Reviews For Mirror
Reviewer: CoolCatElly
Date: 09/28/10 9:45
Chapter: Poem

Hi there :-)

I really like the fact that the tone of the poem and the subject matter is a little contradictory. Having rhyme in a short poem like along with the obvious references to the fairy tale makes it feel like the narrator is mocking himself, and it seems quite bitter and twisted in a way.

I do think that you could have made the poem a bit longer though.

xxx
Elene

Author's Response: Hi. I'm glad you liked the poem! I think it must have been my subconciousness that decided it should rhyme, because I don't remember doing so. (but that might also have been because it was three in the morning when I wrote this)I do think it is better that way. I think that I could have made it a bit longer, but I also like it the length it is. But who knows, maybe I'll edit in more! Megan

Reviewer: inspirations
Date: 09/27/10 13:11
Chapter: Poem

Hey!

I'm loving the play on 'mirror, mirror, on the wall'. I love how you've manipulated the words. On that count I think it's great, though I can't personally see Draco in the light you've painted him. First stanza, yes, but I don't think Draco would perceive himself as wholly evil as he goes on to say in the next stanza. Of course this is crafted around another rhyme, but I think another word choice would've worked better for the character of Draco possibly. Weak, maybe...? I don't know. He couldn't kill Dumbledore -- that says a lot, imo. That's entirely my view on Draco's character though, and I appreciate that you might see him differently.

Other than my ideas on the characterisation, though, I do like the spin you've put on this. Nice job :) xx

Author's Response: Thanks for the reveiw! Hmmmm... I can see what you're saying about his character. But I think that my charecterization is probable if you throw in five or ten years since the war. He might see himself completely differently. I imagined it five or ten years later, but I suppose I wasn't very clear about that. Again, thank you so much for the reveiw!

Megan

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