Reviews For Collateral Damage
Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 11/11/10 10:51
Chapter: Chapter 1

Ah, Jess. I don't even know what to say, since I know a bit of what's coming and sort of want to save myself for that. ;) I will begin by saying that it's a really good start. You've quickly pulled me into the premise, which does sound a bit borderline insane until one reads it here. What is really cool is how you've kept Albus as Albus and yet created a second sort of persona for him as Melinda that Scorpius seems to be falling for. That first kiss was great - crazy and hilarious and yet, again, having some idea of what's coming, I'm already rooting for them. The best part is Albus recognizing that Scorpius is going to get hurt - I love that aspect of his character, and of course, that's where you got a good title. :)
So, yes - good start, get the next part up soon, and I shall endeavor to keep up with better reviews. ;)
~Gina :)

Author's Response:

Yay, my first review! Honestly, I think most people are sort of too 'wtf' to review. This is, as you know, one of the most bizarre things I've ever written. I've gone for a different Albus Potter in this one, who is more like a normal guy than my quiet, unassuming Al. I tried to incorporate his own personality into his thought process to keep him feeling more like a man in girls' clothing than a man trying to be a girl...which is just weird.

Thanks for the review, dear. I'm glad you like it. Now I shall get back to my NaNo so it can keep eating me alive.

~Jess

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