This is the best!
I loved the ending. Very cute.
Never get old lots of love r.l.s rene luna smith
loved the end note! would like to see what happens next? does sirius get killed by multitudes of boyfriends? does lily get to talk to james?
:O New story! *squeals* Your responses to my reviews make me squee. Isn't that funny, in a backwards sort of way? Anyway!
Aw. My mom started getting grey hair in high school. I'm still holding out but ... oh, man. Poor Remus. At least he's handling it well.
"This was all she would get -- no flaming chocolates, no ceramic pigs."
Really? Really? What is the story behind the ceramic pigs?
I loved the ending! I giggled out loud. I did that a couple of times throughout, but that ending especially.
In my opinion, you were not cliche at all! I really loved the individual focus on each of the characters. It was clear James and Sirius were teh best friends of the group, but they also cared deeply for Remus and Peter. It was easy to see how Peter could be felt cast aside, though he handled it throughout the fic very well. When Peter asked if it would be a bad idea to send valentines, that's when I could see it. He knew he was on a different level from the rest of the group. Sorry, I'm rambling.
You really downplayed James' affection for Lily, which was a smart move. I imagine that's exactly the way he felt, the feelings often resurfacing but his will to push it away. Like the way you had him watch Lily at the table.
I really, really enjoyed the way Lily stood up for Remus. With your writing, I am always able to imagine the scenes unfolding in my mind, so I could see her shouting out those things, and the gratefulness on Remus' face.
They're not horribly cliche. I liked this. A lot. I've said this already.
LOVE THE LAST LINE! fantastic one-shot, I smiled as I read this :):)
Hey there, classmate!
I saw your story up as I was checking to see if mine was validated, and I thought I'd read it and leave you your first review.
I think you've done a really wonderful job here. The light banter between the Marauders in the beginning made me smile, and overall I just loved how you portrayed the closeness of their friendship.
Your characterization was wonderful (it is evident you took the class, as I thought each of the Marauders plus Lily and Snape were spot-on), but the one that stood out the most for me was Lily. I love how she found out about Remus, and how at first she had very human doubts, but she worked past them to realize that he was still the same boy. She seems just as she was described in the books: bold, vivacious, and with an incredibly large heart.
Sirius's valentines were hilarious! I love the added bit of the Entrancing Enchantment. But perhaps my most favorite part of the entire story was the valentine Sirius sends to Lily. It literally made me smile to myself--*SO* in character for Sirius, and very very funny.
Great job with your final! I'm sure you'll do amazingly :)