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Name: Evora (Signed) · Date: 03/06/11 20:04 · For: Not Broken
Hello, Ariana!

At first, I thought the story would go into these little snippets where a smile and a quote basically changes their relationship. Then I found out it was just a light-hearted, sweet story. Which was good, because then I wouldn’t have to ask for more. . . which is a lie. Please write some more. D:

Susan was such a Hufflepuff – generous and kind. Well, not until a certain Slytherin passed her way, but that doesn’t count since it was just after the war and even a Hufflepuff isn’t that naïve. She was convinced easily though. I mean, she quickly went to befriending from accusing and suspicious. Very unlike the usual I’ve read (code for Gryffindors), and that, my friend, is good. Her qualities are distinguished, clearly distinct from those of the other Houses. Her loss was nicely written, but I felt like it wasn’t enough in the following scenes. It was like she switched to a different world when she went out to buy trees. Or maybe that was the effect you were going for? Anyway, I loved her character – the way she was written, she was endearing, easy to love.

Theodore is a. . . mystery. I can’t honestly say what I think of him. He seems sort of detached at first, then passionate, then. . . I don’t know. . . fun? He seemed fun to be with. The story didn’t give away much about him. You meant the story to be light and gentle, and that was exactly how it went. The story was flowed naturally (I’m basing this on their character), and I loved their search for the perfect tree. I absolutely loved Susan’s admiration for imperfection – it reminded me of myself and my paintings. Theodore’s remarks obviously give off the ‘you’re-adorable’ look. I like how they just went with the flow and took advantage of the chance to be happy, even for a moment. Their kiss made me smile – it was fluffy, I admit, but sometimes I need that. It was a nice read. :)

But since you already started a story with a wonderful base, why not continue? I’m excited to know what else you would have come up with if it weren’t for pressure and limited time. You still have Theodore free in the fields and already have Susan in a cage. Now, you just have to find your bunny! :D This was a fun story; I enjoyed it along with all your stories. I hope you write more of this pairing!


Author's Response: DInny! Thank you so much for your review :). It makes me so happy to hear that you liked the story. I wasn't sure how it would turn out, since Gen's request was the first time I'd ever considered Susan and Theo together. I'm glad you liked Susan's character… about the tree scene: the reason she fell for Theo that quickly and trusted him more easily than another character would have is that a) she likes to see the best in people, and b) he made her forget everything bad that had happened. He took away all that had hurt her and left her with nothing more than Christmas wishes, and that's the main reason she was so attracted to him and changed so much in that scene. I'd like to write them again in the future, but I've been busy and it's not really at the top of my priorities. Hopefully I'll have time this summer :). Thanks again! xx Ariana

Name: abovelevel (Signed) · Date: 12/23/10 16:03 · For: Not Broken
What a creative idea for a couple!! My favorite part of this was definitely the beginning - I am very intrigued about Susan and Ernie's relationship, and the parts about how she felt more and more lonely but she couldn't be around anyone were very realistic. And the way she felt she was the only one ... You did excellently.

The part with Susan and Theo was very cute, but either it felt a little rushed, or I wish you had just gone on a little more... I don't know I just felt both of gem might have been more hesitant in opening up right away. However, I do like the dynamic you've given them, so I think you should really just continue this :)

Good work!!
The Order of Ravenclaw House Elves

Author's Response: Thank you for taking the time to review! I'm glad you liked them as a couple… this was for a Gryffindor Christmas Swap, so I didn't really come up with the idea myself. And it makes me so happy to see that you liked Susan :). I agree, I think I should/could have put more time into Susan and Theo's relationship…I might start a chaptered fic about them, we'll see. Thanks again for reviewing! xx Ariana

Name: Sagen (Signed) · Date: 12/21/10 11:58 · For: Not Broken
Oh my gosh, thank you so much! It was completely lovely. I love this pairing so much! You truely are an amazing author. It really seemed canon. I love your Theo, he was wonderful! Thank you again.

Merry Christmas!

Author's Response: Gen, I'm so glad you liked this! Thank you for leaving such an wonderful review :). I am happy that you enjoyed the pairing and how it was written. Merry Christmas to you, too! xx Ariana

Name: ProfPosky (Signed) · Date: 12/21/10 9:57 · For: Not Broken
Oh please, please tell me you are either going to make this longer, or else do a chaptered fic on this pair...

Author's Response: A chaptered fic…hm, that could be a possibility… It's funny because before writing this I wasn't sure how much I liked this pairing, but I'm starting to like Susan and Theo, and I do agree they need more time together. Thank you so much for your review, it made my day! xx Ariana

Name: The_Real_Hermione (Signed) · Date: 12/21/10 3:41 · For: Not Broken
I loved the ending! So sweet! I was worried for a while that you weren't going to get them together... Anyway, it was a really different pairing and I loved how you drew them together. I especially liked how you explored Theodore's emotions about his father's death, and how in the end you let both characters be able to move on.

Author's Response: Ooh, thank you for this absolutely lovely review! I was unsure how to write this couple at first, as I never really pictured them together, but I'm glad you liked it and thought it worked :). Thanks so much for taking the time to review! xx

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