Reviews For Mirror
Reviewer: CoolCatElly
Date: 09/28/10 9:45
Chapter: Poem

Hi there :-)

I really like the fact that the tone of the poem and the subject matter is a little contradictory. Having rhyme in a short poem like along with the obvious references to the fairy tale makes it feel like the narrator is mocking himself, and it seems quite bitter and twisted in a way.

I do think that you could have made the poem a bit longer though.

xxx
Elene

Author's Response: Hi. I'm glad you liked the poem! I think it must have been my subconciousness that decided it should rhyme, because I don't remember doing so. (but that might also have been because it was three in the morning when I wrote this)I do think it is better that way. I think that I could have made it a bit longer, but I also like it the length it is. But who knows, maybe I'll edit in more! Megan

Reviewer: inspirations
Date: 09/27/10 13:11
Chapter: Poem

Hey!

I'm loving the play on 'mirror, mirror, on the wall'. I love how you've manipulated the words. On that count I think it's great, though I can't personally see Draco in the light you've painted him. First stanza, yes, but I don't think Draco would perceive himself as wholly evil as he goes on to say in the next stanza. Of course this is crafted around another rhyme, but I think another word choice would've worked better for the character of Draco possibly. Weak, maybe...? I don't know. He couldn't kill Dumbledore -- that says a lot, imo. That's entirely my view on Draco's character though, and I appreciate that you might see him differently.

Other than my ideas on the characterisation, though, I do like the spin you've put on this. Nice job :) xx

Author's Response: Thanks for the reveiw! Hmmmm... I can see what you're saying about his character. But I think that my charecterization is probable if you throw in five or ten years since the war. He might see himself completely differently. I imagined it five or ten years later, but I suppose I wasn't very clear about that. Again, thank you so much for the reveiw!

Megan

You must login (register) to review.
Information
Find out everything you need to know about the site right here.


We have stories and authors in this archive.

:

RSS
Choose Theme:
SOCIAL MEDIA
     
MOST RECENT
Dark Enough To See The Stars by Oregonian 1st-2nd Years
Scorpius is looking for answers in the constellation that bears his name. He...
Four Secrets by hestiajones 6th-7th Years
In a world where Peter does not hero-worship James, James’s life foreshadows...
The Purity of the Turf by Nagini Riddle 3rd-5th Years
"Only know you love her when you let her go...And you let her go." -Let Her...
FEATURED
Etched in Gold by Cirelondiel 1st-2nd Years
"It’s like a safe place, somewhere to watch the world, somewhere...
The Elder Tree by the opaleye 1st-2nd Years
It would have been no surprise to see Vernon Dursley sitting on the frosty concrete...
Perfect First by Hermiones Kneazle 1st-2nd Years
Hermione is at her first dance and on her first date, but the night for firsts...
blackbird over the dark field by psijupiter 3rd-5th Years
AU. Severus and Remus forge a damaged and damaging relationship in the aftermath...
Turn to Stone by iLuna17 1st-2nd Years
One summer's night in Hogwarts, two statues are given one night to be human.
Ashes of the Past by minnabird 1st-2nd Years
Viktor carries the memory of Grindelwald's path of destruction, passed down...
What War Takes by WeasleyMom 6th-7th Years
War takes things and keeps on taking them, and the things it takes don't come...
The Observer Effect by Squibstress 6th-7th Years
Minerva is a watcher. Mostly, she watches Severus. She sees through a glass...
CATEGORIES