Ooooooh! It's getting really good! What will the awesome James do to win the lovely Lily back? Will it work? I will be checking for your answer. It was great to read this, I loved the angle from which you came.
Author's Response: Thank you! :) Well, I hope to post the next chapter soon but I'm bogged down with Uni work atm but when I'm free, the next chapter will be sent and hopefully validated! Aha :L
Great Premise! Enjoyed your first few chapters. I thought that James was suddenly going to go goody goody, after his first conversation with Lily, but fortunately you didn' t do that. It would have been too unbelievable! Keep Writing. One criticism: possessives: it's the Ravenclaw's face, not the Ravenclaws face. Remember the apostrophe.
Author's Response: Thank you! :) And I always miss one or two of those out for some reason D: gonna have to keep on top of it! :) Next chapter will hopefully be up soon, I've started back at Uni now so updates won't be as often as I would like.
That was great. Update again soon.
Author's Response: Thank you! :) Next chapter will be up soon, I hope!
I really enjoyed this, especially the ending with James and Lily. I can't want to read the rest. You've done a great job so far (:
Author's Response: Aww thank you! I thought with the ending, I'd do something that wasn't typical of what other people have done. So instead of them arguing, I thought it'd be good to do something where she glimpses what James is really like :) Thanks for taking the time to read, and I hope you follow this story through! I really value peoples feedback :)
Aw, I love the Marauders. I really liked the intro, and it looks to be a fun story! But I do have a little critique for you, if that's okay!
It moves a little fast (i.e. you might want to spend a little more time on your scenes), but other than that it was very entertaining! Keep going!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you like it, I was a bit worried if I'm honest. Critique is always welcome, don't worry! Now you've said that about me moving too fast, I can see what you mean. I'll try to improve on this! Thanks again for reading my Marauders story, I hope you carry on reading when I post other chapters! :)