It is a really good piece of writing it really shows the drama. Well Done:)
Thats so sweet! ur such a good writer!
Cute...a bit angsty, but sweet nonetheless. Good.
More???!!!!
that was really good!! i cant find anything wrong..cept ron died! (crys) but i guess people are gonna die so its for the story..
thanx for such a great ending!
Wooh. We had the same idea about Harry dying for Ginny. I just read this, obviously, and it was quite good. I love all of your one-shots/stories. Great job. Check out "the End of Only One Beginning" for my version, if you want.
I've also thought about the parallels JK uses and I think they are great as well. This is exactly the way I would write the Final Battle, but I think you need to be a lot more descriptive e.g. what is happening in the background, who else is falling to the ground instead of what is directly around Harry. Grammar was good, couldn't find many faults! 9/10
i like your style of writing! its really good! really well worded and a great read! well done! :)
Great story! I have never really thought about it before but I believe you are right about Jo using parallels and that the parallels between Lily and Ginny are not an accident. We shall see!
daaaannnnnnnng. that was awesome. amazing. if i was a crying person, i would have cried. good. really good. [greatness makes me studder :) ] and i TOTALLY agree on the whole-love-saving-harry thing! ok, sorry. good.
THis was a very good idea i enjoyed it a lot but it did seem a little bit confusing at the begining but overall i really enjoy this story and well done! wandwood xxx
wow. so it was their love that saved them. how fitting. and perfect. ur rite about the paralles tho i think, cuz i see the same things. but poor ron! n e ways, keep on writing!
wow. so it was their love that saved them. how fitting. and perfect. ur rite about the paralles tho i think, cuz i see the same things. but poor ron! n e ways, keep on writing!
loved the story gotta read more bye....by the by...great writer...
Well it was pretty good, but I thought that Harry might have had SOME kind of reaction to Ron's death, seeing that his best friend just died, but hey, that's just me.
Author's Response: Well you have to understand, his friends and loved ones are falling all around him, and he can't just fall apart out in the open. Partly he has to get himself and Ginny out of fire which is human nature to have adrenaline in a situation like that, and partly he is so far beyond pain that no greiving can soothe him. He's in shock and nearly in a daze that he can't even process that Ron's really gone.
umm.....WOW! Thats all i have to say...
oh and i forgot to say, please add another chappy or 2 because it's so good i'd love to read more of it plz
Sad, barely. But nice use of language, there could have been more story in the Harry-waking-up and Final-battle transaction just to build up the romance between Hr/G. 7/10