Reviews For Hopelessness
Reviewer: AshTonks
Date: 01/10/11 12:40
Chapter: Hopelessness

Really good! You really captured the Ron and the things that were probably running through his mind.

Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione
Date: 12/29/10 23:44
Chapter: Hopelessness

I'm not usually a massive reader/fan of poetry, but this summary looked interesting so I checked it out. I really liked the first stanza; it really embodied that horrible and disturbing scene for me. Especially the end - "Knife to her throat / Blood on her skin". Chilling.

I also loved the last two lines - they really delved into Ron's character and ended it really nicely.

I have to say, I thought your choice of words were sometimes a little strange - for example, using the word "mirthless" didn't quite fit for me. I would use that word only if there was a situation that was supposed to be funny, and the character didn't find it so, or if a character laughs but without mirth (it often makes me think of the way Voldemort laugh).

However some of your words were great, like "abyss" (that is just a wonderful word and perfect here).

The beginning of the second stanza also sums up Ron's character, I like how you have him defending that it was her, not him, who was being tortured. If that makes sense.

So all in all, a nice, chilling poem. Oh and the title was great too and really ties in with the last line.

Reviewer: ravenclaw1997
Date: 12/27/10 11:14
Chapter: Hopelessness

Great job! I don't normally read poetry, but this was wonderful. I hate that scene; it's too sad and disturbing for my liking, but your poem is great. I look forward to more from you in the future!

~Manda :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the nice review! Yes, I agree with you that that scene was dark. But we saw the whole thing from Harry's POV, so I've always wondered about what Ron might have been thinking. After all, Ron and Hermione did end up married. :)

Reviewer: iluvcrookshanks
Date: 11/16/10 18:50
Chapter: Hopelessness

i like it! it really captures the moment

Author's Response: Thanks!

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