Awww!! This story is cute, and amazing!!! :DD But , i kinda wish that you would have put in the wedding! But i still loved it!!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
Very, very sweet. I absolutely loved this story. Despite its brevity, I got both the characters and what they were feeling. Especially near the end with Albus's one-sided dialogue, it was a very emotionally affecting. Though I liked this entire paragraph (I'm a big fan of sensory description), I found this particular line beautiful.
"My hands are cold. His hands are warm."
The simple contrast is just so nice and says a whole lot in a few words.
I particularly like your title. In fact, the premise of the story didn't sound that appealing initially, but your title drew me in. And I Step Forward... it's a really, really beautiful title that says exactly what it needs to say.
The ending was spot-on. The repetition of "I do." Such a terrific way to end, it really leaves an impression. Just like the rest of this story did. I really enjoyed it, and I hope you keep on writing such lovely prose!
-Signed the Order of the Ravenclaw House Elves
Author's Response: You've no idea, really, how much I enjoyed this review! Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it, despite the brevity and a poor summary. Thank you for your lovely review!
Very sweet :). Wizard/Muggle interactions are really interesting to explore, and I thought you did this pretty well. It was interesting to see events and then hear Alice's voice in between, definitely a different way of writing. My only criticism is that I would have liked more - for example more detail on how Alice fell in love with Albus and a bit more about her character. Also perhaps you could have explored why Hugo is working in a Muggle establishment... or maybe not, it mightn't have really fitted in the story. Anyway, it was nicely written, and I had to laugh at Al and Alice together. Definitely a good read :).
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Like I said in reply to an earlier review, this was pretty much a drabble that got out of hand. I suppose the snippet-like quality of a drabble came over into this one-shot. In a drabble, you really can't explain very much of anything...
I'm glad you thought Al and Alice were funny together. I thought it was rather funny too. =)
Thanks for reading!
So cute!! :)
Author's Response: Thanks!
I have to agree, very sweet...
I have also married off a Muggle to a wizard, and it is interesting to see how you've handled the moment of revelation. I just wish it had been less rushed. I'd have liked seeing all this happen more than I liked reading her recalling it, although I did like that.
In my case, I married off Alastor Moody. I'd love to see more of Albus and his bride. I think the problems of Muggles in Wizarding Britain and Wizards in Muggle Britain are very rich areas to explore.
Author's Response: Thank you. I know it was a bit rushed, sorry. This was, originally, supposed to be a drabble, but then it kept getting longer and longer as I wrote it. I had the plot bunny, got it out and submitted it all in the same hour, which is not how I normally write. I agree, Muggle/Wizard relations are very interesting, and fun, areas waiting to be explored.
oh this is so sweet!!! i loved it :)
Author's Response: Thank you!