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Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 11/12/10 18:37 · For: Chapter 2
I love it. I really do. Is it okay that I laughed as I was reading it? Because I did. Especially when Albus said, "And what in the name of Merlin’s most baggy y-fronts was that about, anyway?" HAHA! I know someone else who talks like that. ;)
It's a brutal cliffhanger. You've done such a great job of setting up Albus's inner conflict. He's aware of what's happening to him, as well as his feelings for Scorpius, and yet we don't get to see how it resolves. Of course, I do, and I can't wait to see it in context.
I wonder if this isn't as crazy as you think. It's certainly pretty ballsy, but it's also well-written, well-paced, and nicely balanced between the Knights story and the Albus/Scorpius stuff. I'm loving it. Great job, bring on the smut!
~Gina :)
PS. The scene with Harry was delicious - unexpected but so well-played. Great idea!

Author's Response:

*hugs twin for loving my thus far ignored story*

Now you know why I angsted over this story so much; it had so much going on that it couldn't NOT be this long. I really wanted to make the relationship plausible and still keep to the plot. I'm glad you like how I've done thus far. The smut is toned down in the next chapter (which is in the queue), but it's available in the spewswap community on LJ. If you can't find it, just lurk in the chat thread in the SPEW forum, and it should be there.

*hugs twin again*

~Jess



Name: iwishicouldwrite (Signed) · Date: 11/11/10 15:30 · For: Chapter 1
hmmm not sure exactly what i think but I'm interested in where you're going with this...I like Albus' personality and i like how you made scorpius likeable but with a mean streak as well. Cool concept, i look forward to the next update!

Author's Response:

Well, I prefaced this by saying that this story is quite bizarre. This is what happens when I am in a crunch for a deadline and let my imagination run amuck. Next chapter's in the queue right now, so I hope you enjoy the next few installments. :)

~Jess



Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 11/11/10 10:51 · For: Chapter 1
Ah, Jess. I don't even know what to say, since I know a bit of what's coming and sort of want to save myself for that. ;) I will begin by saying that it's a really good start. You've quickly pulled me into the premise, which does sound a bit borderline insane until one reads it here. What is really cool is how you've kept Albus as Albus and yet created a second sort of persona for him as Melinda that Scorpius seems to be falling for. That first kiss was great - crazy and hilarious and yet, again, having some idea of what's coming, I'm already rooting for them. The best part is Albus recognizing that Scorpius is going to get hurt - I love that aspect of his character, and of course, that's where you got a good title. :)
So, yes - good start, get the next part up soon, and I shall endeavor to keep up with better reviews. ;)
~Gina :)

Author's Response:

Yay, my first review! Honestly, I think most people are sort of too 'wtf' to review. This is, as you know, one of the most bizarre things I've ever written. I've gone for a different Albus Potter in this one, who is more like a normal guy than my quiet, unassuming Al. I tried to incorporate his own personality into his thought process to keep him feeling more like a man in girls' clothing than a man trying to be a girl...which is just weird.

Thanks for the review, dear. I'm glad you like it. Now I shall get back to my NaNo so it can keep eating me alive.

~Jess



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