyees seems a little GaryStu-ish, but maybe it's just because we're seeing him through Molly's eyes, and she fancies him, which would make sense. :)

Nice work!

Author's Response: Thank you for the compliment! I thought that just because Molly and Lucy had a father like Percy they wouldn't be like him. Sorry about Lysander's Gary-Stue-ishness, but if you fancy someone you do tend to make them seem a little Gary-Stu-ish.

Reviewer: Rose Nym
Date: 01/06/11 11:10
Chapter: Checkmate

Kind of funny...because it's realistic. I enjoy romance that's realistic. Not my favorite story ever, but pretty good for next generation. I'm sorry, I'm pretty cynical sometimes. It's just when I was in high school you literally could not walk into the school without seeing somebody snogging, and it annoyed the heck out of me...I was enjoying Molly's perspective because it sounded similar to me. Until...oh I didn't completely unenjoy it but I'd better hope that Lysander is serious, because if he's not, and I was Molly, my heart would break. Overall, the tone and writing style were faultless.

Author's Response: Thank you. I liked writing Molly's perspective because I used to feel disgusted when I saw people kissing and until the boy I liked kissed me I swore I would never kiss anyone. Thank you!

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 01/06/11 9:29
Chapter: Checkmate

Wow, that was good! I think you should continue this--Molly Weasley II isn't always a well-explored character in fanfiction. You wrote her really well, so kudos to you for that.


Author's Response: Thank you for the compliment. I may continue this as Molly as well as her twin Lucy and the Scamander twins aren't very prominent in fanfiction and I would like them to become so.

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