Reviewer: September December
Date: 12/04/10 18:17
Chapter: Of Death Threats and Disturbing Kisses

Wow, this is really good! Update soon! :)

Author's Response: alas, the site did not accept my third chapter and i'm too busy to work on it some more... :( if you want to continue reading the fanfic though, you can find it either on fanfiction.net or schnoogle.com ... on both of those sights it was accepted

Reviewer: padfoot2116
Date: 10/20/10 17:27
Chapter: Scorpius's Idea of Fun

mmm i love scorpius! keep writing please!

Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much for the review. I'm really sorry this wasn't updated sooner. I have to explain. This was the third site that I posted my story on, and while it was being looked at for validation, I kind of forgot about it. I will update as often and as consistently as the site will allow me from now on, so look for the next chapter, and review that as well! =]

Reviewer: iLuna17
Date: 10/18/10 17:35
Chapter: Scorpius's Idea of Fun

I loved it. I think that it is fun and upbeat. But. . . Albus does not strike me as the uptight kind of guy. He seems the most like Harry, who is not in anyway, shape or form someone like Hermione, like this Albus is.

Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much for the review. I'm really sorry this wasn't updated sooner. I have to explain. This was the third site that I posted my story on, and while it was being looked at for validation, I kind of forgot about it. I will update as often and as consistently as the site will allow me from now on, so look for the next chapter, and review that as well! =] As for Albus being like Hermione, well, he's not entirely like her. He is a little bit more uptight and cautious than Harry, but I mean, we only saw a couple of pages of him in the series, and at that time he was only eleven. I hope you will continue to read on and give feedback.

Reviewer: Padfoot Patronus
Date: 10/07/10 3:24
Chapter: Scorpius's Idea of Fun

No criticism at all, Thani! You provided for a highly entertaining read. And I'll try my best to deliver a comprehnsive review as I recover myself. That was love, darling. My first concern as can be reasonably expected from many (I hope)of your potential reviewers is whether Scorpius is cut to be a Gryffindor. Its your story, however, and if you justify his house well, I'm good. But this is a important choice. So, please dont turn it just for the sake of it. It could be very very interesting if you wanted.

I love the dynamics of Albus and Scorpius. Since you start out in the seventh year, I really hope you'd show us some really monumental scenes to give an idea of exactly what their friendship is made of. In a short span, I think you credibly build several characters, including Albus, Scorpius and Rose. If you have been working on this chapter for a while, kudos for a job well done. If this was just a spurn of the moment thing, well, good for you!

I noted how Scorpius seemed to be the more impulsive of the duo, but loved it in the line when you show us that he frequently rubs off on Albus. You caught boys very well I thought. I saw that you repeated he word grin a lot, because Scorpius does a lot of it dont you think? And yet, I cant help grinning along with him. It was contagious. He's a heart-breaker. your Mr Malfoy.

Albus fascinated me very much. You show that he's a captain, but he himself seems to be captained a lot by his best friend. Which is just so adorable. You can see where his hesitation and wariness is coming from. I could easily pick up Harry in him, Hermione in Rose, in a reminscent sort of way, and not a deliberate way these things usually are shown to be offspring stories.

I love also how Albus compliments Scorpius on his feint. Is there a teeny possibility that Scorpius is really good at Quidditch than Albus. Oh the potential of this story line and characterisation. Merlin!

I'm a highly imaginative person and I make scenes in my mind a lot of the time. They are dramatic and exciting and scandalous but I sometimes find the right words dont spill on the paper from me. It varies from time to time, really. The concluding scene of this chapter was win. I cant crit it, because I just enjoyed the idea of it too much to view it without bias.

Brilliant. Fav. Waiting anxiously. Come again.

-Akay-

Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much for the review. I'm really sorry this wasn't updated sooner. I have to explain. This was the third site that I posted my story on, and while it was being looked at for validation, I kind of forgot about it. I will update as often and as consistently as the site will allow me from now on, so look for the next chapter. This review was AMAZING. Thank you so much for it, i'm really glad that someone really enjoyed it and caught all these small facets of the chapter. I'll be eagerly waiting to hear what you think of the next chapter. =D

Reviewer: hermione721
Date: 10/06/10 20:50
Chapter: Scorpius's Idea of Fun

I really like this. Please keep writnig

Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much for the review. I'm really sorry this wasn't updated sooner. I have to explain. This was the third site that I posted my story on, and while it was being looked at for validation, I kind of forgot about it. I will update as often and as consistently as the site will allow me from now on, so look for the next chapter, and review that as well! =]

Reviewer: hermione721
Date: 10/06/10 20:50
Chapter: Scorpius's Idea of Fun

I really like this. Please keep writnig

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