Reviews For Don't Tell Me
Reviewer: sarahmustwrite
Date: 10/01/11 20:59
Chapter: Don't Tell Me

Oooh, I like it. I like it a lot. I get a real sense of Ginny here -- her fire, her determination. Having read your Arthur/Molly stuff, I definitely see a similarity between her and her mother. The bit about her mother is a little jarring to me, though. The rest of the poem is definitely set in the moment, whereas the end shifts the focus, throwing me off a little. Just a thought.

Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, the bit about Molly is different. *shrugs* This poem really isn't that good. It was my first Harry Potter poem, and probably the fifth of my life.

Reviewer: WeasleyMom
Date: 04/06/11 18:27
Chapter: Don't Tell Me

Ah, I did not know you were a poet. ;) This is so interesting. It was about Ginny, and I really liked it. (That's saying something for me. I like her in canon, but seldom in the world of fanfic.) I think you've captured her spirit here... she is brave, and rather tough, but also afraid of considering that Harry is dead and of losing her family.



The last two lines kind of disrupted the flow for me, but you should take that with a GALLON of salt because I know zilch about poetry. I just know I enjoyed reading this. :)

Author's Response: You know, this was the first HP poem I ever wrote, and before I wrote it I had only ever written maybe... three other poems. But now that I look it over again, I quite agree: I don't like the last two lines either. I think I'll remove them. Thanks for the review, Lori!

Reviewer: hogwartsbookwormsister
Date: 11/28/10 17:10
Chapter: Don't Tell Me

I like it!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you do.

Reviewer: decdraft
Date: 10/12/10 8:25
Chapter: Don't Tell Me

Very nice! Ginny is one of my favorites - and you captured her very well. Debbie

Author's Response: Thank you, Debbie. I appreciate your review.

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 10/12/10 3:27
Chapter: Don't Tell Me

Hello,

This is rather good. I think you've captured Ginny pretty well in her resilience and her understanding that she too can aid the cause by restarting Dumbledore's army. Your first line 'Don't tell me not to cry' had me twitching a bit because I think of Ginny as a character who doesn't cry ... unless she's by herself. However I was reassured byt your second line where she's belligerently assuring us that we won;t see her cry.

I loved the lines where she's talking to her mum. I felt a little tear form in my eyes at that point.

Hmm, I think I'd have preferred the poem to end at that point and not have the last two lines. Ending with her worries about Molly made it more poignant, although ending with Harry makes the poem more hopeful, so it's very much a personal choice.

Anyway, I like this very much and hope you write more poems. Have you checked out Poetry Anyone, yet? ~Carole~

Author's Response: Carole,

My goodness, you thought it was good? Well, then, thank you. I do not claim to be a poet in the least. I thought it was fair, but not that good... So, thank you.

With the first line, I imagined Ginny looking out a window or something, and Neville thinks she's crying, and he, being the sweet awkward soul that he is, tries to comfort her, telling her not to cry. Of course, in my mind, Ginny doesn't react well, because she isn't crying, no matter how much she might like to.

The lines about Molly were rather spur of the moment, actually. I thought of them right before I submitted the poem.

And lastly, yeah, I've looked at Poetry Anyone, but, like I said, I'm no poet. I don't know where this poem came from. I can count the poems I've written in my life on one hand...

Anyway, thank you very much for reviewing, Carole. I'm glad you enjoyed my first HP poem.

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