Reviews For Sand Castles
Reviewer: Whitlie
Date: 12/31/10 12:31
Chapter: Sand Castles

D'aww, that's adorable. : )

Author's Response: Thank you. ^_^

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 12/27/10 6:09
Chapter: Sand Castles

That was so adorable! I could picture little Ginny and little Draco playing together at the beach. I think she was more than his first friend--maybe his first love. You almost have to feel sorry for how Draco must have grown up as an only child. Cinnamon freckles and vermilion hair sound so exotic. Yes, I did finally get my rum but I've been too busy to enjoy much of it:D I think I'm going to start over on Plan B. I enjoyed it so much I want to read all of it again, now that it's finished.

Author's Response: Lol. I knew you got your rum. Hehe. I must say that I do enjoy writing Draco and Ginny as kids - and, yes, you cannot help but feel sorry for Draco. Luckily Ginny is there for him in the ficlet. ^_~

Thank you so much for the review, and I'm happy that you're going to read Plan B again. It's one of my favourite stories that I've written.

I hope your holidays are going well. ^_^

Reviewer: FawkesToTheRescue
Date: 12/04/10 20:06
Chapter: Sand Castles

This is such an incredibly sweet story! I loved it!

Author's Response: Aww, thank you. I'm glad you liked it. ^^

Reviewer: Writ Encore
Date: 10/24/10 12:01
Chapter: Sand Castles

Lia,

All right, you’re pulling me out of work to reminiscence on childhood. This is so reminding me of Pensacola Beach, and the first paragraph just draws you in. The dirty, not dirty complex is a thoughtful comparison that would not have occurred to me in such detail, but now that you have me thinking of the grainy sand and the slippery, dark sand right by the meeting points of waters, which is a nice picture. Of course, when the white kid with freckles comes to mind, the term ‘alabaster’ comes to mind; I had originally made that correlation stupidly with ‘albino’ once before, but those things happen, and that really, really is white. Alabaster makes me think of an architectural sculpture, and I don’t know if you indeed intended that effect with such detail, but it work. The lightness that you add these details so that we get hints of these characters is done rather nicely. They’re subtle and not flowery.

For Draco, I think that it’s rather a tragedy that when you consider how he has been socialized, there would have been a tendency for his parents to have kept him away from most children till they got the background check. It’s not just that he’s an only kid and Mummy and Daddy have too much gold filling their pockets; he’d be stuck round the governess or something. The fact that he doesn’t know how to act round age five shows the trepidation. His parents would absolutely be in line with saying, ‘Oh, no, you can’t play with those kids because they’re not from a good family and you don’t want to end up with them.’ Shocking, really, when you think traces of that are still floating round.

He sounds a little older than a year from her. I don’t have any bits that I can point out, you know, and now that I think of it, there might not have been any ages listed, but Ginny sounds to be round three or four depending on the language factor. The mannerisms that he has as little boy are so interesting if you think about socialization, and he is debating whether he should act. It seems a little weird that he kind of sounds like a miniature adult all the way through, you know? It’s not like Draco is mistreated or held tightly by the hand; either way, with the parents not there, perhaps he would have slipped earlier. Maybe not. It’s scary to think he’s that conditioned or trained so early. It’s like he needs to look over his shoulder and reference. That’s a behavior of a younger kid, but I was kind of expecting his mother to be nearby and him just looking … waiting for that approval. I was so waiting for that, Lia.

He’s like, ‘Well, yeah, okay’. It’s cute, especially the childhood voice and seeing as he rolls up his sleeves. It’s subtly freckled with cute.

Nice.

Keep writing. I envy thy cuteness and insight.

Kuri

Author's Response: Wow, epic review, Jenn. I am honoured. ^_^

//For Draco, I think that itís rather a tragedy that when you consider how he has been socialized, there would have been a tendency for his parents to have kept him away from most children till they got the background check. //

Yes, you really do pity him in some ways. It's no wonder that he turns out the way he does. :(

//He sounds a little older than a year from her. I donít have any bits that I can point out, you know, and now that I think of it, there might not have been any ages listed, but Ginny sounds to be round three or four depending on the language factor.//

Yes, Ginny's four here, and Draco's five. I kind of wanted to show the difference of parenting, in a way. Molly was busy with all her other kids, she couldn't exactly teach Ginny proper speech at the age of four, whereas Draco's parents would have had him conditioned - he would have mimicked them as well.

//Itís like he needs to look over his shoulder and reference. Thatís a behavior of a younger kid, but I was kind of expecting his mother to be nearby and him just looking Ö waiting for that approval. I was so waiting for that, Lia. //

You are very correct. The problem with this ficlet is that it's part of a bigger story (it's a flashback). Narcissa /should/ have been there - or, at the very least, his nanny.

Thank you so much for the awesome review, Jenn. I definitely have some things to reflect upon when I decide to write and post this story as a whole. I'm glad you liked its cuteness though. ^_~

~Lia

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