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Name: karin (Signed) · Date: 10/10/11 4:04 · For: Prologue
Excellent story!

Author's Response: Thanks :D

Name: loligo8me (Signed) · Date: 01/05/11 23:04 · For: Chapter 2
Ooh what a cliffie!
Very interesting story. Nicely written, and Cyril is an interesting character to read about. Very much want to know what happens next. Will keep reading :)

Author's Response: I had way too much fun with cliffies during this story. And I'm glad you liked Cyril and were interested to see what happened next. Thank you for reading and reviewing. =D

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 01/05/11 7:36 · For: Chapter 2
You do know that you have to finish this, don't you? You've left it at such a cliffhanger and I need to know far more that Cyril why Christmas is so important to Dirk.

Short review this time, but let's just say that the way you wrote about the ginger snaps was wonderful and made my mouth water.

Love the story ~Carole~

Author's Response: I'm not gonna lie, a big part of the reason this got finished as "soon" as it did/at all was this review. Someone wanting to know what happened is a great motivation to finish a fic. =D As for ginger snaps...I totally think I wrote that while I had a pack of ginger thins on hand. Man, I love those things. xD And - I just want to thank you again for reading and reviewing, Carole. -hugs-

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 01/03/11 1:50 · For: Chapter 1
OOh, really great backstory for Sarah's parents. I love the idea that there were purebloods harbouring Muggleborns.

“I miss that,” the older Cyril commented. “The waking up on Christmas morning feeling like it’s the most magical thing that’s ever happened to you, despite all the magic you see every day. I LOVE that line. It's so true, but you managed to encapsulate Christmas for the magical world so well at that point. I enjoyed the Yule Ball memories very much - partly because I've written a few stories or oneshots about that event, so it's always interesting to read other people's versions. Your Claws are a lot more fun than the ones in my stories - hee hee.

Great story, Minna ~Carole~

Author's Response: Well, if Voldemort = Hitler and Nazis = Death Eaters then why not have purebloods take in Muggleborns like some people took in Jews? It just seems like something that I would hope happened during that war. The Christmas line was really how I felt about Christmas as a kid, with a bit tacked on to account for actual magic. xD As for Claws being fun - well, I've got a lot of Claw in me so I can't exactly discriminate. Thanks for your review, Carole!

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 01/03/11 1:35 · For: Prologue
Now then, why haven't I read this before? And why does this story have so few reviews? It's a scandal, but I guess it's the curse of the OC's. Shame because I like this. I think you've set this up very well, and your central character has been nicely drawn.

I have a minor nit-pick (sorry) dark first-story room. It should be storey.

I'm intrigued to see where Dirk will take his son, and am wondering if Cyril will get his girl. Well done. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thanks, Carole, for reading this fic and reviewing it. It means a lot to me that you're enjoying it/were enjoying it because you know I totally fangirl your fics. With regards to "storey": I think we discussed it on AIM, but I tend to use American spellings in my fics because...well, I'm American. I did use British terminology here, and it's definitely first story in the sense of the first story above the ground floor rather than the ground floor. -rolls eyes at self- It's a bit weird trying to figure out where to draw the line between where I use British and American usage.

Name: abovelevel (Signed) · Date: 12/23/10 15:50 · For: Prologue
Hello Minna!! I think you've done an excellent job with this so far :) The relationship and dialogue between Cyril and his dad was very well done and probably my favorite thing about this piece - even though we don't know them very well, it feels like we really know their relationship already. Just the natural way they interact is really well done.

In the second chapter, I like how you include a variety of memories instead of just one. The only comment I would make is that I would love to see more of Cyril and Sarah and what exactly happened when they broke up. That was kind of confusing but I assume you will address it later.

Though you included a lot of information, the pacing was good and you didn't drag on with too many details, yet I got a good idea of the mood of each scene. It was brave of you to go with an OC for this challenge but I think it's going well, and I like the scene at the Yule ball and how it fits in with canon - cute detail!!

Can't wait to keep reading!

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Author's Response: Hi, Claire. =) It's good to hear I did well with Cyril and Dirk - their relationship is kind of central to Cyril's journey, so I'm glad I wrote them well. With regards to what happened with Cyril and Sarah - I did try to fit it in somehow after I saw this review, but it didn't manage it. I think Sarah was just sad and angry and lashed out at Cyril. Um - I didn't exactly have it planned though. Maybe someday I'll write it, if only so I know. =) Haha - another thing that's nice to hear is that the details didn't drag it down. I always worry about that because I always feel this need to include the details I have. -rolls eyes at self- I also kind of want to yell "But Cyril's not an OC!" because technically he's not (Dirk's sons are mentioned once in the book xD We weren't allowed OCs for the challenge but I often use minor, minor characters and call it good) but for all intents and purposes he is an OC. What can I say, I like doing something outside the usual suspects. =) The Yule Ball scene was fun, too, though I had trouble writing it in a way that wouldn't just reiterate what we got from canon. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, Claire!

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