Reviews For A Christmas Visit
Reviewer: Virgil
Date: 12/26/10 9:30
Chapter: Prologue: Swept Away

Hey there, banner buddy! :) Merry Christmas! This review is a Christmas present to you (and a method of procrastinating on studying for my final exams) so enjoy!

Prologue - I love the introductory description here. Likening to moon to a "queen" is a wonderful metaphor. When Voldemort arrived, I was a bit surprised by the OOC-ness, but then I realized that it's supposed to be like A Christmas Carol and that makes sense. There's one sentence that I don't really understand - "You must now lose the beauty that stays with you" - I think you meant "not" rather than "now," but I'm not sure. It's probably just a typo. There's also a typo in the next paragraph - "Every since" should be "Ever since." I'm not here to nitpick typos though - Voldemort's little monologue about the beauty of life is, to put it plainly, quite beautiful. Perhaps enough of his soul remained intact to move onto the next life.
Chapter 1 - for some reason, the thought of Voldemort calling Lucius a "bad sport" just makes me smile. It sounds like something a boy's baseball coach might say. I like it. The scene of Christmas Past was really heart-wrenching... seeing Narcissa and Lucius in such a domestic setting, and he doesn't want to go back but he feels like he must... it really is touching. It's a bit strange when the thinking PoV suddenly switches to Voldemort, and the reader sees that he's ashamed of what he's done to the Malfoys. Not in a bad way - it's just a bit disconcerting to see a little inside his mind.
Chapter 2 - "Call me Tom." Wow. Even in all of his regret, would Voldemort really say that? I'm not sure, but it's your story, your interpretation. I like how Lucius just decides to avoid addressing him - that's probably what I would have done. The thing with Fred makes me so sad. No empty chair, no empty bed, but memories to keep forever. I'm a twin, and the thought of losing the other is just unreal - I can't imagine what George went through. The conversation between Lucius and "Tom" afterward is interesting - what will happen if Lucius doesn't move on? I can't wait to find out what happens next ^_^

Overall, wonderful story. Very well done, nice writing style, and I like the overall premise. Seenthelight!Voldemort takes some getting used to, but I'm starting to like him.

Best wishes!
Virgil

Author's Response: Wow Virgil, thanks so so much! This was a very lovely review! I loved what you had to say. Yes, there are a few typos at the beginning. I was going too fast (but I didn't need to; I had such a bad case of writer's block I couldn't even finish on time :( ] And oh my goodness you're a twin? I'm a triplet!! Haha Best wishes to you too!! MeganFawkes

Reviewer: chattyswimmer
Date: 11/07/10 14:25
Chapter: Prologue: Swept Away

So....this is going to be like 'A Christmas Carol', am I right? It looks interesting, I will be waiting to see what trips down memory lane you have planned for Lucius :)

Author's Response: Thanks. It was written for a challenge in the Great Hall on the beta forums, and I really love "A Christmas Carol" so I chose that prompt, though it was the only chaptered-fic one. Thanks for reviewing, and I hope you enjoy the story enough to keep reading! -Megan

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