Snape was very very, well characterized. Well written. The dichotomy of Snape, that makes him one of the most intriguing characters in HP is present in your fic which I appreciate. Good work. :)
Beautifully, intricately written, wonderful idea. Wish you'd written more!
Yeah it's not right. Not fair. I love how Snape's debate with himself leads to find both like and dislike in a trait of her. For his sake, I feel that he's strong to make himself into a stone when even the slightest reminder makes him come crashing down. He shows that tendency here and he shows it of course in Jo's novels. Lily turning away from him towards the end must have hurt more than this I find myself thinking as I read the last paragraphs. After seeing his form, I find a little heartless of her to dismiss him and have the gall to encourage the doe towards the stag.
Your story broke my heart a little. Nicely written.
Yes! I'm so happy it's up! I love one-shots that are just the narrators thoughts, so when i read this earlier I loved it. I see you reworked the bit about the patronus shape, it makes much more sense now. I love it!
That was great! I've always liked that Snape and Lily have the same Patronus, ever since I realized Snape wasn't a 'bad guy'. I feel bad for him in a way; he loves Lily, but one word out of his mouth that he couldn't control broke their friendship.
This story is great in showing that relationship between Lily and Snape, as well as how much Snape hates James. A lot of that is because he gets Lily in the end, not Snape, and you show that well.
Great story! I look forward to more!
Author's Response: I hope you don't mean for this story because it's intended as a one-shot. I forgot to click complete when I submitted it though. Thanks for the review.