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Name: Maple_and_PheonixFeather (Signed) · Date: 06/01/11 17:08 · For: Chapter 1
Hello again Jess! You must be getting tired of all the emails you are getting my reviews :P So I decided that I'm actually going to give you a full legnth humungous review, or at least try to, as I don't usually do good reviews :P

What I loved about this fic is that it took me from wanting to cry to grinning like a madwomen in a matter of seconds. First of all, the use of Hestia’s character was extremely well done and very funny (at least to me). Next, I enjoyed how it went from being a seemingly dark fic to a very happy one at the end. I feel as if the pace was very natural, as they built up to the final snog at the end, and so I was able to root for the final get together throughout the fic, and not just have it shoved in my face at the very beginning. Also, I found myself lured in, even though there was a character death warning (which I usually avoid), and it wasn’t quite what I expected. The odd thing was, that while I would never go out of my way to find this pairing, the end left me wanting more.

I loved the character of Hestia Jones. I found her very real, as not only was she happy and funny, but she also held a darker side to her. This makes her very real, as instead of making her some absolute happy bunny, you made her three dimensional, while still keeping what was your original intention (or what I believe was original intention) of the fic intact. As well, I’ve always imagined Hestia Jones as some old woman, so your ability to completely change my image of her without going “um, what?” was excellent. What really impressed me was your depiction of Dean. Your ability to believably write a teenager, and a teenage boy at that really impressed me. I especially found that the last paragraph really channelled into the mindset of a teenager, for even though he doesn’t know everything about what is happening, he knows that this is what he wants now. I thought you channelled teenage boy amazingly well, and I tip my hat to that.

I thought that this story flowed very well for the most part, though I was slightly confused as to what was going on between Hestia leaving him and the whole Harry showdown thing. However, your ability to make a week pass so smoothly was fantastic, for I didn’t find anything rushed at all, and it felt very natural. I found your POV highly effective in depicting the story, and I was very impressed on how everything worked together throughout the fic. Your style in this fic was very straight forward and just like a story. I enjoyed that there was description, but not so much that it made me want to scream, and that there was dialogue, but yet enough narrative. The whole narrative just seemed so balanced, and I loved every minute of it.

Finally, I noticed a small little typo. Hestia says “Come, talk a walk with me,” when I think you mean her to say “come take a walk with me”.

This was another fantastic read, and I enjoyed it very much :)


Author's Response: Quite the opposite, my dear. I love getting reviews that make my forcibly longer night brighter. And you, my dear, have done. I'm glad that you enjoyed the Dean and Hestia dynamic. There is a general perception that Hestia is old, but canonicallt, all that can be,said of her in terms,of,appearance is that she's pink cheeked and does not appear older than Tonks. That's all I need to make her my own. Anyway, typing this out on my phone really sucks, so I will just leave youwith a giant sqee and a thank you for your continued support. •heart• ~Jess

Name: dahtonen (Signed) · Date: 12/23/10 22:50 · For: Chapter 1
Honestly, Jess, I had actually read this last week and just forgot to post a review. Overall, as with all of your works, I thought it was great! I do have one question...in all the times I have read DH I was under the impression the Hestia was a lot older than you have her here. Does it say and I just didnt pay close enough attention? Dont get me wrong, I am not complaining in any way, just a little curious. Like I said, though, this is once again another one of your great works!

Author's Response:

Hehe, this is canon trickery on my part, I will admit. Both in DH and in alternate canon information, Hestia isn't noted as having a specific age. The only age indicator is in OotP, when Harry observes that Tonks appears to be the youngest of the group come to take him away from Number Four Privet Drive. All that says is that she looks older than Tonks... nothing more. I therefore decided that, since I haven't really liked Dean paired with any of the canon Gryffindors, that a shift in perspectives was in order and that I should think outside of the box. And then I thought, "What the hell -- why not?" and picked Hestia. The fact that her canon physical description happens to match that of MNFF user hestiajones, one of my favourite people on teh site, may or may not have anything to do with it. :X

Thanks for the review and the sustained interest in my stories. It truly does make my day. 


Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 11/06/10 20:02 · For: Chapter 1
Ah Jess, you do know how to write the inner angst, don't you? Poor Dean! I can't believe Seamus died in the final battle! That was very sad. But--life goes on, and so did Dean, and I hope he's happy. :)
Nice job with little backstory details - Dean's family, Quidditch, etc. - it really adds depth. And a very nice take on who Hestia Jones might have really been.
Lucky Natalie, it's a lovely fic!
~Gina :)

Author's Response:

Angst is my thing. I think it might comprise about 10% of my body chemistry, actually. As is positing scenarios as to what didn't not happen. :D

Plus, it's odd how Hestia's canon description isn't unlike a certain Muggle girl who has ensnared your beloved Prongs.

Lovely visit, Twin!


Name: hermy008 (Signed) · Date: 11/06/10 19:03 · For: Chapter 1
i think it is unusual, but in a good way. :) nice job, and keep writing!

Author's Response:

Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. Have a nice night.


Name: hestiajones (Signed) · Date: 11/06/10 8:59 · For: Chapter 1
Oh, you know how I love this. :)

Dean/Anyone makes me happy in general, but this pairing really surprised me. I wasn’t expecting it at all. But you did it, didn’t you? You pulled it off. Nothing about this was incredulous. You showed they both had something in common, a terrible experience which would pull them together. It took time, but when they finally get together, I was smiling in relief. Something about it felt just right.

Your characterization was spot on. I have always thought of post-War Dean as reserved and somewhat moody; we can see him heading that way in DH. There is a sort of loneliness in him which makes me ache. That Dean is here.

Hestia was lovely, and so close to how I pictured her. Brave, yet funny. She seemed right for Dean, and I hope they had a good relationship.

Lastly, thank you for this amazing birthday present. :D I have such great friends, and you’re one of the very best. LOVE YOU!



Author's Response:

I was just relieved you didn't go 'wtf' when you read it. I've never written Dean before, so I'm glad you liked my portrayal. I would think that , having probably witnessed Ted Tonks's murder and that he had been imprisoned in Malfoy Manor, he would have some bitterness issues, as would anyone. I wanted him to be himself, but not entirely. 

Blad you liked it, dear, and I'm happy we could make your birthday a happy one.


Name: Siriussirius (Signed) · Date: 11/02/10 8:19 · For: Chapter 1
Hello! :D Interesting pairing you've got there! I'd never have imagined Dean and Hestia actually forming a romantic relationship, but I really like how you engineered their encounter! Rather than a love-at-first-sight kind of thing, they actually bond through tragedy, seeing each other through recovery. The notion of these two unconnected (in the Potter world) people getting together sort of weird-ed me out initially, but you pulled it off wonderfully:D Thanks for sharing!

Author's Response:

I'm glad you liked the story. I know the pairing is way out in left field, but some of the best ones are pairings you never contemplated. I suppose the idea of a pleasant surprise makes it worth a shot. Post-battle recuperation would probably be dealt with in various ways, such as immersing oneself in family, cutting oneself off from the world, drink, sex, or just pretending everything is all right. The ones who found someone out of all that are truly the lucky ones. I felt like writing a hopeful story. :)

Thanks for reading and reviewing. As always, it made my day. :D


Name: xxbabewithbrainsxx (Signed) · Date: 10/31/10 15:30 · For: Chapter 1
I agree with the end notes. I could never call Dean/Hestia bizarre but it's certainly one that I've never heard of before, that's for sure! I liked the setting at the beginning, how it was during the war and then it moved forwards, and the fact that Dean thought at first that they had nothing in common but actually they had loads. I have to say, though, how old is the Hestia in your head? 25? The same age as Natalie/hestiajones?

Oh, last thing, Hestia's comment about Dean's jawline made me smile. I've got a thing for guys' jaws too...


Author's Response:

Hi Soraya!

I suppose this pairing popped into my head when I was trying to think of Natalie's favourite characters. I remembered that she loved Dean, and I was then on a quest to write him with someone else besides the normal ones. This is just how it came out.

Yes, in this fic, I had her around 25, but not so much because I wanted her to be of similar age as Natalie (which she is), but more because I didn't want her to seem like a cougar, lol. And the jaw thing is an artist thing. Artists are sucker for beautiful bone structure.

I'm glad you enjoyed the story (at least I think you did). Thanks for the review.


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