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Name: The_Real_Hermione (Signed) · Date: 01/08/11 2:57 · For: Chapter 1
This was really unique, firstly, and also really well written. I loved how you explored Charity's character - her loneliness, her feelings of how she'd aged - it made a lot of sense and you depicted her really well in this short snapshot. I also thought the ending was great - you didn't go for the fluffy happily-ever-after, but it still had a nice conclusion.

I also loved the song... I assume you wrote the lyrics? It was really fitting and brought the story together really well. I also loved how you made small references to canon characters, such as the fourth-year Gryffindors or Fred, George and Angelina, which seemed very fitting for a teacher.

So yeah... I really loved this fic. I don't think I've read a lot of your stories, although I've seen your name around before, so I'll probably be back writing more reviews soon, if this is anything to go by.

Just a small typo I noticed, near the end you've written "A one night stand, a moments pleasure..." when it should say "a moment's pleasure".

Anyway, great fic!!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review (and for pointing out the typo which I shall fix forthwith). This is a companion piece to one I wrote called Mere Wisps of Light which is about Draco really, but features Charity. I did write the lyrics, but that was relatively simple because I only had to write that one verse.

Thanks again for the review and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story. ~Carole~

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 12/28/10 17:50 · For: Chapter 1
I loved this! Having read your other story, I felt like Charity was familiar and that she certainly had a story to tell. This was a wonderful story. It was such a great insight into a character we know nothing about, except for her death. It's so original! And so fun, especially the bits with the other professors. I want more. :)

What really makes this piece so good is how perfectly it fits into canon. Not only have you worked in a later generation, but the casual references to Harry, Ron, and Hermione just reinforce the feeling of being in the Potterverse perfectly.

Myron sounds like he was great fun to write. I'm glad he and Charity had one more night together. Any thoughts on their future? Right now I'm thinking of how sad he would be to learn of her death. :(

I really, really enjoyed this. It's fantastic, and your Charity deserves more stories. Good luck in the challenge!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Oh, thank you Gina. I do have this evil plot attacking my brain about The Weird Sisters. I really should be updating my chaptered fics, but Myron and Charity are rather addictive, so I shall see what the NY brings story-wise. Myron was great to write because he is a cocky git and I don't want him to become all sweet and fluffy. Thanks again and I'm seriously thinking about a follow up. (Or a series, so I get to that 2%) ~Carole~

Name: abovelevel (Signed) · Date: 12/24/10 11:08 · For: Chapter 1
Ahhhhh gosh so cute, but so sad considering what happens to Charity!!! Geez I like to imagine he would have tried to come look for her later...and if only she had gone to America! I love how you characterize Charity here...she is so very relatable, at least to me, in the way she thinks, it really felt like I could understand her even though it was third person.

Great job and very unique take on the prompt.


Author's Response: Thank you very much, Claire. I'm glad you liked the story. It was fun to write although bittersweet because we know what happens to her. ~Carole~

Name: Fynnsmom (Signed) · Date: 12/24/10 6:32 · For: Chapter 1
That was sweet. I loved the name Gerard Bonbon, and he just happened to work at Honeydukes. I loved that Myron's hair was long and his robes were torn in all the right places. I think this shows that finding romance or renewing romance is the same for "us girls" whether we're 16 or 60. Very enoyable story--especially on this Christmas Eve morning.

Author's Response: Ah, well gerard Bonbon was probably an assumed name, but then again JKR wasn't that subtle with her names either (Remus Lupin, Sirius Black for example). I feel sorry for Charity, too, but I think Myron was sincere. There could well be a sequel. Charity interests me now. Thank you so much for Reading and reviewing. ~Carole~

Name: xxbabewithbrainsxx (Signed) · Date: 12/24/10 2:53 · For: Chapter 1
I really liked this. Slight nitpick, sorry: "Madam Maxim" should be "Madame Maxime", surely? Other than that, I love how you've explored Charity Burbage's character. I've always been curious about her and I like your characterisation. Nice one!


Author's Response: OOh, thanks for that. I always get the Madam/Madame thing mixed up because Madam Pomfrey doesn't have an e.Thank you for the review. ~Carole~

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