Reviewer: Kerichi
Date: 02/28/11 21:18
Chapter: Harry J. Potter

I'm a Beatles fan and enjoyed your use of their song to create your poem. The first two stanzas are the strongest, the melding of song and HP storyline are delightfully well done. "Waits at the mail slot" made me grin.

The sudden shift from Chosen One to nineteen years later, though, made the poem feel like the equivalent of reading the first HP book and then skipping all the rest and reading the epilogue. If you could have found a way to summarize it wouldn't have been so abrupt. Maybe something like: Seven years later, Voldemort's defeated, good guys have finally won, He has a godson, Harry J. Potter, Marries Ginny and has children he sends off to school, So young and new  . . . .

I'm not suggesting you change a thing, I just couldn't resist joining the fun as well as making comments for you to consider . . . and hopefully appreciate. ;) 



Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate the thought you put into it :D ~Virgil

Reviewer: ravenclaw1997
Date: 01/17/11 6:08
Chapter: Harry J. Potter

That was great! I'll have to have my dad read this; he loves the Beatles. I didn't actually read this. I sung it! :)

 

Great job! Combinations of Harry Potter and the Beatles are amazing.

 

~Manda



Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, I definitely sang this as I wrote it ^_^ ~Virgil

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 01/07/11 12:30
Chapter: Harry J. Potter

Hello. I like this. I was singing along as I read. This happens to be my third favourite Beatles song - hee hee. Anyway. I did like your Potterversion of it. I was a bit twitchy about the first stanza's rhymes when it came to the cupboard line. I don;t think that quite works, but it does fit the story and the poem.

That was my only crit though. All in all I loved it. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you very much! I agree that the cupboard line is a bit awkward - but I think the lyric in the actually song isn't quite right either. (Now that I think about it though, I'm not really sure.) Either way, thank you reading! I'm glad you like it! ~Virgil

Reviewer: hpfan25
Date: 01/06/11 13:15
Chapter: Harry J. Potter

That song is one of my favorite Beatles songs! This was really funny I enjoyed it very much. I congratulate you on this parody because it goes right along with the song and it is so original. Thanks for making me smile

Author's Response: It's one of my favorite Beatles songs too! I'm glad I was able to make you smile :) ~Virgil

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