Reviews For Hope
Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 10/13/10 16:47
Chapter: Hope

I liked that very much! I often find free verse difficult to follow, but there was something about how this was organized that made it very easy to read. It described the situation very well, and built up to a very good ending. I only wonder how the last line would read if it were 'Sirius Black would not give up' instead. It sort of looks to the future a bit more, which was the feeling I got from the rest of the poem. It's just a thought. I liked this, nice job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you SO much! I'm glad you liked it. I liked your idea about the last line also. I hadn't really thought that way about it. Thanks again for reading and reviewing :)

Reviewer: msk8
Date: 10/11/10 21:31
Chapter: Hope

Eeeelllizzzzaaaabbbeeettthhh!!!! I love your poem. :D My favorite lines are probably
"He sat there, day after day, with only his thoughts for company.
Thoughts and memories...
Of people.
Places.
Times."
It's just so crisp and to the point. The whole poem is. Very impactful.
:D Megan

Author's Response: Thank you for my first review ever!!! I'm really glad you enjoyed it. The first line that you mentioned: "He sat there, day after day, with only his thoughts for company." was the line that I thought of that got me started on this poem!

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